A Holiday in the Fall (Revived)
People remembering our heroes all through the year.26 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, A Holiday in the Fall, presented as a 5-7-5, reminds the readers that we have set aside days to recall the fallen and those who serve.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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This haiku, A Holiday in the Fall, presented as a 5-7-5, reminds the readers that we have set aside days to recall the fallen and those who serve.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to review and the five stars.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this thoughtful, moving piece. So many events, people, etc., we celebrate/commemorate at certain times we should think of daily.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this thoughtful, moving piece. So many events, people, etc., we celebrate/commemorate at certain times we should think of daily.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to review and the five stars.
Comment from roof35
You followed the rules and you said a great deal in a few words. Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly with your words. This is very nicely done.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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You followed the rules and you said a great deal in a few words. Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly with your words. This is very nicely done.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Thanks for taking the time to review and the five stars.
Comment from Pantygynt
Nothing is guaranteed to raise more argument amongst the poetic classes than Japanese short-form poetry, such as Haiku and Tanka. Traditionally haiku involve nature and should have a seasonal reference. It is certainly more than simply a form relying on syllabic count. Most commonly, the third line (sometimes the first) is known as the satori line that should offer enlightenment, which is what satori means.
This is a good 5-7-5 but for the reasons stated I do not consider it a haiku.
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Nothing is guaranteed to raise more argument amongst the poetic classes than Japanese short-form poetry, such as Haiku and Tanka. Traditionally haiku involve nature and should have a seasonal reference. It is certainly more than simply a form relying on syllabic count. Most commonly, the third line (sometimes the first) is known as the satori line that should offer enlightenment, which is what satori means.
This is a good 5-7-5 but for the reasons stated I do not consider it a haiku.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Thanks for your three stars and reviewing. Sometimes I find haikus on this site a little different and I am aware that haiku are about nature not human nature.
But once again thanks.
Comment from H. Darwin Reeves
Thank you! If this reminder was ever needed it's today. The unrest we are witnessing today reveals that too many people have lost patriotism and are showing their lack of education as far as history is concerned. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Thank you! If this reminder was ever needed it's today. The unrest we are witnessing today reveals that too many people have lost patriotism and are showing their lack of education as far as history is concerned. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Thanks for the five stars and reviewing my work.
Comment from Earl Corp
I'm not a poet by any means, but I thought haikus were supposed to deal with nature. I think you wrote a pretty good 5-7-5 poem which as a veteran I can appreciate. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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I'm not a poet by any means, but I thought haikus were supposed to deal with nature. I think you wrote a pretty good 5-7-5 poem which as a veteran I can appreciate. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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You are correct, but to my defense how about human nature.
I guess I was so excited to write it, I will kick it around. Thanks for the five stars and honest review. I really know the Japanese haiku is about nature but I have seen them on here in other ways.
Comment from nomi338
For as long as you have life, show your appreciation by celebrating life and the life giver and his power to sustain it. When it is gone, you will not be able to reclaim it..
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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For as long as you have life, show your appreciation by celebrating life and the life giver and his power to sustain it. When it is gone, you will not be able to reclaim it..
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Thanks for the five stars and taking the time to review my poem.
Comment from songecho
I would not leave you in times of trouble, we never could have come this far.
Baby got back.
Late at night I stay up late and think of you. It's not that fun.
You're unbelievable. And there's no way i could pay you back, but my plan is to make you understand, you are appreciated.
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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I would not leave you in times of trouble, we never could have come this far.
Baby got back.
Late at night I stay up late and think of you. It's not that fun.
You're unbelievable. And there's no way i could pay you back, but my plan is to make you understand, you are appreciated.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Thank you for the stars and comment but maybe the message was to go some place else.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a great universal 5-7-5, not concentrating on one specific day but reminding everyone to keep the tradition going all through the year. nicely chosen words.
GMG
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Hi there,
This is a great universal 5-7-5, not concentrating on one specific day but reminding everyone to keep the tradition going all through the year. nicely chosen words.
GMG
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Thank you for your five stars and comment.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Good 5-7-5 poem - a wonderful poem not only honoring memorial day but also all other occasions. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Good 5-7-5 poem - a wonderful poem not only honoring memorial day but also all other occasions. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you for the five stars and comment.
