Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Whole Lotta Man"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
54 total reviews
Comment from alf collier
Hi Brett. I found this a very poignant read, and I don't know what style of music you envisaged, but I could hear the long ago voice of Jim Reeves singing this, or Kenny Rogers (????). loved it, alf
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Hi Brett. I found this a very poignant read, and I don't know what style of music you envisaged, but I could hear the long ago voice of Jim Reeves singing this, or Kenny Rogers (????). loved it, alf
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Classic Country. That is what I am all about. Thank you for your comments and support. I really appreciate them very much.
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Wow!! Maybe I was just hoping, but I am soooo glad it was country. I could feel it!!!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Powerful piece of writing. This would make a wonderful song in country western style. I love the refrain... a whole lotta man in that little boy. Well done! :)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Powerful piece of writing. This would make a wonderful song in country western style. I love the refrain... a whole lotta man in that little boy. Well done! :)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Thank you. They are County music lyrics. Appreciate your comments.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is quite an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. There is a young man just waiting to get out in every boy. We just have to nurture them and not torture them and try to help them to become everything that they can.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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This is quite an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. There is a young man just waiting to get out in every boy. We just have to nurture them and not torture them and try to help them to become everything that they can.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments. Appreciate them very much.
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You are welcome.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a sad Country song. I am not sure about how it starts though. Is it the boy or the father that gets knocked down? I enjoyed reading it and liked the ending a lot. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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This is a sad Country song. I am not sure about how it starts though. Is it the boy or the father that gets knocked down? I enjoyed reading it and liked the ending a lot. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Neither. The father is driving along and they come across a dog, or an animal of some kind, that had been hit and the father uses that as a teaching moment to teach his son how to treat all animals with due respect not just the two legged kind. Appreciate your comments.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Brett, this is a wonderful story told in lyrical form, when I first started reading it I thought 'This doesn't work' but I was thinking in poetical terms.
As lyrics your words work wonderfully with it's repeating end line holding it all together and serving as a short chorus, I wish I had half the talent you have my friend.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Hi Brett, this is a wonderful story told in lyrical form, when I first started reading it I thought 'This doesn't work' but I was thinking in poetical terms.
As lyrics your words work wonderfully with it's repeating end line holding it all together and serving as a short chorus, I wish I had half the talent you have my friend.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments. Appreciate them.
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Megalips
The first stanza is about losing the family dog? This is a nice poem that walks through growing stages and the different lessons learned. It's a little like a country song, and "there's a whole lot a man" certainly rings like a lyric.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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The first stanza is about losing the family dog? This is a nice poem that walks through growing stages and the different lessons learned. It's a little like a country song, and "there's a whole lot a man" certainly rings like a lyric.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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It is a Country music lyric indeed. Appreciate your comments.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is very lyrical indeed. I like the juxtaposition of the voices in the piece. The narrator, the father and the son. Good word choices and an excellent rhythm.
GMG
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Hi there,
This is very lyrical indeed. I like the juxtaposition of the voices in the piece. The narrator, the father and the son. Good word choices and an excellent rhythm.
GMG
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments. Appreciate them.
Comment from scd41
From childhood, everyone tries to have an identity of his own. Unfortunately, the personality development gets stunted in the face of too much of parental control or interference. Given the support and encouragement from parents, every child can excel in some field or the other. Your poem nicely underscores the above least understood aspect of life.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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From childhood, everyone tries to have an identity of his own. Unfortunately, the personality development gets stunted in the face of too much of parental control or interference. Given the support and encouragement from parents, every child can excel in some field or the other. Your poem nicely underscores the above least understood aspect of life.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments. Appreciate them.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
This poem really does seem like a song, and I thought that before I saw the comment at the end. It is bittersweet, which life really is.
I love the way you tie in the son, and how well you represent those special features that finds the man inside the boy, and if you ask me, the converse is true!
Rhonda
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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This poem really does seem like a song, and I thought that before I saw the comment at the end. It is bittersweet, which life really is.
I love the way you tie in the son, and how well you represent those special features that finds the man inside the boy, and if you ask me, the converse is true!
Rhonda
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Thank you. Appreciate your comments.
Comment from chromeangel33
I love this poem! Your story line is outstanding and your rhyming scheme is on point. The only thing I could see, although I do not know if it was done purposely. You have written bad thing I done instead bad thing I had done. I thought it may sound better. Although it is of course your call. :)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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I love this poem! Your story line is outstanding and your rhyming scheme is on point. The only thing I could see, although I do not know if it was done purposely. You have written bad thing I done instead bad thing I had done. I thought it may sound better. Although it is of course your call. :)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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I wrote it as though a 10 year old boy was talking. What do you think? Appreciate your comments.
