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Comment from JasmineNikki
An interesting storyline with a very real message. Wendy is a character we can all relate to on some level I think!
Love your work :)
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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An interesting storyline with a very real message. Wendy is a character we can all relate to on some level I think!
Love your work :)
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Thank you for reading this story, and for enjoying it. Your special rating is appreciated. Thanks again, Nicole.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh so cute. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. I have two fat orange male tabbies and they relish in their size. I do think that admirable. LOL Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Oh so cute. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. I have two fat orange male tabbies and they relish in their size. I do think that admirable. LOL Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
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Thanks, Barbara.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Important to take care of the small stuff of day to day living but not dwell on most of it. Story illustrates this fact well. Action flows smoothly and story line easy to follow. Write on.
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Important to take care of the small stuff of day to day living but not dwell on most of it. Story illustrates this fact well. Action flows smoothly and story line easy to follow. Write on.
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you for reading and appreciating this.
Comment from marion
Hi there
I found your story amusing! And well crafted. And tight, what good flash fiction has to be. I thought you wrote the last third extremely well. Excellent dialogue, and a very satisfactory ending. Couldn't fault 'Worldly Worries'. Good luck in the contest.
Marion.
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Hi there
I found your story amusing! And well crafted. And tight, what good flash fiction has to be. I thought you wrote the last third extremely well. Excellent dialogue, and a very satisfactory ending. Couldn't fault 'Worldly Worries'. Good luck in the contest.
Marion.
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you, for reading and appreciating this story.
Comment from jpduck
I did enjoy this. You described poor, anxiety-ridden Wendy in a delightfully light-hearted style. I loved the way you established an excellent contrast between Wendy and the carefree, indolent moggy.
Adrian
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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I did enjoy this. You described poor, anxiety-ridden Wendy in a delightfully light-hearted style. I loved the way you established an excellent contrast between Wendy and the carefree, indolent moggy.
Adrian
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you, for reading and appreciating this story.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I really enjoyed this entry into the competition.
The 'conversation' with the cat was really good and believable. I think we all do that - I certainly did with my rabbit(!).
Nice way to look at mundane worries over the BIG stuff.
Good read and good luck in the competition.
GMG
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Hi there,
I really enjoyed this entry into the competition.
The 'conversation' with the cat was really good and believable. I think we all do that - I certainly did with my rabbit(!).
Nice way to look at mundane worries over the BIG stuff.
Good read and good luck in the competition.
GMG
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from Annette Gulliver
Hi Nicole, I haven't seen you on FS for a while. This is a nice story with a happy ending. Some of us (me included), get worried if we have nothing to worry about. I'm your typical worry-wart. But having one less thing, such as cancer, would be a tremendous relief. I like your cat, Sniffles (and he is Australian bred lol - good one). I wish you good luck in the contest.
cheers
Annette
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Hi Nicole, I haven't seen you on FS for a while. This is a nice story with a happy ending. Some of us (me included), get worried if we have nothing to worry about. I'm your typical worry-wart. But having one less thing, such as cancer, would be a tremendous relief. I like your cat, Sniffles (and he is Australian bred lol - good one). I wish you good luck in the contest.
cheers
Annette
Comment Written 01-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thanks, Annette. Yes, an Ozzy-bred Persian. You see--even the animals are becoming cosmopolitan, lol!
Comment from c_lucas
It doesn't do any good to spend your life as a worry-wart. Life goes on. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words and good imagery.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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It doesn't do any good to spend your life as a worry-wart. Life goes on. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words and good imagery.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Ha-ha! I like that phrase .. worry wart. It's a great description. You are right. Some people allow themselves to become overwhelmed with too much.
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You're welcome, Nicole. Charlie
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Well written, as usual. She sounds like me... always something to worry about. Seldom free of things to do and afraid I'll forget one or more (and I do). When a big worry hits, tho, all my little ones disappear. I was surprised that while worrying about having cancer she would still take time to worry about all the little things that hardly matter in comparison. But we're all different. :)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Well written, as usual. She sounds like me... always something to worry about. Seldom free of things to do and afraid I'll forget one or more (and I do). When a big worry hits, tho, all my little ones disappear. I was surprised that while worrying about having cancer she would still take time to worry about all the little things that hardly matter in comparison. But we're all different. :)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Thanks, Phyllis. Worry-cycles feed on themselves, and that's when more things go wrong. We get distracted and do silly things when our minds are pre-occupied with bigger anxieties.
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Isn't that the truth! But how does one stop worrying, when one is a 'born worrier' like me?
Comment from Jay Squires
A cute Flash Fiction story, that you built up effectively by contrasting Sniffles' attitude with hers. Entertaining and polished, with but a few concerns:
while he pawed his right ear with a cupped paw.[You might look for a synonym for one of the paws]
he sat upright and licked his crotch, as if to say, "Balls, mate." [Sniffles has quite a sense of humor.]
where she realised she had different shoes on [May I suggest "unmatched" shoes on.? It also avoids using different twice in one sentence.]
only her head nodded, ["only" can carry two meanings here: Was her head the only thing that nodded, or did you intend "only" to mean "except"?]
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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A cute Flash Fiction story, that you built up effectively by contrasting Sniffles' attitude with hers. Entertaining and polished, with but a few concerns:
while he pawed his right ear with a cupped paw.[You might look for a synonym for one of the paws]
he sat upright and licked his crotch, as if to say, "Balls, mate." [Sniffles has quite a sense of humor.]
where she realised she had different shoes on [May I suggest "unmatched" shoes on.? It also avoids using different twice in one sentence.]
only her head nodded, ["only" can carry two meanings here: Was her head the only thing that nodded, or did you intend "only" to mean "except"?]
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Hi, Jay.
Yeah, all good, mate. I love your suggestions, and have made them. It serves me right for posting this just before 2:00 am.
Yours sincerely
Sniffles
