Comment from petalangela

Excellent

Funny oh so damned funny so typical of a dad laughing tears falling from my eyes. Loved this so much
It deserves to win

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

From your lips to the voters check-mark. Thanks.

Comment from Muffins

Excellent

I enjoy stories that make you believe something awful is happening and it turns out opposite. I didn't feel taken or played at the ending. It fit perfectly with what was happening. If you took out the sports, this would read as different story. You keep this up right to the end. And it ended so simple yet classic. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks so much.

Comment from sibhus

Excellent

Ha, ha, this was really clever. I liked how you have implied one thing while in fact it was another all together. A very witty well written piece that makes for a great entry for the contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks so much. I can use the luck. Some great entries.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

hahaha... that was a cute little story with a nice ending. Good story line. Good format (I love the picture of the girl, she looks so mischievous) and good character development.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks so much.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Ha ha - I like your short piece
of an over-protective Dad - well
done, my friend - this must surely
be a winner.


good luck to you.

Margaret

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Well, I sure hope so, but there are some great entries racking up well-deserved votes. Thanks.

Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

Author: oh, I loved this little story! I got quite a chuckle at the surprise ending. A girl playing football has a lot of respect to earn . . . being roughly tackled is how the game is played. Dad interfered which did not help her at all. Creative, original and a delight to read with surprise ending. Well done! livelylinda

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks so much. Yes, the girls have always had to pay their dues, but luckily, they seem to be up for the challenge.

Comment from Ekim777

Excellent

In a world of ambiguity how does one define a hero? This poses a moral question. Are we humans the only creatures that kill for sport? Does the urge to kill reside among our instincts? When does the instinct to play and even to love, turn savage? Let the coach have the last word but I assume that humanity is not totally destructive.-Ekim777

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

You raise an interesting philosophy, but it certainly can't be covered in 100 words with literaty and creative aspects expected from entrants to the prompt. Thanks.

Comment from scd41

Excellent

What a sudden twist to the story all made nicely in 100 words. The last line has a great message: "Bob, if you're going to let your daughter play football," the coach shouted, "you're going to have to expect she'll be tackled."

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

There's a nice build-up to the eventual anticlimax here! It's nice to see an over-protective dad on the sidelines for a change, rather than the parents from hell that treat each game as if it is the Grand Final!

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks, I appreciate the read.

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct word count and a complete story. You execute an excellent and unexpected turn in the events as it seems like a rape then ends up being merely a tackle. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

I appreciate the read. Thanks.