Beautiful Death
Viewing comments for Chapter 10001 "Nanny Goat"from birth I have longed for death
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Comment from Heather Knight
You have written a very moving story. Life is real tough on some people...
I think there's a typo:Eventually she found an Indian man whom has become her soul mate. It should be who instead of whom.
Thanks for sharing.
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You have written a very moving story. Life is real tough on some people...
I think there's a typo:Eventually she found an Indian man whom has become her soul mate. It should be who instead of whom.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
Comment from royowen
It seems like ypur poor sister had a cow of a life when she lived, but the the pain has gone now, and perhaps she's in a better place. I found the story a little confusing. I wasn't sure who the subject in your story was. Well done, much editing to be done, blessings, Roy
Typo : No one(,) even mum(,) 2: get out of bed and (do) her duty...2 : and what (is) not 4: the (agraving!?) thing about her 5. Her body wes (liquidating?) 6 and (lye) by her. Lie?
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It seems like ypur poor sister had a cow of a life when she lived, but the the pain has gone now, and perhaps she's in a better place. I found the story a little confusing. I wasn't sure who the subject in your story was. Well done, much editing to be done, blessings, Roy
Typo : No one(,) even mum(,) 2: get out of bed and (do) her duty...2 : and what (is) not 4: the (agraving!?) thing about her 5. Her body wes (liquidating?) 6 and (lye) by her. Lie?
Comment Written 15-Mar-2019
Comment from Randa Dayle
It is hard to write experiences of our past at times. I think you did a good job.
This sentence could use some work in my opinion... is it a comma or period,
Let alone that some younger men would actually rape them, This happening more than once.
Maybe...
Let alone that some of the younger men would actually rape the, sometimes more than once.
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It is hard to write experiences of our past at times. I think you did a good job.
This sentence could use some work in my opinion... is it a comma or period,
Let alone that some younger men would actually rape them, This happening more than once.
Maybe...
Let alone that some of the younger men would actually rape the, sometimes more than once.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from lucky linda
It is not easy to share your pain and loss, but you have done it with caring and honesty. So glad I was able to read this. We all need reminders that we are human and imperfect, with emotions and a past that influences us daily.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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It is not easy to share your pain and loss, but you have done it with caring and honesty. So glad I was able to read this. We all need reminders that we are human and imperfect, with emotions and a past that influences us daily.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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Thank you Linda your kindness keep s me going
Comment from Sugarray77
You have written a very dramatic and heart wrenching story about your sister, Nan. You did a good job in relating her various talents and her struggles. Well done and thanks for sharing your family story with us.
Melissa
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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You have written a very dramatic and heart wrenching story about your sister, Nan. You did a good job in relating her various talents and her struggles. Well done and thanks for sharing your family story with us.
Melissa
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much