Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

You have penned another adorable counting poem. Oh, the trials of bring a hail stone. The demise of the last hailstone was so unexpected that it make me chuckle. Great end rhyming and cadence to make this fun to read.

 Comment Written 30-May-2015

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reply by the author on 30-May-2015

Thank you so much. I appreciate your time reading/reviewing/commenting on my poem. You are so kind to respond.

Comment from pharp

Excellent

You are a very talented and creative poet, your poems honoring Brooke just keep getting better and better. I have penned an acrostic in her honor, have not posted it yet, it maybe too personal. I'll do another one and decide which to post. You are doing an excellent job my dear, I have enjoyed them all and each deserve a "six" star rating. Blessings my friend. lol Portia

 Comment Written 29-May-2015

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reply by the author on 29-May-2015

Thank you so much. I appreciate your time reading & reviewing my poem. Thanks for the kind comments, too.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This is a delight, jannypan, and certainly highlights Brooke's way with the counting poems. I've always enjoyed hers. You do a great job in this one, and I love the fate you assign to each unfortunate snowflake. Being smashed by a car wheel sounds like the worst fate. Excellent rhyme in this. Great work, and Brooke will be proud. judi

 Comment Written 29-May-2015

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reply by the author on 29-May-2015

Thank you. I appreciate your time reading & reviewing my poem.

reply by judiverse on 29-May-2015

Hi, jannypan. I really enjoyed your counting poem. judi

Comment from emkoutny

Excellent

I never thought about writing a poem about hailstones. It takes on a childlike feeling with the use of the counting like "This Old Man," I like it though. Now I am wondering if Brooke is a chid who is sick. Having a sick friend or relative is so painful because of the helplessness you feel. I like your idea of writing poems for her to cheer her up.

 Comment Written 29-May-2015

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reply by the author on 29-May-2015

Thank you so much. I appreciate your time reading & reviewing my poem. Brooke (adewpearl) is a writer here at FS. She is very accomplished and was recently diagnosed with MS. Look into her profile (her screen name in ( ). Also look at Forum under Profile for more info. Brooke wrote many counting poems. There is a multi author book here on FS that you can add poems to. Thanks for your support.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent counting poem, jannypan. I can't think of a counting poem for her. I know what it would be about. maybe you could write a counting poem about Smiles. the last one is frowning because our friend isn't here. let me know when you finish it, lol

 Comment Written 29-May-2015

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reply by the author on 29-May-2015

Thank you for stopping to read/review my poem.. Your idea is great. I know you could write one, since you are a great writer.

reply by the author on 29-May-2015

Thank you for the inspiration. Please find "Ten Shy Smiles" (on the available poem lists way on the last few pages)

Comment from jules4jesus

Excellent

hay what happened to the sixth star option this was awesome so funny and exciting so easy to read and keep reading it held your attention right until the last and i loved the final line when it got crushed by a car tire i actually laughed out loud i simply couldn't better it going to be your fan and read more of your wonderful poems
interesting how its the number 10 in all of them so many of the childhood memories of singing is 10 like 10 green bottles mm cant think of any more at the moment lol

 Comment Written 29-May-2015

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reply by the author on 29-May-2015

Thank you very much for taking time to read/review my poem. I remember "Ten Little Indians" but they did not do anything.

Comment from cbat

Excellent

I love your writing, each is so fun and well put together.

I would love to have the talent you do for writing.

I look forward to more.

 Comment Written 28-May-2015

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reply by the author on 28-May-2015

Thank you so much. I would love to have your talent for stories. I appreciate your time. Jan

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent poem!! You have given life to the little hailstones! I can see them falling to earth. All your lines rhyme, how do you do it? You and another friend I have, Ferol, have that ability. Me, not so much.

I love the format, the picture, the colors, the font size, well the size could have been bigger for me but that is because Im going blind. :)

gypsy

 Comment Written 28-May-2015

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reply by the author on 28-May-2015

Thank you very much for stopping to read & review. I really appreciate it. I did not want the text too large since the poem was so long. I know you have it in you to rhyme well. Try it. Jan

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello author unique poem about hail stones Your rhyming gave the poem a fun sound and what a great unusual closure .

Smiles and good luck.

Gert

 Comment Written 28-May-2015

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reply by the author on 28-May-2015

Thank you so much. I am glad you took time to read and review my poem.

reply by Gert sherwood on 28-May-2015

You are welcome
Gert

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this about the 10 hailstones, and I am sure Brooke will enjoy it too.
It is a very creative poem full of great descriptions of everything we see around us, and put in a lovely poem.

Well done
Mary

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 Comment Written 28-May-2015

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reply by the author on 28-May-2015

Thank you for the review and kind comments. Jan