The Gift of Life!' III.
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Comment from mermaids
I feel like Jason is looking down on us and smiling at your writing. Keep writing about Jason, I like to read about him. This is a good prologue to your book and draws the reader into this book.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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I feel like Jason is looking down on us and smiling at your writing. Keep writing about Jason, I like to read about him. This is a good prologue to your book and draws the reader into this book.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much and lease honor my late son
{especialy on March 31st and April first.
Ricky....
Comment from CR Delport
Celebrating someone's life is a blessing. We don't know how much time we have with our loved ones. Ricky, this is well done.
Take care.
Christelle.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Celebrating someone's life is a blessing. We don't know how much time we have with our loved ones. Ricky, this is well done.
Take care.
Christelle.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much and lease honor my late son
{especialy on March 31st and April first.
Ricky....
Comment from Eric1
Hi Ricky, your prologue has really intrigued me my friend, you speak of true events and life changing events after the death of your son, I lost my daughter to cancer 15 months ago, i will follow your story with interest, may I become a fan in order not to miss anything?
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Hi Ricky, your prologue has really intrigued me my friend, you speak of true events and life changing events after the death of your son, I lost my daughter to cancer 15 months ago, i will follow your story with interest, may I become a fan in order not to miss anything?
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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So sorry to here about your loss.
Evidence reveals{I have seen it} that your dauhter and my son are Angels together enjoying the afterlife in Heaven.
I shall follow you and you follow me as we enjoy our remaining life here, now...
On Earth..
.Thanks so much and lease honor my late son
{especialy on March 31st and April first.
Ricky....
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Thank you for your thoughts Ricky.
Comment from Jacob Collins
I didn't really get a sense of the general idea of this book and the writing didn't particularly grab me. I think that you need to work more on the use of description in your work and to give us a better sense of what is to come to persuade us to continue to read. I also noticed a few grammatical errors which I have listed below:
Ill amaze you. I think you mean to say here: it will amaze you.
These questions and many,, remove one of the commas here
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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I didn't really get a sense of the general idea of this book and the writing didn't particularly grab me. I think that you need to work more on the use of description in your work and to give us a better sense of what is to come to persuade us to continue to read. I also noticed a few grammatical errors which I have listed below:
Ill amaze you. I think you mean to say here: it will amaze you.
These questions and many,, remove one of the commas here
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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It amazes the III is the third book on this subject.
No errors here.
As for didn't grab you that's because it is not finished and deserves the extra stars, thanks your errors!
ricky1024.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Dear friend, you start off really well, intriguing and compelling - that's a good prologue but a few things I'd change:
I'm not sure I understand what you mean by "his intact", Ricky.
I also would re-word this sentence, as it's a bit awkward as it exists, IMO - something like this: "My wife, four daughters, Jason and I..."
"End of chapter one" and what follows does not belong in the prologue - it's for your author's notes. Otherwise, I think you're off to a good start. :)
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Dear friend, you start off really well, intriguing and compelling - that's a good prologue but a few things I'd change:
I'm not sure I understand what you mean by "his intact", Ricky.
I also would re-word this sentence, as it's a bit awkward as it exists, IMO - something like this: "My wife, four daughters, Jason and I..."
"End of chapter one" and what follows does not belong in the prologue - it's for your author's notes. Otherwise, I think you're off to a good start. :)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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It's a prologue and chapter number One. as for a book?
That would be corrected.
Thanks,
Ricky..
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You are welcome.