First Light
There's promise in the dawn's first light46 total reviews
Comment from Commando
Janet, 6-stars is all Fan Story will allow--however, this one deserves more. Absolutely beautiful--and very deep. Have yourself a "Happy New Year"--and enjoy your Grandchildren. Keep the ink in your writing pen--and God bless.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2015
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Janet, 6-stars is all Fan Story will allow--however, this one deserves more. Absolutely beautiful--and very deep. Have yourself a "Happy New Year"--and enjoy your Grandchildren. Keep the ink in your writing pen--and God bless.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for reviewing and liking my poem. I haven't posted anything for awhile but plan to very soon. It's been a tumultuous year so I'm really looking forward to 2016. It looks like we're neighbors as I live in western NC. Wishing you and yours a very Happy New Year.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from nancyjam
I love the theme of his beautifully crafted poem.
It is so uplifting.
Your rhymes are lovely and the meter is strong and even.
The images support your lovely thoughts. Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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I love the theme of his beautifully crafted poem.
It is so uplifting.
Your rhymes are lovely and the meter is strong and even.
The images support your lovely thoughts. Nancy
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thank you Nancy for your thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your encouragement.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from valerieellis
Excellent! I enjoyed this poem very much! Dawn has always been my favorite part of the day. Your words evoked strong emotions...feelings of hope for a better day. The rhyme and rhythm flowed smoothly and it was easy to follow and understand. Thank you for sharing. God bless :-)
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Excellent! I enjoyed this poem very much! Dawn has always been my favorite part of the day. Your words evoked strong emotions...feelings of hope for a better day. The rhyme and rhythm flowed smoothly and it was easy to follow and understand. Thank you for sharing. God bless :-)
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Very well written poem in abcb rhyme, although stanza 3 works out as abab. The repeated line appears in every stanza as required but the poem is not compromised by this and does not sound contrived at all. The repeated line is placed where it sounds right. The content of the poem is good. A lovely read. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothyx
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Very well written poem in abcb rhyme, although stanza 3 works out as abab. The repeated line appears in every stanza as required but the poem is not compromised by this and does not sound contrived at all. The repeated line is placed where it sounds right. The content of the poem is good. A lovely read. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothyx
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Dorothy for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Picture illustrates this All-Time Best well. Action flows smoothly. Easy to follow story line. Descriptively well written and holds reader's interest. Write on.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Picture illustrates this All-Time Best well. Action flows smoothly. Easy to follow story line. Descriptively well written and holds reader's interest. Write on.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Brett for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one. I enjoyed your contest entry as well.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Curly Girly
I enjoyed reading this radiant poem. There is a mystery in the last stanza:
Each day begins a mystery
to solve before day turns to night.
If we obey the 'Golden Rule"
there's promise in the dawn's first light.
Now, what is that golden rule?
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I enjoyed reading this radiant poem. There is a mystery in the last stanza:
Each day begins a mystery
to solve before day turns to night.
If we obey the 'Golden Rule"
there's promise in the dawn's first light.
Now, what is that golden rule?
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
The Golden Rule is "do unto others as you would have them do to you". Ref: Matthew 7:12
Blessings
Janet
Comment from c_lucas
A very interesting poem about the dawning of a new morning. Each day holding a promise of failure and/or success. This is well written with good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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A very interesting poem about the dawning of a new morning. Each day holding a promise of failure and/or success. This is well written with good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Charlie for your thoughtful, encouraging and most generous review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
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You're welcome, Janet. Charlie
Comment from Sis Cat
What a beautiful and romantic poem. I read it aloud. Your language and rhymes are smooth and evocative. There is a tenderness and a compassion in this poem and a great appreciation of nature and your "heart's delight."
My only suggestion is to omit the quotation marks around Golden Rule. They are uneven and unnecessary. They also present speed bumps for the eye while reading.
Thank you for sharing your refreshing poem.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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What a beautiful and romantic poem. I read it aloud. Your language and rhymes are smooth and evocative. There is a tenderness and a compassion in this poem and a great appreciation of nature and your "heart's delight."
My only suggestion is to omit the quotation marks around Golden Rule. They are uneven and unnecessary. They also present speed bumps for the eye while reading.
Thank you for sharing your refreshing poem.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one. I took your suggestion and removed the quotations marks. Thank you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Jmf,
Well, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem, with it's bouncy meter and upbeat message.
Your entire presentation was terrific, with the beautiful image and matching color behind your text.
Nicely done,
Lou
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Hi Jmf,
Well, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem, with it's bouncy meter and upbeat message.
Your entire presentation was terrific, with the beautiful image and matching color behind your text.
Nicely done,
Lou
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Louise for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from skye
I love form poetry and this form fits the beauty of the sunrise, with its repetitive lines, like the sun rising daily.
You captured it all in a great poem, with well chosen artwork.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I love form poetry and this form fits the beauty of the sunrise, with its repetitive lines, like the sun rising daily.
You captured it all in a great poem, with well chosen artwork.
Excellent.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you Skye for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased that you liked this one.
Blessings
Janet