Comment from WindPen

Good

It's a nice poem
but i think that as long as there are waves there can be faithlessness but they keep the passion if the waves are too calm the love will be gone

 Comment Written 30-May-2015

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reply by the author on 30-May-2015

Those waves can also drown you. We just celebrated our 20th anniversary in Zanzibar and I felt inspired. Thanks for the review, cheers

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

seet little love poem, perfect for this repetition contest.

I like the use of natural features (whirlpool, breezes, ocean) in the imagery and the use of rhyme to tie everything together.

Good luck in the contest.

Steve

 Comment Written 30-May-2015

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reply by the author on 30-May-2015

Thanks Steve, we celebrate our 20th anniversary , had a midnight stroll and I was inspired hah., cheers mate

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, judester, love returned is a beautiful thing. I looked at the poem three times and it seems that there isn't a line that repeats in all of the stanzas, which is a requirement in this contest. I don't want you to be disqualified by the committee. I've been disqualified twice before. they're sticklers. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-May-2015

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reply by the author on 30-May-2015

You are so right, I just tweaked it, forgetting it was an entry, thanks so much for that, cheers j

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Sweet cute and short Let me see you blossom this work Instead of seeing it as a short statement Try to view work as a detailing composition Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

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reply by the author on 08-May-2015

Thanks for the review, what do you mean by detailing composition? Cheers j

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Well done. Nicely presented. The repetition is smooth and even the feeling comes through well in this poem. This is a great entry for the repetition contest

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 08-May-2015

Thanks for the encouraging review, my husband came to visit me in zanzibar and I felt inspired, cheers

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I really enjoyed your poem. Good job with the repeated line. It really fits in nicely. I love the sentiments of your poem and the sea reference.

Good job. I see no changes. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 08-May-2015

Thanks for the review jannypan, my husband came to visit me in zanzibar was the inspiration, cheers j

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

This is lovely, a simple little love poem, so romantic in every way. You have kept to the contest rules and come up with a little gem. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 08-May-2015

Thanks for your review, that is exactly what I was hoping to achieve, cheers j

Comment from Donovan

Excellent

This is a good poem. It flows well. It is the type that I see published in magazines. It tells a simple story and the meaning is clear and not hidden in the recesses of someone's mind. The repetition is excellent.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 08-May-2015

Thanks Donovan for the encouraging review. I appreciate your insight, cheers j