Littoral
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Playground of the Gull"Poems about the coastline
13 total reviews
Comment from I am Cat
Well, you've used every last last six I had... and this, the most reminiscent of Poe, has captured my heart!
I love the repeating last lines, the ominous suicidal call... and have been taught a bit about the Masonic oath... (coming from a long line of Masons) EGAD!
lol
I've always thought I had no fear of heights, but find that as I get older, and my center of gravity weakens and shifts, I become a bit more wary each day... I stay further and further from the edge...
The Grand Canyon had no fear of my walking the edge when I was there last, and though I'd still love to see many sights, I've found myself holding to the sides of many a solid foundation of many sights since.
The London Eye didn't bother me much, but little bridges that cross grand crevasses?...nah... I'll just wait here for you!
I loved this one...
Six Stars! * * * * * *
(that will have to do until the next round comes along... do we get them weekly or monthly?)
Well done... I'm stricken that i'm about to finish this book :(
You're right, I'm having a grand time... though a pauper's purse, I'm afraid. lol
Cat
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
  |
Well, you've used every last last six I had... and this, the most reminiscent of Poe, has captured my heart!
I love the repeating last lines, the ominous suicidal call... and have been taught a bit about the Masonic oath... (coming from a long line of Masons) EGAD!
lol
I've always thought I had no fear of heights, but find that as I get older, and my center of gravity weakens and shifts, I become a bit more wary each day... I stay further and further from the edge...
The Grand Canyon had no fear of my walking the edge when I was there last, and though I'd still love to see many sights, I've found myself holding to the sides of many a solid foundation of many sights since.
The London Eye didn't bother me much, but little bridges that cross grand crevasses?...nah... I'll just wait here for you!
I loved this one...
Six Stars! * * * * * *
(that will have to do until the next round comes along... do we get them weekly or monthly?)
Well done... I'm stricken that i'm about to finish this book :(
You're right, I'm having a grand time... though a pauper's purse, I'm afraid. lol
Cat
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
-
The sixes come in every Sunday so they are always thin on the ground after Wednesday. Not to worry. What is important to me is that you should enjoy my stuff. And judging by this review. I seem to hit the mark. Many thanks.
-
Indeed... you hit the mark. A lot. :)
Comment from Treischel
Those repeated lines were very effective. The poetic vision of that cliff ledge by the sea was. Reach taking. Winds sweet playground of the gull - so very effective. Your abcb rhymed verse with repeated rhymes were outstanding. The whole piece left me drifting between sky and sea. Great job!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
|
Those repeated lines were very effective. The poetic vision of that cliff ledge by the sea was. Reach taking. Winds sweet playground of the gull - so very effective. Your abcb rhymed verse with repeated rhymes were outstanding. The whole piece left me drifting between sky and sea. Great job!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
-
Thank you fot this I am so glad you are enjoying the series. There are plenty more to come!
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. This is fantastic and a form of your own as well, how on earth can you make up a form of poetry, crikey! The picture made me jump when I opened it, I was expecting a flock og Gulls LOL. Well done my friend, you are a star. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
|
G'day mate. This is fantastic and a form of your own as well, how on earth can you make up a form of poetry, crikey! The picture made me jump when I opened it, I was expecting a flock og Gulls LOL. Well done my friend, you are a star. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
-
More connectivity problems so I don't know whether you got my reple. Anyway thanks for this review and you create new forms every time you write whe meter goes collecting eggs or whatever!
Comment from lakeport
Playground of the gull, indeed that's a wonderful expressed story poem, very nice rhyming and flow. I enjoyed reading it, God bless you, Lakeport,
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
|
Playground of the gull, indeed that's a wonderful expressed story poem, very nice rhyming and flow. I enjoyed reading it, God bless you, Lakeport,
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
-
Lost my internet conection earlier so I may have already replied but many thanks for this review.
-
you are very welcome, Lakeport.
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a really beautiful description and comparison of the two extremes within the narrator's view. The contemplation of the leap, and the suspected feeling of flying with the sea birds seems like the kind of rationalization one who has lost reasons for going on might use to justify taking '...a forward pace and end it all.'
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
|
This is a really beautiful description and comparison of the two extremes within the narrator's view. The contemplation of the leap, and the suspected feeling of flying with the sea birds seems like the kind of rationalization one who has lost reasons for going on might use to justify taking '...a forward pace and end it all.'
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
-
Thanks Bill for another great review.
Comment from kriver
Hi
This was an interesting write
Good story line
Very good descriptive piece
I was surprised by the ending.
I really like the stallion in the picture
I found you note interesting as well.
Over all, I think it is a good write.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
|
Hi
This was an interesting write
Good story line
Very good descriptive piece
I was surprised by the ending.
I really like the stallion in the picture
I found you note interesting as well.
Over all, I think it is a good write.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
-
Thank you for reading and reviewing - and the stars.
Comment from bizzygirl
"Windswept playground of the gull" works so very well in this sad prose on suicide. IT is handled delicately with not demons and that is a relief. At first it is a little vague but it is so delicately written that I am hard pressed to find fault. Well done, intriguing interpretaion.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
|
"Windswept playground of the gull" works so very well in this sad prose on suicide. IT is handled delicately with not demons and that is a relief. At first it is a little vague but it is so delicately written that I am hard pressed to find fault. Well done, intriguing interpretaion.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
-
Thank you very much for reading and your generous review.
Comment from royowen
I'm not particularly fond of the heights of cliffs myself, I've gazed over the cliffs of Moher in western Ireland, they are pretty scary, I've been to North Wales, but not seen the cliffs. And the gap in the South heads at the entrance to Sydney harbour is a favourite place of suicide, if there can a favourite place! Awesome poem, it works well with the repeated proximate of the second and fourth lines, it has a sombre-like, dirge-like quality similar to a ballad, the language is a little funerial but elegant at the same time,I enjoyed this, well done, Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
|
I'm not particularly fond of the heights of cliffs myself, I've gazed over the cliffs of Moher in western Ireland, they are pretty scary, I've been to North Wales, but not seen the cliffs. And the gap in the South heads at the entrance to Sydney harbour is a favourite place of suicide, if there can a favourite place! Awesome poem, it works well with the repeated proximate of the second and fourth lines, it has a sombre-like, dirge-like quality similar to a ballad, the language is a little funerial but elegant at the same time,I enjoyed this, well done, Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
-
Very many thanksa for this most thorough and far-sighted review.
-
Most welcome.
Comment from Pyrrho
Your poem is interesting but your notes are fascinating. Such is the strangeness of the poetic mind. Your notes are outstanding and your poem is excellent. Pity I am not reviewing your notes.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
|
Your poem is interesting but your notes are fascinating. Such is the strangeness of the poetic mind. Your notes are outstanding and your poem is excellent. Pity I am not reviewing your notes.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
-
Oh hell! I'll change them round then! Thank you for readinf - especially the notes - and reviewing.
Comment from Gloria ....
Those truly are the kind of cliffs where nothing goes but birds and foolish windsurfers.
I love the flow and matter of factness of your poem. No blurring of the littoral up here.
I guess I had never really thought too much into these places before. Accessible and yet remote at the same time.
I enjoyed that thought, because it has a thrill to it including the invitation for feeling vertigo.
Beautiful addition to your book, although I am uncertain about what that stallion is going to do.
Remind me to stay away from the Masons, but my guess is no women allowed anyway, which is just as well because you know how much we love wagging our tongues. ;-)
Hope your Sunday is going great.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
|
Those truly are the kind of cliffs where nothing goes but birds and foolish windsurfers.
I love the flow and matter of factness of your poem. No blurring of the littoral up here.
I guess I had never really thought too much into these places before. Accessible and yet remote at the same time.
I enjoyed that thought, because it has a thrill to it including the invitation for feeling vertigo.
Beautiful addition to your book, although I am uncertain about what that stallion is going to do.
Remind me to stay away from the Masons, but my guess is no women allowed anyway, which is just as well because you know how much we love wagging our tongues. ;-)
Hope your Sunday is going great.
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
-
Yeah - you want to watch that wagging tongue when the masons are about! Many people have asked about the horse. The truth is this was the best piece of cliff top art I could find and the horse just happened to be in it. Mind you, I think he is rearing up in horror at the drop infront of him. I am also mentioning that I am sponsored by Lloyds Bank to the tune of £100 every time I get their logo (the prancing black horse) on screen, but that unfortunately is just wishful thinking - chance would be a fine thing! I am also working on a contract with Ferrari!