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Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Driftwood Sculptress"Poems about the coastline
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Driftwood Sculpturess by Pantygynt
hello, I liked your poem. I love the sea and I collect rocks, the smooth ones are the best. In Pacifica Beach they have these beautiful rocks with holes in them. They are beautiful! This poem reminded me of that. I don't see anything to edit.
-good description
-good rhythm
-descriptive language used
-excellent format and picture
-excellent character development
Write on!
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Driftwood Sculpturess by Pantygynt
hello, I liked your poem. I love the sea and I collect rocks, the smooth ones are the best. In Pacifica Beach they have these beautiful rocks with holes in them. They are beautiful! This poem reminded me of that. I don't see anything to edit.
-good description
-good rhythm
-descriptive language used
-excellent format and picture
-excellent character development
Write on!
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you for your thorough and complementary review. You might find some of the earlier chapters to your liking, given your interests.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
Now this was something special indeed..Living here in Hawaii I can relate to all that your wrote..Even to the beach of flotsam and jetsam as we have our own called trash beach here on the Big Island..Enjoyed this much Thanks for sharing
TK
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Now this was something special indeed..Living here in Hawaii I can relate to all that your wrote..Even to the beach of flotsam and jetsam as we have our own called trash beach here on the Big Island..Enjoyed this much Thanks for sharing
TK
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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So glad you could relate to this. Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from BellaSpirit
The visual in this piece is vivid with such attention to detail. I can almost hear the sea and certainly imagine the beautiful waves washing up unique pieces of driftwood caught in the drift. This took me away to take place. This style would be a difficult one but you made read with ease. My favorite verse was the third...Excellent!
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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The visual in this piece is vivid with such attention to detail. I can almost hear the sea and certainly imagine the beautiful waves washing up unique pieces of driftwood caught in the drift. This took me away to take place. This style would be a difficult one but you made read with ease. My favorite verse was the third...Excellent!
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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So glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for your complimentary review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This sea-borne rubbish, washed up by the tide,
Far from that beach, she sorts on her work-bench somewhere,
Then, from those lies, she crafts the truth she seeks.
I must confess I've never heard of the sestina. You've obviously worked on this very hard and have made a splendid job of it, Panygynt - most impressive.
Thank you for sharing.
Margaret
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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This sea-borne rubbish, washed up by the tide,
Far from that beach, she sorts on her work-bench somewhere,
Then, from those lies, she crafts the truth she seeks.
I must confess I've never heard of the sestina. You've obviously worked on this very hard and have made a splendid job of it, Panygynt - most impressive.
Thank you for sharing.
Margaret
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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I'm sure I have replied to this once, anyway thanks again.
Comment from bizzygirl
An exotic poem written in an artistry I confess I have not seen before. I cannot comment on the mechanics of this, since it is new to me. I can comment on how it makes me feel, glorious. I can tell that the imagery is flawless in comparing, garbage of the sea to be used to create art. A lovely depiction of that venue. I concurr that the recognition is well deserved. Thank you for a new field of study in this poem. WELL DONE
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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An exotic poem written in an artistry I confess I have not seen before. I cannot comment on the mechanics of this, since it is new to me. I can comment on how it makes me feel, glorious. I can tell that the imagery is flawless in comparing, garbage of the sea to be used to create art. A lovely depiction of that venue. I concurr that the recognition is well deserved. Thank you for a new field of study in this poem. WELL DONE
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you for this glowing tribute. I hope you do try one yourself, but they are difficult. If you want help with it don't hesitate to contact me by PM.
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Thank you!. I must work up my courage and then perhaps I will. I love to learn new things. A wonderful opportunity here.
Comment from Sanku
An apt poem for yuor artist daughter.i enjoyed reading this informative poem and what a wonderful gift your daughter has!you must be very proud of her. I am not familiar with the form ,so it was a learning experience
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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An apt poem for yuor artist daughter.i enjoyed reading this informative poem and what a wonderful gift your daughter has!you must be very proud of her. I am not familiar with the form ,so it was a learning experience
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you for this kind review. I am glad this form opened up new horizons.
Comment from TomyKan
I am not familiar with sestina, but you managed to work within those constraints to come up with a well-written poem that flows well and has good rhythm. I especially liked your closing stanza. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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I am not familiar with sestina, but you managed to work within those constraints to come up with a well-written poem that flows well and has good rhythm. I especially liked your closing stanza. Well done.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Many thanks for those few well-xchosen words in your review. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from costellsgirl33
This is an incredibly lovely poem. It read more like a short story to me but it was lovely. It was sad in a way but once I got to the end, it wasn't sad anymore. And the picture you used is a great compliment. The flow is very nice. Great job
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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This is an incredibly lovely poem. It read more like a short story to me but it was lovely. It was sad in a way but once I got to the end, it wasn't sad anymore. And the picture you used is a great compliment. The flow is very nice. Great job
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you for this sympathetic review. You are the second person to comment on the sadness. This was not something I consciously injected into the poem, but if you found it then it has to be there.
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You are very welcome! Have a great day.
Arnetta
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You are very welcome! Have a great day.
Arnetta
Comment from Dean Kuch
First off, Pantygynt, the HTML for 'e acute' can be utilized from the advanced FanStory editor using the "special characters" tab in the included menu. That's the only way I know you can successfully insert them into the body of your text.
As for your sestina poetry composition, it's a poignant, despondent look at loneliness simply due to the fact that she is alone in her search for some new material to craft. As one whose suffered the ebb and flow of life's tides myself, I could certainly understand the sentiments behind it. Walking along the shores in such a romantic setting alone is a bit telling.
The inclusion of an Alexandrine line in each verse is no easy task, yet you pulled off the form brilliantly.
This write is a pearl...~Dean
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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First off, Pantygynt, the HTML for 'e acute' can be utilized from the advanced FanStory editor using the "special characters" tab in the included menu. That's the only way I know you can successfully insert them into the body of your text.
As for your sestina poetry composition, it's a poignant, despondent look at loneliness simply due to the fact that she is alone in her search for some new material to craft. As one whose suffered the ebb and flow of life's tides myself, I could certainly understand the sentiments behind it. Walking along the shores in such a romantic setting alone is a bit telling.
The inclusion of an Alexandrine line in each verse is no easy task, yet you pulled off the form brilliantly.
This write is a pearl...~Dean
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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You are very perceptive, I didn't intend it to be despondent, but if you can find it then it must be there! Thank you so much for this interesting review and also fot the information regarding the advanced editor. Every time I hit the button for this I get a warning that I need to save the work first, then it won't let me save because I haven't written enough. I suppose the answer is to write the whole thing out without the accent and then, having saveit make the emendations. I'll try that with something less complex soon and see if I can get it to work. Thanks for the tip anyway.
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You're very welcome, Pantygynt. Lovely poem, my friend. :}
~Dean
Comment from DR DIP
wow that is very well written I had not heard of this discipline of poetry before written in non rhyming 6 line verse very effective and tells a story. thanks for the authors notes I think this greatly helps as well.
thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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wow that is very well written I had not heard of this discipline of poetry before written in non rhyming 6 line verse very effective and tells a story. thanks for the authors notes I think this greatly helps as well.
thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you for reading and for this complimentary review.
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my pleasure