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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Eccles-by-the-Sea"
Poems about the coastline

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Comment from I am Cat
Exceptional
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What a wonderful, wonderfully delicious poem for the tongue! lol
I enjoyed this immensely!
All the alliteration and the back and forth dancing and prancing and the metaphorical use of the fish for human souls, and all the delish fish references... i loved it!
I went over it and over it...
there was only one thing i hung on:

But all that busy bustle was long decades gone ago...

for some reason I want to say, instead:
'But all the busy bustle was gone decades long ago...'

but perhaps that's an American tale, eh? I dunno... I understand how it can go both ways, and the way you've spoken far exceeds any trash/american lingo I've got going... trust me, i know this... however.... that's the only part I had to go back and go.... huh?

lol

But i so enjoyed this...

and this, especially:

'A lobster preaches from the pulpit to lost soles prostrate in the sandy aisles,
while hake and herring hang around the public houses,
shoaling, where there once went strolling, through now silent streets,
fisher-folk by gardens green, where grew red roses and high hollyhocks,
now sown with kelp and dabberlocks, while bladder wrack
proliferates in what was once prize-winning onion patch.

Here is a sea-change Shakespeare never dramatized,
for in his day this Norfolk town stood high and dry,
where now the cliff-tops crumble, their bases breaker-buffeted,
as the North Sea wreaks its vengeance, undeserved,
upon the guiltless land that, with the help of man more culpable,
reclaimed its kingdom briefly, three centuries no more,

when driven ditch, dug deep, and dyke dammed high
The Wash, that brackish marshland, drained down, dry. '

pure magic! ****** SIX STARS... (TEN if you ask me!)

fall for a mind... you bet your arse! lol
Cat

 Comment Written 07-May-2015


reply by the author on 07-May-2015
    Now this was something else to wake up to. Set me up for the day. I liked the alliteration of the two hard gs close together in gone ago. now I 've got to go.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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The sea can take what it wants when it wants. Poem contains action that flows smoothly and an easy to follow story line. Write on.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
    Lost my internet conection earlier so I may have already replied but many thanks for this review.
Comment from Bill Schott
Exceptional
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What an amazing scene personified and using anamorphous descriptions to give surreal meaning to all the activity in this slice of the sea world.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
    Fresh from my consultations of the OED on "anamorphous" (does that make us one all?) I can say "Thank you very much for this most perspicacious review and the generous 6 stars."
reply by Bill Schott on 26-Apr-2015
    Sorry...meant anthropomorphous...associating animals with human qualities
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
    But anamorphous worked just as well!!
Comment from benoenose
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Disaster of a great civilization has been destroyed. According to the author that incident was a terrible lose. The poet laments the cruelty of the sea.
Read by all those who experience natural disasters, and natural calamities.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from BeasPeas
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Hi gynt. I'm impressed with this wonderful poem, its content, descriptions, alliteration throughout, and your writing skill. Completely enjoyable, as are the author's notes. Marilyn/BeasPeas

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    Well, thank you so much for that complimentary review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from Treischel
Exceptional
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Another well deserved six is proffered up for this truly elegant free verse description of sunken city. Your metaphors were delightfully expressive. The alliteration was outstanding, it flowed on jagged lines like the waves lapping at a shore. Very colorful and creative. Another amazing masterpiece.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    You are too kind, sir. Thank you very much for this sensitive and complimentary review, not to mention the six stars.
Comment from lakeport
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Eccles by the sea, indeed the power of the sea drowned the communities, what an
dramatic event, I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you. Lakeport.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing and I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
reply by lakeport on 25-Apr-2015
    you are very welcome, Lakeport.
Comment from Walu Feral
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G'day mate, slowly but surely I am catching up. This is another perfectly written and brilliatly thoughtout project you have presented my friend. I will say that you have to watch those drunken Hake and Herring though when they are on the town LOL. Great stuff again from a master craftsman of the English language. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    I thought you might pick up on the Hake and Herring and probably have little truck with the lobster. You're not far behind now, mate. Thanks for the review.
Comment from samsaysagain
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Excellent. A very interesting accounting of an area the majority of people would not be familiar with. In reference to the third verse - do you have any information referring to 'sole' being the same as an expression used in cooking, "fillet of sole"?
I t was served many times during the season of Lent on 'meatless'' Friday's. The long explanation must have taken considerable time to write and was a definite plus and necessary if readers were to understand this post. Nicely done. An unexpected history lesson!

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    Thank you for your thorough review and stars. As to your question' there are two types of sole served up in British restaurants: Dover sole and lemon sole. The lemon is smaller, more common and cheaper. It is a very tasty fish and, being found close to the coast would have been available from the earliest of times and a popular alternative to meat on fast days.
reply by samsaysagain on 25-Apr-2015
Comment from Donovan
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Your work stands on its own. I don't need to read author notes first. If I need to know it, include it in the work. You have expressed yourself well. Your words paint a description that far exceeds what you have written. Your emotion comes through in your writing and in the end that is what gives you a unique point of view. Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    Thank you for your point of view. Unfortunately not everyone is as intelligent as you, sir. Someone would have pointed out that I had spelt "souls" wrongly if I hadn't mentioned it in the notes!