Comment from danpald

Excellent

The heart is fickle in the dream
When love is to become reality
Soon to learn that others touch
The same lips you long to suck

Well the time is better before
Not after the vows are sown
So give thanks to the shed so near
That gave a view of the heart laid bare

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015

Thanks for your poetic review!

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a spot on syllable and line count. You render a humorous take on the end result of bad relationship choices in this well penned piece. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thank you!

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a sad but humorous poem about the break-up of a relationship. This man was hiding what he was and it is better that this happened before the wedding than after.

I have never seen a rhyming richtameter. You did it well.

Good luck in the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

reply by dragonpoet on 07-Jun-2015

Any time

dragonpoet

Comment from gazzagodbod

Excellent

Oh you silly woman
you have got it wrong

It's not what it seems at all
Don't make a dance and song

Oh you silly woman
You could not be slower

I caught poor Tom as he rushed in
And fell over the lawn mower.

Lol you inspired me xxgazzaxx

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015

Thanks for the fine poetic response to my piece of silliness.