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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Like how you included lines from the last chapter as a refresher for the reader. Well written. Descriptive language throughout held reader's interest. Write on.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Like how you included lines from the last chapter as a refresher for the reader. Well written. Descriptive language throughout held reader's interest. Write on.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Thanks for reviewing chapter 10. It's always nice to hear from a new reviewer. I'm glad you liked it.
Marv
Comment from Ashar001
Hilarious!! The dialogue is getting nowhere and I loved the absurdity of the whole scene. What a nightmare to be in, but Russ manages to bluff his way through it all in a very convincing, nutty style. The tragic is in that very final sentence: He may be right, being it the best writing. But neither Charley, nor we have any clue what the screenplay is about....
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Hilarious!! The dialogue is getting nowhere and I loved the absurdity of the whole scene. What a nightmare to be in, but Russ manages to bluff his way through it all in a very convincing, nutty style. The tragic is in that very final sentence: He may be right, being it the best writing. But neither Charley, nor we have any clue what the screenplay is about....
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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I can't thank you enough for this rating. You caught on and enjoyed everything I tried to do here. Now you have me wondering what the screenplay is about.
Thank you, thank you, thank you.
Marv
Comment from BeasPeas
Well, this certainly is interesting. Read it through twice to pick up the gist of it because I think I'm coming in in the middle. Nevertheless, I'll review on what I know from this chapter. The dialogue is snappy and interesting. Character of Charley is well defined and I like him. Russ, pitching his script, seems to be a fast learner and lets Charley take the lead, playing along which turns out to Russ's benefit. Looking forward to reading more. Marilyn
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Well, this certainly is interesting. Read it through twice to pick up the gist of it because I think I'm coming in in the middle. Nevertheless, I'll review on what I know from this chapter. The dialogue is snappy and interesting. Character of Charley is well defined and I like him. Russ, pitching his script, seems to be a fast learner and lets Charley take the lead, playing along which turns out to Russ's benefit. Looking forward to reading more. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Thanks for reviewing Chapter 10 and the generous rating. I'm glad you're interested in reading more.
Marv
Comment from linnietwotymez
This was good. The problem I had with it was confusion with who was actually talking. For instance, "I was just getting my things together." I did not know who was talking here. I think you assumed that the reader would, but someone unfamiliar with your work would struggle. I liked the dialogue.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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This was good. The problem I had with it was confusion with who was actually talking. For instance, "I was just getting my things together." I did not know who was talking here. I think you assumed that the reader would, but someone unfamiliar with your work would struggle. I liked the dialogue.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015
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Thanks for the four star rating. I'm glad you were able to get something out of this chapter despite the confusion. I'm not sure how this works, but maybe earlier chapters are available. If you're unable to find them and are still interested, I could send the Author's note and Prologue, then more, if you like.
Thanks again.
Marv
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no problem. sorry for responding so late. I will be on the look out for more of your work.
