Gifts for Life
Free Verse for Spiritual Contest10 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Extremely effective use of your refrain line to introduce each verse
compelling illustrative examples of things you would do if only you could
painfully-gleaned wisdom - I would add the hyphen
excellent tapestry imagery
strong verb choices
what moving wishes with a strong spiritual component
Brooke
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Extremely effective use of your refrain line to introduce each verse
compelling illustrative examples of things you would do if only you could
painfully-gleaned wisdom - I would add the hyphen
excellent tapestry imagery
strong verb choices
what moving wishes with a strong spiritual component
Brooke
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Thank you very much for a wonderful review.
Comment from Donovan
When poetry expresses how we feel followed by sound doctrine, well, there is not much else to say. If I could....fact is, you can and have.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2015
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When poetry expresses how we feel followed by sound doctrine, well, there is not much else to say. If I could....fact is, you can and have.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for a wonderful review. I really appreciate your comments.
Comment from Delahay
This sounds like the way we would keep our children from learning life's lessons the hard way by making the mistakes we have already learned from. But we can't do that and everyone has to experience life as it comes to them.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2015
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This sounds like the way we would keep our children from learning life's lessons the hard way by making the mistakes we have already learned from. But we can't do that and everyone has to experience life as it comes to them.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2015
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You are so right, but in my heart of hearts I think I would like them not to suffer so much. That is why God had to leave when Jesus was on the cross. It hurt Him so much and He was afraid He would save Him.
Thank you very much.
Comment from kiwijenny
I feel this too...I wish I could be a balm heal the sick bring some calm
But think about what we have done...Raised 3 kids daughters and son
Loved people taught children....If I could turns to did some good..
We r finite beings with infinite aspirations....Ecc 3:11
God bless
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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I feel this too...I wish I could be a balm heal the sick bring some calm
But think about what we have done...Raised 3 kids daughters and son
Loved people taught children....If I could turns to did some good..
We r finite beings with infinite aspirations....Ecc 3:11
God bless
Comment Written 06-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you very much.
Comment from RYME4U
VEry well done. This is descriptive and worded nicely. There is a smooth flow to the free verse. It is a well presented contest entry.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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VEry well done. This is descriptive and worded nicely. There is a smooth flow to the free verse. It is a well presented contest entry.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you very much for your kind and thoughtful review.
Comment from LeannaP
Hi there,
I really found this piece interesting.
I believe you followed the guidelines for
the writing prompt pretty well.
the line, If I could
I would gladly shower each one
with the worldly blessings , is my favorite of
this lovely illustration. The scheme of magical
and spiritual provision shines through here
great job and good luck
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Hi there,
I really found this piece interesting.
I believe you followed the guidelines for
the writing prompt pretty well.
the line, If I could
I would gladly shower each one
with the worldly blessings , is my favorite of
this lovely illustration. The scheme of magical
and spiritual provision shines through here
great job and good luck
Comment Written 06-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your positive and thoughtful review I am glad you liked it.
Comment from patcelaw
As a believer I would do all these things as well, If I Could. It is my desire to be the best witness for my Lord and Savior so others can come to know Jesus as savior. Patricia
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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As a believer I would do all these things as well, If I Could. It is my desire to be the best witness for my Lord and Savior so others can come to know Jesus as savior. Patricia
Comment Written 06-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your positive and thoughtful review I am glad you liked it.
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a very good spiritual poem for the prompt written in the voice (I assume) of the higher power of God. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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This is a very good spiritual poem for the prompt written in the voice (I assume) of the higher power of God. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 06-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your positive and thoughtful review I am glad you liked it.
Comment from risktaker
I like this very much. Due to free-will, we cannot interfere. We can advise, share our stories,warn, and hope they listen. In my experience, sometimes people ignore the message and make the choice to find out for themselves and live the same consequences you tried to prevent them living. I have thought "If I could" many days raising my twin daughters. I can relate, Amen and Amen!!!!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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I like this very much. Due to free-will, we cannot interfere. We can advise, share our stories,warn, and hope they listen. In my experience, sometimes people ignore the message and make the choice to find out for themselves and live the same consequences you tried to prevent them living. I have thought "If I could" many days raising my twin daughters. I can relate, Amen and Amen!!!!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your positive and thoughtful review I am glad you liked it. Amen!
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Comment from Ricky1024
Thankz for that spiritual pice .
"It was well written in a continuance of non-prose."
"Imagery, objective and objective Contents are excellent."
"Good luck.'
Ricky1024.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thankz for that spiritual pice .
"It was well written in a continuance of non-prose."
"Imagery, objective and objective Contents are excellent."
"Good luck.'
Ricky1024.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for your positive and thoughtful review I am glad you liked it.