Comment from marylou4

Excellent

The descriptive eloquence of your words creates a vivid paradigm for this form of poetry.
I found no technical errors in your poem. Thank you for sharing it with us.

 Comment Written 12-May-2015

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reply by the author on 12-May-2015

Thanks for the concise review, I appreciate your thoughts on this, cheers j

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

good job, good luck with the contest,

-follows the -5-7-5 format
-it's focused on a brief moment in time
-has provocative, colorful images
- it can be read in one breath
-sense of sudden enlightenment
-writen in a present tense
-excellent simplicity
-convined 2 images or ideas divided by a justaposition

 Comment Written 12-May-2015

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reply by the author on 12-May-2015

Thanks Gypsy for your concise and helpful review. It is reviewers like you that help new writers expand and learn, cheers judester

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

I try not to think of them, I am relishing the warm breezes of Spring! Autumn winds do throw their weight about and put paid to those last vestiges of Summer. Well chosen words and accompanying picture to express your words. Good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 12-May-2015

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reply by the author on 12-May-2015

Thanks for the review Faye, not a timely poem I admit.....enjoy the summer, cheers judester

Comment from danpald

Excellent

The wind moves the crimson leaves
That image comes to play
With your poem of words to great
The end of summer days

Well done in a few words
Mine must be more
For the review is not accepted
Without the use of more words

 Comment Written 12-May-2015

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reply by the author on 12-May-2015

Thanks for the review, poem not very timely now that summer is here, cheers j