Comment from Chris Tee

Excellent

This is excellent repetition poetry and your refrain line is absolutely great. Well done indeed and good luck in the contest which we have here.

 Comment Written 11-May-2015

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reply by the author on 11-May-2015

As always, I really appreciate you taking the time to review my work, thanks so much for the rating and kind comments. Pharp

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

heck of a position to be in. Old and frail and feeling worthless to boot. Easy to follow story line. Descriptively written. Write on.

 Comment Written 10-May-2015

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reply by the author on 10-May-2015

Thanks so much for your rating and review, greatly appreciated.

Comment from skye

Excellent

Your repeating line says it all. And the ending line is perfect. He will give mercy. We will receive justice and mercy.
Excellent free verse dealing with such a tragic time of life.
Excellent.

 Comment Written 09-May-2015

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reply by the author on 10-May-2015

Skye, thanks as always for taking the time to review my work, for the rating and the very kind comments. Blessings Pharp

Comment from artisart4u

Exceptional

This is a nice spiritual poem about praying for mercy.

I like the way you repeated words and it rhymes well.

Good luck with your poem.

 Comment Written 09-May-2015

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reply by the author on 10-May-2015

Wow, thank you so much for the six star rating. This is a great Mother's Day Gift. I really appreciated you taking the time to review my work. Blessings Pharp

Comment from Healing

Excellent

Very nice poem.
Well written with a great flow.
Very easy and enjoyable to read for sure.
This writing has so much meaning behind the words. Great stuff.
Thank you for sharing your talent.

KY

 Comment Written 09-May-2015

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reply by the author on 10-May-2015

Thanks so much for your rating, review and very kind comments. Blessings Pharp

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Your repetition poem is essentially a prayer from a doomed man to the good Lord seeking mercy from above. The repeated line builds a sense of urgency, of almost desperation. The stark black and white presentation add to the gloom for the reader. Well conceived and well written. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 09-May-2015

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reply by the author on 09-May-2015

Thanks so much for your rating, review and very kind comments. Blessings Pharp

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is well written and easy to read. I know this applies to a lot of us as we are older and looking to that day when the Lord will call us home. I pray for His mercy each day. Blessings and good luck in the contest. Patricia

 Comment Written 09-May-2015

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reply by the author on 09-May-2015

Thanks so much for your rating, review and best wishes, greatly appreciated. Pharp

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

A sad, but touching poem... I very much approved of the line you chose to repeat. It works well. I just wish the poem were divided into stanzas and the print not quite so large but maybe that's just my personal preference. I think you did an excellent job of portraying the emotions of a person in the final stages of life, one who is suffering and ready to go home. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

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reply by the author on 08-May-2015

Thanks so much for your review, rating ,and I have made the necessary changes. This poem was written about two weeks ago, ( just sitting in my portfolio just wasn't sure when I was going to post it) but when I saw the contest I decided to enter it because of the repeating line. I'm sure I will probably get disqualified however; the message is more important. Check it out I even made the print smaller. Thanks so much for your honest and helpful review. Greatly appreciated.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This is a powerful piece of writing but given the terms of reference of this competiotion you need to divide it into at least three verses with the repeated line in each verse. The poem quite naturally falls into tercets (three line verses) if you hit the carriage return in the right places it would look like this:

My body is frail
I'm no longer strong
I pray for mercy today

The fight is gone
I can't carry on
I pray for mercy today

I lie here still
I have no will
I pray for mercy today

The pain never cease
I'm ready to be at peace
I pray for mercy today

It's near the end
I know not when
I pray for mercy today

I have been saved by grace
I'm ready to see your face
I pray for mercy today

Let it be done
According to your will
"Lord have mercy I pray"

And now it fills all the requirements of this contest. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

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reply by the author on 08-May-2015

I just logged in and read your review and I thank you for you help and suggestion. I am not sure if I can go in and edit it while the voting is going on; I just might get disqualified if I didn't fill all the requirements of this contest. In any case I will may the changes and I appreciate your honest and very helpful review. Blessings my friend Pharp

reply by Pantygynt on 09-May-2015

I have been told that you can edit even in the voting booth, but don't take my word on that.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I am so sorry for your friend, I know what it is like to watch a loved one and some friends, die of cancer. It is a vile disease. Your prayer is heartfelt and lovely. I hope it is answered for your friends sake. Good luck in the contest. Sandra

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

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reply by the author on 08-May-2015

Thanks so much for your review and rating and very kind and comforting remarks. Pharp