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Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Tiny King Crab"Poems about the coastline
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Comment from I am Cat
This one reminded me of Dr. Seuss', 'Yertle The Turtle'.... have you heard that one?
"I'm Yertle the Turtle, oh marvelous me, for I am ruler of all that I see!"
:) (I 'm a HUGE Seuss fan... pardon me... I can, indeed, recite entire books... it's a useless art, but nevertheless... it rants and raves through my brain at the most inappropriate times) ;)
anyway, i enjoyed this one too, but I couldn't stop thinking about Yertle.
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Cat
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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This one reminded me of Dr. Seuss', 'Yertle The Turtle'.... have you heard that one?
"I'm Yertle the Turtle, oh marvelous me, for I am ruler of all that I see!"
:) (I 'm a HUGE Seuss fan... pardon me... I can, indeed, recite entire books... it's a useless art, but nevertheless... it rants and raves through my brain at the most inappropriate times) ;)
anyway, i enjoyed this one too, but I couldn't stop thinking about Yertle.
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Cat
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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I haven't read Yertle though Seuss was active when I was a primary school teacher in the 70s & 80s. Must fly or the cars won't get counted. Lol
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1, 2, 3, 4, 5.... see? i started without you.
Comment from thomdble
Cute, charming and it put a smile on my face. This does call for repeated reads and then another reread. Then another smile at this cute and charming little piece of play with our playful language. Thank you for the little read.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Cute, charming and it put a smile on my face. This does call for repeated reads and then another reread. Then another smile at this cute and charming little piece of play with our playful language. Thank you for the little read.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. I'm glad it made you smile.
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Thank you for your kind review. I'm glad it made you smile.
Comment from patcelaw
This is an interesting poem. it appears to me that you have a love for the sea and the things that pertain to the sea. May your week be blessed, Patricia
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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This is an interesting poem. it appears to me that you have a love for the sea and the things that pertain to the sea. May your week be blessed, Patricia
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review. Yes, you are right about the sea and me.
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Thanks for your kind review. Yes, you are right about the sea and me.
Comment from Cindy Warren
You make it easy to visualize the little crab in his pool. I'm almost worried about him. What might spot him there and see him as lunch? You might want to add a picture, if the contest allows them. Good luck. You may have a winner here.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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You make it easy to visualize the little crab in his pool. I'm almost worried about him. What might spot him there and see him as lunch? You might want to add a picture, if the contest allows them. Good luck. You may have a winner here.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. I seem to have got the imagery right then. When I can work out how to incorporate the pictures I might well take your advice.
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Thank you for your kind review. I seem to have got the imagery right then. When I can work out how to incorporate the pictures I might well take your advice.
Comment from tfawcus
An interesting poem that could easily be taken as an extended metaphor for those times in our lives when we are, for a while, big fish in a small pond. It can be easy to become rather too full of our own self-importance until the tide comes in and restores a truer perspective on our worth.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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An interesting poem that could easily be taken as an extended metaphor for those times in our lives when we are, for a while, big fish in a small pond. It can be easy to become rather too full of our own self-importance until the tide comes in and restores a truer perspective on our worth.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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That is pretty much what is intended. Thanks for your review and the 5 stars.
Comment from Dawny53
I feel this is a fine entry.. I admire the content..because I love these little creatures so much. Like how you made him ruler of his own little.. or big.. universe!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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I feel this is a fine entry.. I admire the content..because I love these little creatures so much. Like how you made him ruler of his own little.. or big.. universe!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review. Google 'Triole' if you lie to learn more about this form of verse.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
I like the overall message the poem conveys of either a big fish (crab) in a small pool to a little fish (crab) in a large pool.
I am not familiar with this particular poetic construction but you seem to know what you are doing, and I could really picture the whole scenario.
My best wishes for the competition.
Warmly.,
Juliette
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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I like the overall message the poem conveys of either a big fish (crab) in a small pool to a little fish (crab) in a large pool.
I am not familiar with this particular poetic construction but you seem to know what you are doing, and I could really picture the whole scenario.
My best wishes for the competition.
Warmly.,
Juliette
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review. If you Google 'Triolet' you could quite quickly see what this form is about should you wish to.
Comment from Pyrrho
In third line, a comma is misplaced.
These oddball poem types often are more artificial than entertaining. Such is the case here for me. I cannot assess this as excellent, and even 'good' is too good for it, but I give you the benefit of my doubt.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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In third line, a comma is misplaced.
These oddball poem types often are more artificial than entertaining. Such is the case here for me. I cannot assess this as excellent, and even 'good' is too good for it, but I give you the benefit of my doubt.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Fair enough. Everyone is entitled to their own opinion. The triolet is a long established French form and of course to some all the French are as you put it "oddball". The comma is not misplaced as the poet is permitted to alter the puntuation in the repeated lines in order to vary the meaning. One thing I would agree with you on is that form for form's sake is somewhat precious but, since there is a Triolet competition running at present you could see a few more of this type of thing in the coming weeks. Anyway thanks for taking the time to read and review it. Didn't take long did it?