Pleasant Screams
Who pulls the strings?10 total reviews
Comment from Dashjianta
This is very tightly written, and some excellent succinct description. I feel like I'm right there, watching the writer typing frantically as he's controlled by the mystery presence behind him.
However, the ending leaves me feeling lost. I feel like I've missed something, or need to know more of who this character is to get it.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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This is very tightly written, and some excellent succinct description. I feel like I'm right there, watching the writer typing frantically as he's controlled by the mystery presence behind him.
However, the ending leaves me feeling lost. I feel like I've missed something, or need to know more of who this character is to get it.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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The hooded figure is getting the writer to write frightening stories. The ending is another reader / reviewer reading those stories. That's all. Many thanks for the review.
Comment from jpduck
Character, setting and conflict were well established. But I'm not at all sure there was any resolution at the end. Indeed, I'm not even certain that I understand the ending. Who was in charge? the hovering figure or the dog and how exactly was the conflict resolved? It all seems to be continuing ad nauseam.
Adrian
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Character, setting and conflict were well established. But I'm not at all sure there was any resolution at the end. Indeed, I'm not even certain that I understand the ending. Who was in charge? the hovering figure or the dog and how exactly was the conflict resolved? It all seems to be continuing ad nauseam.
Adrian
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Yep. Spot on as usual. This is complete nonsense and I didn't read the full prompt rules before hand. I was waiting for a disqualification but it hasn't come yet! lol
All the best
Comment from Sasha
I couldn't order a latte in less than 100 words, let alone write a decent story. But you have done a terrific job with this one. I enjoyed it very much and wish you all the best in the contest too.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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I couldn't order a latte in less than 100 words, let alone write a decent story. But you have done a terrific job with this one. I enjoyed it very much and wish you all the best in the contest too.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Many thanks for reading and reviewing. It is very much appreciated.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
What a wonderful scary story, mystery writer. Ha, it helps to read in the daylight, though night time horror stories are much more effective.
Gidget sounds like a wonderful writing companion,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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What a wonderful scary story, mystery writer. Ha, it helps to read in the daylight, though night time horror stories are much more effective.
Gidget sounds like a wonderful writing companion,
Rhonda
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Many thanks for the kind words. Much appreciated.
Comment from LIJ Red
Must be the Gidget that plays pool. A good-natured salute to a Well known Fanstorian, and I see no glaring changes worth suggesting. An excellent post,
and to the prompt.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Must be the Gidget that plays pool. A good-natured salute to a Well known Fanstorian, and I see no glaring changes worth suggesting. An excellent post,
and to the prompt.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Many thanks for the review. Told with fondness and respect. Much appreciated.
Comment from Bill Schott
Is that how it happens? A keyboard, a barking dog, and a demon muse. I have to get me one of those (and I don't mean a snapping little dog). Thanks for a look behind the curtain.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Is that how it happens? A keyboard, a barking dog, and a demon muse. I have to get me one of those (and I don't mean a snapping little dog). Thanks for a look behind the curtain.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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It takes all sorts, doesn't it? Lol
Thanks for the review. Much appreciated
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hey... have you been peeking in my windows after midnight, heh-heh? And, yeah, Gidget does yelp an awful lot because she hates me devoting so much time to my writing instead of devoting it all to her.
Needless to say, I was a bit frightened that you know so much about my writing process and how it all goes down. That's a little terrifying in and of itself, LOL.
Great story, you had me falling off my bar stool here laughing my derriere off.
Best of luck to you in the contest. Happy Easter to you & yours! :} ~Dean
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Hey... have you been peeking in my windows after midnight, heh-heh? And, yeah, Gidget does yelp an awful lot because she hates me devoting so much time to my writing instead of devoting it all to her.
Needless to say, I was a bit frightened that you know so much about my writing process and how it all goes down. That's a little terrifying in and of itself, LOL.
Great story, you had me falling off my bar stool here laughing my derriere off.
Best of luck to you in the contest. Happy Easter to you & yours! :} ~Dean
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Many thanks for the gracious review. Told only with fondness and appreciation! Have a good Easter. All the best.
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Hah, and, all joking aside, I was very flattered by your story. It was very funny.
Gidget says, Yip-yip!, heh-heh... :}
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Ha ha - I love this - I follow
Dean, and after all this time,
he still manages to give me the
shivers - which is what he's out
to do - scare his readers.
But still I read his work.
Mind, he can write in the more gentler mode - in my bookcase I've kept his poem - The World So Blue - a favourite of mine. When he writes something mellow, I ask him "Is that you, Dean?" as if it didn't have his name on it, I wouldn't recognize it as his work.
Margaret
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Ha ha - I love this - I follow
Dean, and after all this time,
he still manages to give me the
shivers - which is what he's out
to do - scare his readers.
But still I read his work.
Mind, he can write in the more gentler mode - in my bookcase I've kept his poem - The World So Blue - a favourite of mine. When he writes something mellow, I ask him "Is that you, Dean?" as if it didn't have his name on it, I wouldn't recognize it as his work.
Margaret
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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His stuff is brilliant. I love it, all of it. I wish he wrote more lengthy prose more often. I am proud to call him my friend. His poem I think that I should like to be was fantastic as well. I will check out the one you mentioned as I may have missed it.
Many thanks for the comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from patcelaw
Another dark kind of work from someone who loves to have the reviewers cringe a bit as he reads the words. To make me cringe in 100 words is amazing. Patricia
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Another dark kind of work from someone who loves to have the reviewers cringe a bit as he reads the words. To make me cringe in 100 words is amazing. Patricia
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Many, many thanks for this great review. I really appreciate the feedback. All the best.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was very funny. You have a difficult task, to manage the flash fiction in just 100 words. And you do it beautifully! Many humorous finds, and I like the excerpt about Gidget. Your last line about reviwer screaming almost made me laugh out loud.
A very successful story, I wish you luck in the contest if it is still running.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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This was very funny. You have a difficult task, to manage the flash fiction in just 100 words. And you do it beautifully! Many humorous finds, and I like the excerpt about Gidget. Your last line about reviwer screaming almost made me laugh out loud.
A very successful story, I wish you luck in the contest if it is still running.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Many thanks for the great review. glad you saw the humour in it. Just a fun little piece.
All the best
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I meant Budget, not Budget. Damn spell check! lol
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The spell check did it again! Every time I type "G-I-D-G-E-T" it corrects it to "Budget". lol. I hope I had the dog's name right now, I had to put it inside quotes with all those dash marks. LMAO
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Yep, got it now. spell check can be a right git sometimes. lol