Get Well, Brooke!
Viewing comments for Chapter 10005 "Ten Rugged Rocks"Writing for Brooke
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Comment from Lovinia
Hi Jannypan
An excellent counting poem for Brooke. I'm sure she will love it. Not long as your poem is engaging as it unfolds. Great presentation to complement your poem. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Hi Jannypan
An excellent counting poem for Brooke. I'm sure she will love it. Not long as your poem is engaging as it unfolds. Great presentation to complement your poem. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed it. It really was fun to write. I appreciate everything you stated. Thanks for stopping by to read. Please read the other counting poems in my portfolio.
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My pleasure. I love 'rugged rocks'. lol Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment from pharp
As I was reading this beautifully penned poem, before I got to the author's note, I knew it was for Brooke. You did an excellent job in the penning of this poem in her honor.. Excellent rhyming and rhythm and an enjoyable read. I know she will enjoy it. Thanks for sharing/ Portia
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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As I was reading this beautifully penned poem, before I got to the author's note, I knew it was for Brooke. You did an excellent job in the penning of this poem in her honor.. Excellent rhyming and rhythm and an enjoyable read. I know she will enjoy it. Thanks for sharing/ Portia
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thank you for your sweet words. I appreciate your time reading & reviewing my poem. [Please read Ten Shy Smiles] I appreciate everything you said. You are so kind to give up some of your time for me. Jan
Comment from EleanorP
A really enjoyable read, I like the format, which I don't think I've come across before (I am new to the site). I like the fact that it can be read simply as a fun story, or can be delved into for deeper meanings for our own lives. Neat conclusion as well, I never thought I'd feel sorry for a rock :)
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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A really enjoyable read, I like the format, which I don't think I've come across before (I am new to the site). I like the fact that it can be read simply as a fun story, or can be delved into for deeper meanings for our own lives. Neat conclusion as well, I never thought I'd feel sorry for a rock :)
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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LOL. Poor rock. Thank you so much. I really appreciate your time reading/reviewing/commenting on my poem.
Comment from Nosha17
Very nice tribute poem, so many people on this site miss her numerous postings and send her warm get well wishes. Yes, her counting poems were fun, too. This is well written with excellent rhyming and imagery. Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Very nice tribute poem, so many people on this site miss her numerous postings and send her warm get well wishes. Yes, her counting poems were fun, too. This is well written with excellent rhyming and imagery. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thank you. I appreciate your time reading & reviewing my poem. It means a lot to me.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, jannypan, I love brooke's counting poems and I know she will like it too. I love the one that was mistaken for fool;s gold. made me smile
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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this is an excellent write, jannypan, I love brooke's counting poems and I know she will like it too. I love the one that was mistaken for fool;s gold. made me smile
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you for your time reading and reviewing my poem. I like counting poems, I always enjoyed Brooke's, but never wrote any. Sad that her illness prompted me to write some. However, I hope she gets a smile from my poems.
Comment from Curly Girly
This is counting poem tells a story about rocks. It starts off with ten and then dwindles down to one, which gets shattered:
sadly sitting in pieces in the backyard
and wondering why its life is so hard
Perhaps it's comparable with some humans' lives, but hopefully not Brooke's.
It is preferable to think of the shattered fragments of rock as being the many wonderful poems Brooke wrote, and they have now become spread out as they continue their journey inside the life-cycle of creation.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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This is counting poem tells a story about rocks. It starts off with ten and then dwindles down to one, which gets shattered:
sadly sitting in pieces in the backyard
and wondering why its life is so hard
Perhaps it's comparable with some humans' lives, but hopefully not Brooke's.
It is preferable to think of the shattered fragments of rock as being the many wonderful poems Brooke wrote, and they have now become spread out as they continue their journey inside the life-cycle of creation.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you for your time reading/reviewing my poem. (I did not intend for it to be compared to Brooke's life. It is just a fun counting poem). Thank you again.
Comment from cbat
Such a unique poem, it is fabulous and also thought provoking.
To me it makes me think of how while hikers are well meaning, they can cause erosion (not sure if that is right word) by moving the foundations of the hill.
Am I crazy?
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Such a unique poem, it is fabulous and also thought provoking.
To me it makes me think of how while hikers are well meaning, they can cause erosion (not sure if that is right word) by moving the foundations of the hill.
Am I crazy?
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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No, you are so right. Thank you for reading & reviewing my poem. Yes, hikers disturb the rocks. My poem is just a fun poem not to be compared to Brooke's life. But you are right about the erosion thing. Thanks again, Jan
Comment from judiverse
Brooke will love this, as she liked to do the counting poems. You've carried this off really well, jannypan. A lively presentation, and I enjoyed the stories of what happened to each of the rocks. Rockslides and getting stuffed in a hiker's sack were just some of the misfortunes. Excellent rhyme, and a reminder of the playful way Brooke has with words. judi
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Brooke will love this, as she liked to do the counting poems. You've carried this off really well, jannypan. A lively presentation, and I enjoyed the stories of what happened to each of the rocks. Rockslides and getting stuffed in a hiker's sack were just some of the misfortunes. Excellent rhyme, and a reminder of the playful way Brooke has with words. judi
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you. I really appreciate your review and kind comments.
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You're welcome, and it was ingenious of you to use the counting device. You handled it well, too. judi
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
I liked the rock scenario Janny.. It was well written and cute as well.. The length was fine if not there would not be ten but only nine heheheh Ok,ok that was a baddy
tk
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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I liked the rock scenario Janny.. It was well written and cute as well.. The length was fine if not there would not be ten but only nine heheheh Ok,ok that was a baddy
tk
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your time reading & reviewing my poem. [like the joke about the length] Jan
Comment from WindPen
some died naturally
some trying to be kids
one wanted to be something else
one was tricked
by men who cannot rest
all that dies is gold
all that think they won't are fool's
at the end you're left alone
no matter how you're born
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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some died naturally
some trying to be kids
one wanted to be something else
one was tricked
by men who cannot rest
all that dies is gold
all that think they won't are fool's
at the end you're left alone
no matter how you're born
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review my poem. I really appreciate it.