Littoral
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Nocturne"Poems about the coastline
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Comment from I am Cat
I HATE sharks!
HATE HATE HATE Sharks!
Did I mention I hate sharks?
*shakes head and runs out of water*....
you had me lulled in....
now I'm out and in my Lexus and on my way inland!
Yikes!
why did it have to be sharks?
:(
grrrrrr
Well done... I think you have that "horror" part down well.
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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I HATE sharks!
HATE HATE HATE Sharks!
Did I mention I hate sharks?
*shakes head and runs out of water*....
you had me lulled in....
now I'm out and in my Lexus and on my way inland!
Yikes!
why did it have to be sharks?
:(
grrrrrr
Well done... I think you have that "horror" part down well.
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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You have to take the rough with the smooth. Life's got sharks! Thanks for the scary review. There are no more sharks. I promise.
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Oh thank you thank you.... (but trust me, I'm not going back in the water unless it's a shower or a pool!) :)
Comment from Treischel
A perfectly well executed Terza Rima. Love the title. The underwater colors came vibrantly through in phosphorescent detail. You get into the mind of a shark. The transition from idyllic to realistic shark hunt was well done.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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A perfectly well executed Terza Rima. Love the title. The underwater colors came vibrantly through in phosphorescent detail. You get into the mind of a shark. The transition from idyllic to realistic shark hunt was well done.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Many thanks for this. I don't know much about sharks escept that they suffer from insomnia and night starvation!
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day again mate. Not having been there I can't talk first hand, but I have many old friends who have and they confirm your beautiful poem and author notes. This is another fantastic form, you are so good at this poetry caper as I have said before. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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G'day again mate. Not having been there I can't talk first hand, but I have many old friends who have and they confirm your beautiful poem and author notes. This is another fantastic form, you are so good at this poetry caper as I have said before. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Been checking up on me have you? Glad to know you're still enjoying the stuff. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Bill Schott
I learned something new today, and that's always good. I have always been under the impression that the terza rima was 14 lines, like a sonnet. Following your author's notes I looked it up and saw that there were indeed a couple variations on the form. So, a good day. Your poem, lastly revealed as the sharks prowl, is rife with internal rhyme and alliteration. It was well presented, interesting, and, as I said, informative. Happy day.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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I learned something new today, and that's always good. I have always been under the impression that the terza rima was 14 lines, like a sonnet. Following your author's notes I looked it up and saw that there were indeed a couple variations on the form. So, a good day. Your poem, lastly revealed as the sharks prowl, is rife with internal rhyme and alliteration. It was well presented, interesting, and, as I said, informative. Happy day.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Glad you enjoyed it, Bill. Many of these more obscure forms seem to all ow slightly different variations. I just liked the way the stanzas were linked by a rhyme word - that and the chance to write a killer of a final line. Thanks for the review and the stars.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I love this little series you are writing. Great imagery makes me want to be snorkeling - until the ending - lol.
Blessings
teresa
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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I love this little series you are writing. Great imagery makes me want to be snorkeling - until the ending - lol.
Blessings
teresa
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Ah yes - the ending! Thanks for your kind review. Glad you are enjoying the series.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired the idyllic scene that turned into a story of survival in the final line. I enjoyed your rhymed tercets and am glad you have positive memories of Grenada before "progress"! Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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I admired the idyllic scene that turned into a story of survival in the final line. I enjoyed your rhymed tercets and am glad you have positive memories of Grenada before "progress"! Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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You seem to know the place too - those were the days. Many thanks for your kind review and the stars
Comment from benoenose
Oceanic survival is the great odds that you face, is what the poet advocates. So shiny and bright and also dangerous and tragic. Communicating the beauty of the Ocean the author points out the challenges of the beach.
This poem is thrill to read and is widely read by beach lovers and adventurous people of the sea.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Oceanic survival is the great odds that you face, is what the poet advocates. So shiny and bright and also dangerous and tragic. Communicating the beauty of the Ocean the author points out the challenges of the beach.
This poem is thrill to read and is widely read by beach lovers and adventurous people of the sea.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Very many thanks yet again for your encouraging review and the stars.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Good background information. Picture adds depth to this well written poem. Action flows well. Story line easy to follow. Even sharks have to eat. Write on.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Good background information. Picture adds depth to this well written poem. Action flows well. Story line easy to follow. Even sharks have to eat. Write on.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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That's about all they do isn't it - eat? Many thanks for another kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
A skilled tercet with a sharp set of teeth at the end. I think that the single line ending delivers more punch than a couplet. It seems that Charon will soon be ferrying some little fishes! Nice near rhyme with Grenada/water.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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A skilled tercet with a sharp set of teeth at the end. I think that the single line ending delivers more punch than a couplet. It seems that Charon will soon be ferrying some little fishes! Nice near rhyme with Grenada/water.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Many thanks for your searching and complimentary review. You're the first one to comment on that near rhyme. Thank you for that.
Comment from petalangela
The predators tale of survival so eternal so vicious and so nessecary for survival. You tell it with words that can almost romance the kill
The shark is feral and totally misunderstood. But mankind kills just because it can
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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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The predators tale of survival so eternal so vicious and so nessecary for survival. You tell it with words that can almost romance the kill
The shark is feral and totally misunderstood. But mankind kills just because it can
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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You are so right I'm sure about the shark and mankind. So how come most of us, if we're honest, would prefer the company of mankind than sharks? It's a question that has to be asked. Many thanks for your kind review.
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I detest mankind as a rule but will help the abused und the vulnerable