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Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Matter for Concern"Poems about the coastline
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. This is another very well written chapter in this series that I enjoy so much. In Australia we have so many each year that beach themselves, we have become quite good at saving them. I wonder if it has anything to do with all the tour boats that go out to see them every time the poor buggers appear. Well done on this sad one, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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G'day mate. This is another very well written chapter in this series that I enjoy so much. In Australia we have so many each year that beach themselves, we have become quite good at saving them. I wonder if it has anything to do with all the tour boats that go out to see them every time the poor buggers appear. Well done on this sad one, cheers Fez
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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It might be, or it could be noise from many miles away. Sound travels amazing distances through the sea apparently. Many thanks once again for this review and I'm so glad you are still enjoying the series.
Comment from tfawcus
Marvellous, mysterious creatures, these leviathans of the deep. Your poem raises a serious question. I wonder if it is true that they are being driven onto the sands by all the noise of our destructive ways. Each year in July and August, Southern Right whales return to the bays in front of our farm, often approaching to within 50 yards of the shore - but this is a different matter. Mothers bring their newly born young close inshore for two or three months until they are large enough to brave the open seas and the journey down to the Antarctic. I often watch them from the cliffs and reflect upon the fact that our local town, Victor Harbor, was originally a whaling station, dedicated to the slaughter of these gentle creatures as they returned each year to their breeding grounds.
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Marvellous, mysterious creatures, these leviathans of the deep. Your poem raises a serious question. I wonder if it is true that they are being driven onto the sands by all the noise of our destructive ways. Each year in July and August, Southern Right whales return to the bays in front of our farm, often approaching to within 50 yards of the shore - but this is a different matter. Mothers bring their newly born young close inshore for two or three months until they are large enough to brave the open seas and the journey down to the Antarctic. I often watch them from the cliffs and reflect upon the fact that our local town, Victor Harbor, was originally a whaling station, dedicated to the slaughter of these gentle creatures as they returned each year to their breeding grounds.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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I just had a connectivity hiccup on my computer and it seems to have taken away what I had already written. Whether it sent it or not I don't know but I shall try again. Thank you so very much for this review and the observations on the whales. It must be wonderful to see them so close in but, as you say, they are doing this for the protection of their young. I have been given to understand the whales' "hearing" is extremely sensitive and they can pick up sound waves over their whole body not just through "ears" like us. If this is the case, loud, man made noise must sheer torture for them. Out of water on, a deserted New Zealand beach for example, their sensory perceptors would be less assaulted by the sounds of the deep than under water. It's just a theory, but one that seems to have some logic.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, with its alteration on a theme from stanza to stanza, connects us, with your well-chosen words (main, like it) to the inoffensive and fragile creatures of the sea.
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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This poem, with its alteration on a theme from stanza to stanza, connects us, with your well-chosen words (main, like it) to the inoffensive and fragile creatures of the sea.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Many thanks yet again for your kind and sensitive review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from I am Cat
' I couldn't have these remarkable creatures imprisoned in a form of poetry devised by mankind.'
What a wonderful sentence and thought process. I agree...
I love the thoughts you have about whale "suicide"... so sad, that they do this. Are they trying to walk? Is it unbearable for them there? I agree, it's really concerning...
For me, the constant use of "concern" is a concern. :)
I think it's overused somewhat and I understand why you're doing it... but after awhile, it becomes.... trite.
perhaps ending the stanza, or beginning, but not both? I don't have the answer... just a thought.
also, the last line: 'That none this is of concern to me. ' (of course, you're not American, and so this might not apply, but we would have said, "That none of this is of concern to me". (note the extra "of")
Well done, as usual,
Cat
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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' I couldn't have these remarkable creatures imprisoned in a form of poetry devised by mankind.'
What a wonderful sentence and thought process. I agree...
I love the thoughts you have about whale "suicide"... so sad, that they do this. Are they trying to walk? Is it unbearable for them there? I agree, it's really concerning...
For me, the constant use of "concern" is a concern. :)
I think it's overused somewhat and I understand why you're doing it... but after awhile, it becomes.... trite.
perhaps ending the stanza, or beginning, but not both? I don't have the answer... just a thought.
also, the last line: 'That none this is of concern to me. ' (of course, you're not American, and so this might not apply, but we would have said, "That none of this is of concern to me". (note the extra "of")
Well done, as usual,
Cat
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Oh dear! You've found a typo. The extra of is about to be inserted. Thanks for that. No one else has spotted that.
Comment from scd41
Your poem expresses well deep concern for whales and their reported mass suicide attempts. One reason for their abnormal behaviour could be due to too much noise being made by human actvities. Who knows, when men are having whale of a time, what the real whales may be getting at the receiving end.
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Your poem expresses well deep concern for whales and their reported mass suicide attempts. One reason for their abnormal behaviour could be due to too much noise being made by human actvities. Who knows, when men are having whale of a time, what the real whales may be getting at the receiving end.
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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It's a whale of a problem and the puns keep coming. Many thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from benoenose
Exceptionally informative poem brings out the concern of the species being tortured. The poet looks at the dominance of human beings over the sea a threat to sea mammals. Therefore the poet urges the security of the sea animals needs care. Read by all animal lover, ecologist, green activists, and those redeeming sea species.
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Exceptionally informative poem brings out the concern of the species being tortured. The poet looks at the dominance of human beings over the sea a threat to sea mammals. Therefore the poet urges the security of the sea animals needs care. Read by all animal lover, ecologist, green activists, and those redeeming sea species.
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you for this my true friend. Thes stars are most welcome.
Comment from w.j.debi
It is a mystery why the noble mammals are heading for the beaches, especially whole pods. It is a worry because we as humans are often too late to figure out what is going on with the animals. Often it has consequences for us as well. I hope we can figure it out and save them before it is too late.
This is s well written commentary. Once, it may have been no concern for us what the whale did, how it lived, or how it died, but now it has to be.
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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It is a mystery why the noble mammals are heading for the beaches, especially whole pods. It is a worry because we as humans are often too late to figure out what is going on with the animals. Often it has consequences for us as well. I hope we can figure it out and save them before it is too late.
This is s well written commentary. Once, it may have been no concern for us what the whale did, how it lived, or how it died, but now it has to be.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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You have picked up my point so well. Many thanks for this review and the stars.
Comment from valerieellis
Excellent!! What a beautiful tribute to not only whales but all animal species that are being driven from their home because of the callous ways of men.
The imagery was vivid and as always in your poems, the words flowed smoothly making it very easy to follow and understand. I look forward to reading more of your writings (especially about animals!). I love nature and all animals except mice!! Ughhhh! Shiver!! God bless :)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Excellent!! What a beautiful tribute to not only whales but all animal species that are being driven from their home because of the callous ways of men.
The imagery was vivid and as always in your poems, the words flowed smoothly making it very easy to follow and understand. I look forward to reading more of your writings (especially about animals!). I love nature and all animals except mice!! Ughhhh! Shiver!! God bless :)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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You are most kind. Many thanks for reading and reviewing
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Notes very informative. Action flows smoothly like a whale in the water. Story line easy to follow. Well written. Write on.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Notes very informative. Action flows smoothly like a whale in the water. Story line easy to follow. Well written. Write on.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Many thanks Brett for reading and reviewing this
Comment from BlueMarble
"I cannot any longer say....... that none of this is of concern to me is "
This very well written and entertaining poem carries a strong message and gets it across wonderfully well.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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"I cannot any longer say....... that none of this is of concern to me is "
This very well written and entertaining poem carries a strong message and gets it across wonderfully well.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Thank you for you generous review.