Ain't That The Truth
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Germs Deferred "Short poems poking fun at the human condition.
28 total reviews
Comment from ronnie k
Wonderful spitfire, this says so much about true, faith full, working through when the path seems closed are dangerous, amen, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Wonderful spitfire, this says so much about true, faith full, working through when the path seems closed are dangerous, amen, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Hi, Ronnie. Always good to hear from you. Love your take on this. :-)
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I cough in my elbow so that wouldn't work too well. My hands are probably cleaner than my elbows...I guess it's all how you cover you cough when you're sick. Great job with this
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I cough in my elbow so that wouldn't work too well. My hands are probably cleaner than my elbows...I guess it's all how you cover you cough when you're sick. Great job with this
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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THanks, Meghan. You're right. Coughing into the elbow doesn't do it. The best way is to nod.
Comment from Pantygynt
I call this a senryu - it's about people anless you call it a haiku because it's about nature - germs!
Don't shake hands and you wont catch flu;
Wanna say "Hi" then here's what ya do;
Bang each other's elbows on the funny bone
Let your laughter spread the germs 'cos they won't leave you alone.
If the flu's gonna get ya then the flu'll be your fate,
So leave your germy friends on the far side of your gate.
Sorry about that it sneezed its way into my mind.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I call this a senryu - it's about people anless you call it a haiku because it's about nature - germs!
Don't shake hands and you wont catch flu;
Wanna say "Hi" then here's what ya do;
Bang each other's elbows on the funny bone
Let your laughter spread the germs 'cos they won't leave you alone.
If the flu's gonna get ya then the flu'll be your fate,
So leave your germy friends on the far side of your gate.
Sorry about that it sneezed its way into my mind.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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LOL. What a creative review. It is a senryu, but I define it as a 5-7-5 so I get to name it something other than the first line.
Thanks for reading. I always love to hear from someone new.
Comment from Glasstruth
Good alliteration, and your almost rhyming I like. Just wonder if kids know what the peace sign is? Some see it as a victory sign. Read your author notes. If I was there I'd make sure my hands would be nice and sweaty. For 17 syllables you wrote as much as you could. Well crafted. Les
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Good alliteration, and your almost rhyming I like. Just wonder if kids know what the peace sign is? Some see it as a victory sign. Read your author notes. If I was there I'd make sure my hands would be nice and sweaty. For 17 syllables you wrote as much as you could. Well crafted. Les
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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LOL. You're right about some thinking of the peace sign as victory or the hippy generation. Thanks, Les. Remind me to never shake hands with you. LOL We'll air kiss instead.
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Yup! Felt it. :)
Comment from judiverse
Oh, I know what you mean. I've had a runny nose and cough and sneeze when I step outside. I don't think I'm contagious, but others may not know that. Last night at rehearsal, one of the guys sat way in the back of the room because he thought he was contagious. Have to beware of spreading germs. How about politicians who do all that handshaking? Maybe they'll take to doing elbow pumps instead. Some people wondered if Jay Leno carried hand sanitizer in his pocket after shaking so many hands. What about shaking a dog's paw? Now see what you've made me do. I'm off on a tangent. You've accomplished your goal. judi
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Oh, I know what you mean. I've had a runny nose and cough and sneeze when I step outside. I don't think I'm contagious, but others may not know that. Last night at rehearsal, one of the guys sat way in the back of the room because he thought he was contagious. Have to beware of spreading germs. How about politicians who do all that handshaking? Maybe they'll take to doing elbow pumps instead. Some people wondered if Jay Leno carried hand sanitizer in his pocket after shaking so many hands. What about shaking a dog's paw? Now see what you've made me do. I'm off on a tangent. You've accomplished your goal. judi
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Sounds as if you have allergies. How thoughtful of that man to sit in back. My does knuckle pumps with his patients. :-)
Are you following story of the month contest? I can't believe it. Every time I get a vote, mfowler does too and stays one jump ahead. I've seen this happen in a lot of prompts. Oh well, I never expected to get any votes and was surprised the judges picked this "first page of a novel" as an entry. Seems as if they break their own rules! It's not a story.
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If I have allergies, an allergy shot didn't help. Will have to check out the Story of the Month contest. I'm never nominated so usually don't follow. Seems as though it's mostly fiction that gets the nod, so you did good to get nominated. judi
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That's how I feel. I lost by two points in the end, but it was encouraging:-)
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You made a great showing in the Story of the Month contest, anyway. Congratulations for that. I think there should be a separate category for fiction and non-fiction. judi
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Why not suggest it to Tom?
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I believe your entry in the story of the month contest was one of two non-fiction selections. That tilt in favor of fiction seems to go on every month. I think it would be something to consider. Congrats again on placing second. judi
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day Shari, what does the whole congregation have the flu? LOL. These little pieces are starting to tickle my fancy now and if I get real brave I might even try one, gotta learn what a syllable is first. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Hahahaha! G'day Shari, what does the whole congregation have the flu? LOL. These little pieces are starting to tickle my fancy now and if I get real brave I might even try one, gotta learn what a syllable is first. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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You should hear all the coughing! Seriously.
Hey, go for it. :-)
Comment from michaelcahill
I need to quit my job and becomming a starving full time member. I miss this stuff. Hahaha! How very true this is. Our Pastor spent the whole morning explaining over and over why he wouldn't shake hands with anyone. He had the flu. It really is a hand shaking place, isn't it! I've been sneaking by and reading for free. :)) I'll try and get some reviews in. I want to catch up with your story. mikey
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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I need to quit my job and becomming a starving full time member. I miss this stuff. Hahaha! How very true this is. Our Pastor spent the whole morning explaining over and over why he wouldn't shake hands with anyone. He had the flu. It really is a hand shaking place, isn't it! I've been sneaking by and reading for free. :)) I'll try and get some reviews in. I want to catch up with your story. mikey
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Ah, no fair. Wonder why I hadn't heard from you. It works both ways after a while. Love your story about the compassionate pastor.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Great alliteration in ..coughing/church/crowd...
sounds like ours..
Your syllable count and line arrangement was flawless
as usual.
I love your clever 5-7-5 messages
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Great alliteration in ..coughing/church/crowd...
sounds like ours..
Your syllable count and line arrangement was flawless
as usual.
I love your clever 5-7-5 messages
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Yea! You're the first to remark on that. Readers don't realize that this is a conscious poetic effort. :-)
Comment from fairy77
I found this amusing and thought provoking. I felt you said a lot in few words and the pic was very funny. Nice job Shari. It was very funny!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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I found this amusing and thought provoking. I felt you said a lot in few words and the pic was very funny. Nice job Shari. It was very funny!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Hello there, beth. Good to hear from you again. Thanks for keeping in touch.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Reminded me of the extreme measures taken during the SAARS crisis in Toronto some years back. Then bird flu, swine flu ... and heck, it's winter flu!
Been away for a couple of weeks and just got back. My mom passed away. Travelled back home for the funeral. Still tired. Glad to be back on FS, and happy for Mom.
Sonali
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Reminded me of the extreme measures taken during the SAARS crisis in Toronto some years back. Then bird flu, swine flu ... and heck, it's winter flu!
Been away for a couple of weeks and just got back. My mom passed away. Travelled back home for the funeral. Still tired. Glad to be back on FS, and happy for Mom.
Sonali
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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I missed you. My condolences on your loss. Glad to hear your happy approach. I know my mother was anxious to go Home. Maybe she'll meet Harold. :-)