Reviews from

Short

Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "A Period Piece"
Shorter stories

21 total reviews 
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Another Shakespeare scene! You must know his plays really well, Bill. But I think even he might object to a .357 magnum revolver being used in his script, especially as it's the wife playing the part!! Lol. You are a very dark humourist, Bill. This is another fabulous story. Well done! :)) Sandra x

 Comment Written 07-May-2022


reply by the author on 07-May-2022
    This was a zany idea suggesting that a man who wanted his wife gone might push an obvious murder scenario like this. Thank you.
Comment from Mary H-W
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Intriguing. I'd love to read a longer version of this story as written by you, Bill. How did the contest go? Did you win?

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
    Thank you for reviewing, Mary. I received zero votes in the contest.
reply by Mary H-W on 04-Jun-2015
    Darn. I don't know why. (Do you ever vote for your own work?)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
    I thought that was forbidden.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

It sounds like someone was confused or just wanted to get rid of Jane. I enjoyed reading your story. You did a good job.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
    Thank you, Okie, for the excellent review.
Comment from petalangela
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Foiled!!! All that insurance money will not be collected. Act two re write. This is so wired it totally appeals to my totally wired sense of humour

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
    Thank you, Petal, for the excellent review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Cute story. I like the format and the painting. The story line is ok and it has a good ending, kind of funny. The character development is ok. The format is good. It meets the 100 words requirement.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
    Thank you, GBR, for reviewing this.
Comment from sibhus
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Yeah, I think this would be a little obvious to the audience, ha, ha. A well written story well within the hundred word limit. Good piece with a nice little twist. This is an excellent addition to the contest. and good luck.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
    Thank you, sibhus, for the excellent review.
Comment from Patti R.
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is a pretty good story, considering how few words you were allotted.
I found it to be a bit predictable, though, and I'm not sure how Hector thought he could get away with accidentally offing his wife during a rehearsal with one of the loudest guns made!

Good luck in the contest.

Patti

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
    Thank you, Patti, for the excellent review. Hector is a tool all around.
Comment from scd41
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

The idea of Hector as Othello actually killing his wife playing the role of Desdemona in the theatre is a great piece of imagination displayed by you as a writer of the story.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
    Thank you, scd, for the excellent review.
Comment from tfawcus
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Hector doesn't sound like the brightest candle on the cake! It looks as though he'll have to find another way to contrive an accident. Gordo seems to have his measure all right.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
    Thank you, Tony, for the excellent review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct word count and a complete story. This is quite inventive to play off a play about murder turning it into a real life scenario. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
    Thank you, MA, for the excellent review.