Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Sleeping Shadows"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
10 total reviews
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Pearl.
This is a nice atmospheric write. The reader is treated to a good visual with your excellent descriptions. I can just imagine those windswept pine trees as the old lady struggles for the last time with her wheelbarrow.
A nice addition to Tiny Tales of Terror.
:) Mel.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Hi Pearl.
This is a nice atmospheric write. The reader is treated to a good visual with your excellent descriptions. I can just imagine those windswept pine trees as the old lady struggles for the last time with her wheelbarrow.
A nice addition to Tiny Tales of Terror.
:) Mel.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Thankyou write hand blue for reading and for your lovely comments, much appreciated.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Pearl - you are certainly getting into the swing of things with these stories of yours. This is written very well. You have proved that it does not take a lot of words to create fear. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy x I think Dean must have an unlimited store of these frightening pictures. LOL.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Hi Pearl - you are certainly getting into the swing of things with these stories of yours. This is written very well. You have proved that it does not take a lot of words to create fear. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy x I think Dean must have an unlimited store of these frightening pictures. LOL.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Yes I don't know where he gets them from but he finds what is most appropriate. I've enjoyed doing a couple of these little tiny tales, its been fun. Thankyou Dorothy for reading and for you generous remarks. Much appreciated.
valda
Comment from Bill Schott
As I read this story a second time, I get the sense that Selina has been dead for quite a while and her spirit is still out collecting wood although she is beyond the need. Other than that, the rest of the story leaves a bit of a hole in my full comprehension.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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As I read this story a second time, I get the sense that Selina has been dead for quite a while and her spirit is still out collecting wood although she is beyond the need. Other than that, the rest of the story leaves a bit of a hole in my full comprehension.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Sorry for the hole it left you in, but I appreciate you reading and your comments. thanks very much.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
The formatting is slightly off, splitting sentences from the first sentence.
everything about it - needs a full stop
I enjoyed this one. Very creepy with a good atmosphere and tone.
Beware those slithering shadows.
GMG
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Hi there,
The formatting is slightly off, splitting sentences from the first sentence.
everything about it - needs a full stop
I enjoyed this one. Very creepy with a good atmosphere and tone.
Beware those slithering shadows.
GMG
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Yes, have fixed that formatting. Must admit I had so much trouble getting the artwork on I forgot to re-read. Thankyou for reading and for your comments, and am pleased you enjoyed. thanks again.
Comment from livelylinda
Pearl Edwards: what a good job you have done with this story. A reader must pay attention because you have woven the shapes and shadows slithered into the story so well, it is easy to miss. The logs that kept burning and the chair which kept rocking . . . all things making the hairs on the back of the neck stand up. Dean is creating more monsters . . .livelylinda
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Pearl Edwards: what a good job you have done with this story. A reader must pay attention because you have woven the shapes and shadows slithered into the story so well, it is easy to miss. The logs that kept burning and the chair which kept rocking . . . all things making the hairs on the back of the neck stand up. Dean is creating more monsters . . .livelylinda
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thankyou so much livelylinda for this great review, much appreciated. Yes, Dean has been inspiring these monsters.
Comment from Halfree
I think your Tiny Tales of Terror are quite interesting and fun to read. However I think this one needs some work. Opening sentence perhaps "Like Screaming Banshees the winds...." Think the closing sentence and the use of Opalescent twice within a few sentences is a little over used. The closing sentence could be left out, does not add much to the story.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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I think your Tiny Tales of Terror are quite interesting and fun to read. However I think this one needs some work. Opening sentence perhaps "Like Screaming Banshees the winds...." Think the closing sentence and the use of Opalescent twice within a few sentences is a little over used. The closing sentence could be left out, does not add much to the story.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thankyou Halfree for reading and for your comments.
Comment from tfawcus
The switch from normalcy to death is sudden and unexplained, leaving much to the imagination of the reader. Perhaps a haunted holiday cottage. The repetition of 'Opalescent shapes, shadows...' adds to eerie effect and suggests that these are long-term residents of the cottage. An interesting tiny tale of terror. The loose ends, such as the eternal flames keep the story ticking over in the mind of the reader.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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The switch from normalcy to death is sudden and unexplained, leaving much to the imagination of the reader. Perhaps a haunted holiday cottage. The repetition of 'Opalescent shapes, shadows...' adds to eerie effect and suggests that these are long-term residents of the cottage. An interesting tiny tale of terror. The loose ends, such as the eternal flames keep the story ticking over in the mind of the reader.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thankyou tfawcus for reading and for your comments. 'm pleased the loose ends has keot your mind ticking over, that's good. Thanks again, much appreciated.
Comment from Michaelk
Engaging and creepy, especially the image of her bones rocking away into eternity. Very atmospheric and well described.
I think I would've stretched out her death a bit. Make her dream of dark shadows that were covering her mouth and laughing, then have her eyes spring open and gasp her last breath. That's just my opinion.
You had a couple spacing issues and forgot a period at the end of one sentence.
Other than that, this was a wonderful tale of horror. Good job.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Engaging and creepy, especially the image of her bones rocking away into eternity. Very atmospheric and well described.
I think I would've stretched out her death a bit. Make her dream of dark shadows that were covering her mouth and laughing, then have her eyes spring open and gasp her last breath. That's just my opinion.
You had a couple spacing issues and forgot a period at the end of one sentence.
Other than that, this was a wonderful tale of horror. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Yes I have fixed those errors, I hope. Thankyou Michaelk for reading and for your comments. I know you would have been more graphic with Selina's death throes, but then it would have been your story., but I will think about that for next time. Thanks again for reading.
Comment from Jackarrie
I loved reading this short story about Selena, while I was reading I was envying her life style of the outdoors,and thinking how healthy she must be. But I was wrong, she died happy in her favorite chair.Only the last two lines had a hint of strange
Well written.
mary
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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I loved reading this short story about Selena, while I was reading I was envying her life style of the outdoors,and thinking how healthy she must be. But I was wrong, she died happy in her favorite chair.Only the last two lines had a hint of strange
Well written.
mary
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thankyou Mary for reading and for your comments. Sorry I spoilt your envy of her lifestyle, but then itwouldn't have been a tiny tale of terror. Much appreciated.
Comment from Eigle Rull
This was an interesting post, my friend. I think it was to short, however, that's just me. It was interesting and it held my attention just fine. I'm glad I read it.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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This was an interesting post, my friend. I think it was to short, however, that's just me. It was interesting and it held my attention just fine. I'm glad I read it.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thankyou Eigle Rull for reading and for your comments. I too am glad you read it. thanks again.
