Beautiful Death
Viewing comments for Chapter 10014 "The happening"from birth I have longed for death
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Coral. Very well done mate, you are begininng to master this poetry thing now. It is getting better and better with every post and I am proud of you....
A couple of suggestions but they are no big deal...
"Each time life
new began
hope to(-to)
followed again"
"pride makes us
pay our way
we cannot say
no thanks
ill(I'II) be on my way"
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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G'day Coral. Very well done mate, you are begininng to master this poetry thing now. It is getting better and better with every post and I am proud of you....
A couple of suggestions but they are no big deal...
"Each time life
new began
hope to(-to)
followed again"
"pride makes us
pay our way
we cannot say
no thanks
ill(I'II) be on my way"
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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I love hearing from you!
I wish your kind help would stick in my mind.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
In spite of the melancholy of the poem, it is quite beautiful, and full of a lot of truth and feeling. I think a lot of us feel trapped by a situation or person from time to time, but in the end, you come through it with a wonderful attitude. Still a mother, it rings through all your poetry and stories. You must be a wonderful person to call, Mother!
Rhonda
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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In spite of the melancholy of the poem, it is quite beautiful, and full of a lot of truth and feeling. I think a lot of us feel trapped by a situation or person from time to time, but in the end, you come through it with a wonderful attitude. Still a mother, it rings through all your poetry and stories. You must be a wonderful person to call, Mother!
Rhonda
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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You give me too much credit.
Thank's
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No, you are a great person, and have shared your own feelings, that many of us can relate to,
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good job Cbat!! Nice poem expressing genuine feelings and memories. Free verse with good sound. Nice format, easy to read. I am very proud of you.
Your friend,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Good job Cbat!! Nice poem expressing genuine feelings and memories. Free verse with good sound. Nice format, easy to read. I am very proud of you.
Your friend,
Gypsy
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from JourneyHolm
This was a cool poem. I almost didn't recognize the rhyme scheme. It reminded me of a someone on a rights rampage or tirade to define who they are in their mind. There are a lot of powerful lines that speak some deep truth to me throughout this piece. Thank you for sharing. Also, looking at your profile, I am extremely curious what "religion/cult" you were raised in. Care to share?
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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This was a cool poem. I almost didn't recognize the rhyme scheme. It reminded me of a someone on a rights rampage or tirade to define who they are in their mind. There are a lot of powerful lines that speak some deep truth to me throughout this piece. Thank you for sharing. Also, looking at your profile, I am extremely curious what "religion/cult" you were raised in. Care to share?
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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I try to keep a low profile, but am finding myself writing of things that my past and current children could be hurt by.
I was born, raised and married into polygamy. My children were also raised this way.
Most are now free, but I am searching for a daughter.
Thank you for your kind words, I actually have never learned how to write poetry.
Comment from inside echo
A truly sad poem. Sad in so many ways. The loss of such independence, control, life, as it was once known, friends, family and self....dignity, pride, and memories. Getting or rather reaching our oldest years is not a happy journey for many. Sadly. Sad also that missing a days worth of meds can bring you so down, I am sorry you struggle. It, your poem is so descriptive, so full of emotion and heart wrenching. Well written. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
echo
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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A truly sad poem. Sad in so many ways. The loss of such independence, control, life, as it was once known, friends, family and self....dignity, pride, and memories. Getting or rather reaching our oldest years is not a happy journey for many. Sadly. Sad also that missing a days worth of meds can bring you so down, I am sorry you struggle. It, your poem is so descriptive, so full of emotion and heart wrenching. Well written. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
echo
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thank you!
I have taken my meds and now feel silly, feeling sorry for myself.
I have so much to enjoy and be thankful for.
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You are most welcome. Silly is good. Enjoy.