Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Cute and sweet in intents poet relates bad experience with a meal describing its encounter and mishaps in descriptive terms wonderful write Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 26-May-2015

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reply by the author on 26-May-2015

Thanks TPAC for your review and encouraging words, it indeed was a mishap( hopefully never to be repeated ha ha) but gave me some god material to write about. Cheers Christine😀

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

Sounds about how I cook from scratch without a recipe.
:(
lol
That was amusing. (well, for mE it was....not sure about them)
I'm sure the dog enjoyed it though!)

(that's not your REAL name at the end right?)
Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 26-May-2015

Hi I am Cat, glad you liked this poem yes it was an interesting night, and I don't think I have made Salmon patties since. The stove didn't help I couldn't get it to heat up enough to cook on and my recepie went from bad to worse so I guess a disaster al round, I can still see our black dog named Drum eating the mess. My real name is Christine I wanted to use this as my post name but it was taken so Chrissyxxx was next in line ( not sure how the 3 xxx got on the end, but they did. ( My kids often call me Chrissyxxx anyway. So thanks and Cheers Christine😊

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Hello Christine
I enjoyed your story of your cooking of the salmon, nice real work. We learn from out mistakes, hopefully.
Congratulations on the entry of your poem-story. I wanted to come by and review each one. My very best to you in the contest.
Loyd C. Taylor, Sr.

 Comment Written 25-May-2015

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reply by the author on 25-May-2015

Thank you very much Loyd C. Taylor, Sr. My lesson learnt was to never cook anything on this old stove again and I made sure I had the hot frypan for future offerings. I am new to this site and am enjoying all the great work posted and have learnt lots about writing and have appreciated all the reviews received so thanks again Cheers Christine😊

reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 26-May-2015

Welcome to you my good friend.
May I wish a good day to you. You are very welcome. Please check my work out here on Fanstory when you can. Thanks, Loyd C. Taylor, Sr.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Funny.. Has happened to the best of us. Your poem was a fun read. I enjoyed it. There was good flow from the opening of the can to the disaster that ensued.

I see no changes except to explain in author notes, if allowed, weetbix and Old Drum the shaggy kind (?).

Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-May-2015

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reply by the author on 16-May-2015

Thank jannypan for your review and comments I will make sure I explain things in the future Old Drum was our border collie and wet biz is a breakfast cereal in Australia glad you enjoyed it Cheers Christine😆

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 16-May-2015

I was not sure if you could add author notes. Is it wet biz or weetbix as you wrote in the poem?

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Great last line! You did a wonderful job of building up to that. The poem is easy to read. It flows very easily. I love the way you share your poem in such a natural way. Great job.

 Comment Written 15-May-2015

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reply by the author on 15-May-2015

Thanks Michael, it was fun to write and I don't think I have tried to make salmon patties again. I find so many real life events lend themselves to a poem nicely. Appreciate your time and look forward to being a part of this group. 😆 Cheers Christine

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a cute poem about the hazards of cooking without a recipe. You have a better chance of coming up with the mess you came up with than something good unless you are a trained chef to begin with. This poem also shows that a dog is truly man's best and most devoted friend.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 14-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thank you for you encouraging words and yes the dog was very happy we often laugh about this

reply by dragonpoet on 14-May-2015

No problem. It is what we are here for.

dragonpoet

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Starts off in the kitchen cooking salmon patties, and ends up with the dog eating the food. Poem depicts this action adequately enough.

 Comment Written 14-May-2015

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reply by the author on 14-May-2015

Thanks Brett for you reviews I hope I can do the poetry world justice
And we often have a laugh about this event
Cheers Christine

reply by Brett Matthew West on 14-May-2015

Puppy dogs make the world go round Kiddo.