Get Well, Brooke!
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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn,
what a magically composed set of thoughts wrapped up within a journey of life's paths and side-tracks... guess we never really know what around the corner for any of us? But, yet another reinforcement to live life to the fullest and never put off to tomorrow, what we should be immersing ourselves in today, hey?
Beautiful work... and all the very best in the sonnet contest, I know Brooke would be impressed with such a work of wordsmith art.
With our thoughts we create,
a clear view,
James vx's
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Hi Sharyn,
what a magically composed set of thoughts wrapped up within a journey of life's paths and side-tracks... guess we never really know what around the corner for any of us? But, yet another reinforcement to live life to the fullest and never put off to tomorrow, what we should be immersing ourselves in today, hey?
Beautiful work... and all the very best in the sonnet contest, I know Brooke would be impressed with such a work of wordsmith art.
With our thoughts we create,
a clear view,
James vx's
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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No, we do not, James, that's for sure.
Bless you!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Selina Stambi
I'll fiercely love the sunlight ... and I'll dance ... love this closing line, Twinnie. It's .. fiercely ... you. I'll dance with you in that sunlight. :)
Flawless iambic pentameter, but such an upbeat, contemporary feel to a classical poetry form.
I think we have a winner here, m'dear.
Big hugs (whizzing in and out!)
xxx
Sonali
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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I'll fiercely love the sunlight ... and I'll dance ... love this closing line, Twinnie. It's .. fiercely ... you. I'll dance with you in that sunlight. :)
Flawless iambic pentameter, but such an upbeat, contemporary feel to a classical poetry form.
I think we have a winner here, m'dear.
Big hugs (whizzing in and out!)
xxx
Sonali
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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"Aloha" Twinnie - oh good, I HOPED you'd like this one dear!!!! Whizzing as always, hmm?
Big hugs
Sharyn
Comment from Ekim777
Within the tight confines of the classic sonnet verse we might have lines that sound a little forced but the poem is brimful of sensitivity and wisdom. It seems to our poet that life is not fair and maybe it isn't. Maybe the dice of fate is loaded against us humans however something good does prevail among us. The final couplet is rather cryptic. I feel the night time is the playground of the poet's soul. -EKim777
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Within the tight confines of the classic sonnet verse we might have lines that sound a little forced but the poem is brimful of sensitivity and wisdom. It seems to our poet that life is not fair and maybe it isn't. Maybe the dice of fate is loaded against us humans however something good does prevail among us. The final couplet is rather cryptic. I feel the night time is the playground of the poet's soul. -EKim777
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Thank you Ekim ! :Sharyn
Comment from RGstar
A lovey tribute. Words beautifully expressed. The image adds an aura of hope.
A lovely gesture to the grand lady of this site.
A worthy write.
Have a good day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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A lovey tribute. Words beautifully expressed. The image adds an aura of hope.
A lovely gesture to the grand lady of this site.
A worthy write.
Have a good day.
RGstar
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Thanks Roy! :)Sharyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Sharyn, that is so lovely, it brings tears to the eyes. How quickly-and easily time can change our loves, not always for the better. Brooke must be in a living hell. I really feel for her. Your poem brings out everything she is, everything she enjoys. Your words, a random whim-a quirk... that is all it took to take her away from us. I don't know if she is still in hospital or in the nursing home now. Miranda hasn't said any more yet. You deserve a 6 for this, my friend, but it will have to be a virtual 6+. ******** Excellent! xsx Sandra.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Sharyn, that is so lovely, it brings tears to the eyes. How quickly-and easily time can change our loves, not always for the better. Brooke must be in a living hell. I really feel for her. Your poem brings out everything she is, everything she enjoys. Your words, a random whim-a quirk... that is all it took to take her away from us. I don't know if she is still in hospital or in the nursing home now. Miranda hasn't said any more yet. You deserve a 6 for this, my friend, but it will have to be a virtual 6+. ******** Excellent! xsx Sandra.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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I really feel for her, too, Sandra. There's nothing one can SAY in these circumstances. M.S is not a pretty fate and I'm still having trouble wrapping my head around 'God's Will' in this world.
Big hugs,
Sharyn
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I have the same problem. I can not for the life of me see, how this can be part of 'the bigger picture', is the devil stronger than God, in that the evil in this world, thrives, and the good people suffer. I don't know anymore, Sharyn. Big hugs back, my friend. xxx
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Oh thank goodness! So many people just don't seem to question when something like this happens, but I SURE do!
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Sharyn, I wish I had a six left mate. This is such a beautiful and gentle poem and an absolutely wonderful tribute to our dear friend Brooke, it is such a sad time. Well done my friend, she'll love this piece as much as I do. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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G'day Sharyn, I wish I had a six left mate. This is such a beautiful and gentle poem and an absolutely wonderful tribute to our dear friend Brooke, it is such a sad time. Well done my friend, she'll love this piece as much as I do. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Hey Fez - thanks so much my dear. And yes, a sadness here, for sure.
:)Sharyn
Comment from danpald
Poems continue to flow
Giving the bouquet form
For the poet in the bed
Searching the health be the norm
Well the time does need also prayer
To send with each poem
That God may grace the life with Love
Giving also His strength
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Poems continue to flow
Giving the bouquet form
For the poet in the bed
Searching the health be the norm
Well the time does need also prayer
To send with each poem
That God may grace the life with Love
Giving also His strength
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Thank you Dan! :)Sharyn
Comment from watergirl
This is wonderfully written. It has many notions to consider about life and time's passing, and the deep living of life. The rhyming / shape / sounding of the poem is creatively done and works extremely well. It is bright with hope but also reminds us of misfortune. So well put together. My favourite line is the last line. It sounds great, and is a powerful reminder to live fully. Nicely ended.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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This is wonderfully written. It has many notions to consider about life and time's passing, and the deep living of life. The rhyming / shape / sounding of the poem is creatively done and works extremely well. It is bright with hope but also reminds us of misfortune. So well put together. My favourite line is the last line. It sounds great, and is a powerful reminder to live fully. Nicely ended.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much watergirl! And blessings for your lovely six!
:)Sharyn
Comment from ravenblack
Earlier, you were speaking of not being able to write one for Brooke because you were angry at the why of it. Well, you have harnessed that anger and have produced a stunning sonnet. Ruled by chance, I'll fiercely love the sunlight and dance- it is all we can do. And all the poems, the outpourings of love may just tip the scales in Brooke's favor. I don't know if it is possible as this is a contest entry, but you should see if it can also be included in Brooke's book.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Earlier, you were speaking of not being able to write one for Brooke because you were angry at the why of it. Well, you have harnessed that anger and have produced a stunning sonnet. Ruled by chance, I'll fiercely love the sunlight and dance- it is all we can do. And all the poems, the outpourings of love may just tip the scales in Brooke's favor. I don't know if it is possible as this is a contest entry, but you should see if it can also be included in Brooke's book.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you Ed - yes, this was the purpose of this piece - i.e. to harness that anger, but do it productively. I included it in her book - Tom said that was fine. It started out just as a sonnet, so I'd put it in as a sonnet entry ... but then as I worked on it, it became a piece for Brooke. I asked Tom if I could take it out of the sonnet 'competition' and put it in the book for Brooke but he said it could be in both. Weird to have something so personal for Brooke as part of a 'competition' though, I thought ...
Comment from Lesley Collier
A wonderful poem of inspiring faith in the goodness of life even as we age until a shadow passes over as we realize the finality of life is just by chance and yet continue to enjoy the sunshine, rainbows, and keep on dancing to the beautiful wonder of life in the now. Well written!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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A wonderful poem of inspiring faith in the goodness of life even as we age until a shadow passes over as we realize the finality of life is just by chance and yet continue to enjoy the sunshine, rainbows, and keep on dancing to the beautiful wonder of life in the now. Well written!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much Lesley! :)Sharyn