Mister Expert Explorer
50 word story38 total reviews
Comment from sandragee
Talk about having a bad day! It's a story that starts with fright and then builds on the fear. There's anxiety, relief and fright all done in fifty words. I love the last line. Well done.
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Talk about having a bad day! It's a story that starts with fright and then builds on the fear. There's anxiety, relief and fright all done in fifty words. I love the last line. Well done.
Comment Written 07-May-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the story. Boy, this guy ought to think about another career. He would have to have bad luck to have any luck at all. I do find it humorous. Great work.
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I love the picture. I love the story. Boy, this guy ought to think about another career. He would have to have bad luck to have any luck at all. I do find it humorous. Great work.
Comment Written 07-May-2015
Comment from tfawcus
Congratulations on a narrow escape and a splendid win. What a great picture book this would make! Every sentence is a page turner. Ellipses are great to denote a passage of time between the two halves of a sentence, the end of a paragraph, etc.
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Congratulations on a narrow escape and a splendid win. What a great picture book this would make! Every sentence is a page turner. Ellipses are great to denote a passage of time between the two halves of a sentence, the end of a paragraph, etc.
Comment Written 06-May-2015
Comment from pattipac
Michael, you have written an emotional roller-coaster story filled with fear, relief, and sheer terror in less than fifty words. Congrats. on winning. Well deserved!
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Michael, you have written an emotional roller-coaster story filled with fear, relief, and sheer terror in less than fifty words. Congrats. on winning. Well deserved!
Comment Written 05-May-2015
Comment from Tatarka2
Congratulations, Mikey! Another winner - and so well-deserved, too! You had me holding my breath, even for just a moment, as this tale unfurled. This was so well done, in just a few words - and that's the essence of good writing, right?
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Congratulations, Mikey! Another winner - and so well-deserved, too! You had me holding my breath, even for just a moment, as this tale unfurled. This was so well done, in just a few words - and that's the essence of good writing, right?
Comment Written 05-May-2015
Comment from seaglass
Not a good experience. This s a great little story especially with so few words permitted. Tension rise and fall works well.
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Not a good experience. This s a great little story especially with so few words permitted. Tension rise and fall works well.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
Comment from Nosha17
Congratulations on your win! That must be a pretty frightful experience, I'm never going in a cave again-you captured the suspense and drama well, a well written piece of prose. Faye
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Congratulations on your win! That must be a pretty frightful experience, I'm never going in a cave again-you captured the suspense and drama well, a well written piece of prose. Faye
Comment Written 05-May-2015
Comment from Bill Schott
Great ending! You can never have too many life ending problems show up at the same time. Nice pacing for such a brief tale of survival. You've got a sort of cliff hanger ending.
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Great ending! You can never have too many life ending problems show up at the same time. Nice pacing for such a brief tale of survival. You've got a sort of cliff hanger ending.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Sorry, I was too late to vote for you, but you didn't need it anyway. This is just brilliant, Charlie. You managed to write a complete story that was both horrific and very well written. Congratulations, my friend! xsx Sandra
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Sorry, I was too late to vote for you, but you didn't need it anyway. This is just brilliant, Charlie. You managed to write a complete story that was both horrific and very well written. Congratulations, my friend! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 05-May-2015
Comment from royowen
A extremely clever and imaginative entry in this 50 word story, I love the relief of the story's hero and then the SHARK?! I really like your chances with this very witty and creative, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
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A extremely clever and imaginative entry in this 50 word story, I love the relief of the story's hero and then the SHARK?! I really like your chances with this very witty and creative, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 05-May-2015