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Porn in the Drum

band booster parent story (PLEASE READ before judging)

16 total reviews 
Comment from judiverse
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Oh, that must have been fun! Depriving the boys of their Playboy picture. I enjoyed reading about how you got the picture out of the drum and then burned it. High school kids need to have their attention on other things besides Playboy pictures. Flows very smoothly and really keeps to the subject. judi

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
    There was a post that reminded me of that story which I had not thought of in many years. My daughter said, Mom, you made the kids behave and they respected you for that in their lives.
reply by judiverse on 23-Jan-2015
    Your action let the boys know they couldn't get away with hiding their Playboy in the drum. judi
Comment from alexisleech
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I can well imagine what the boys thought when they noticed the picture was missing! It reminds me of the time my teenage son and his friend went onto internet porn sites while my husband and I were out for dinner. The following day my secretary couldn't get onto the internet because it was blocked by a never-ending ring of porn sites. Boy, was he in trouble!

I enjoyed your well written story very much. Thank you for sharing.

Alexis x

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
    Thanks for reviewing Porn In the drum. I am sure it probably speaks to others who have had boys.
Comment from misscookie
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

You had my attention from the start even though at first I was not going to read. LOL
I'm glad you said read before you judge.
I thought this was a very interesting read the little thing boys would do is amazing.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
    Thanks for reading, I knew the title might make some hesitant tto read, but glad you read as it has a good moral to it. And thanks too for the six stars.
reply by misscookie on 23-Jan-2015
    Like the say you can't tell a book by it's cover. LOL
    You're very welcome.
    Have a blessed week end.
    Until next time, Cookie
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Hah, they probably thought they were had, done for, about to meet their makers...all of the above LOL. I think it was better them not knowing. It probably creeped them all out.

Good work. That showed 'em! Heh-heh...

~Dean

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks dean for the review, I am sure they probably thought twice after that before doing something so dumb.
reply by Dean Kuch on 20-Jan-2015
    I'm sure they did. At least I hope so, LOL!
Comment from emrpoems
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There are still some decent girls around and they stand for what is right.Well written story with a strong message of good morals

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the nice review. The thing that impressed me about the story, was the girl trusted me to help her without making a major scene. My daughter said about this that the kids in the band respected me for keeping them honest.
Comment from mshirachot
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Patricia! I think I would have been tempted to leave them a message inside the drum where the picture once was. Something in the line of a quote - maybe the famous "for whom the bell tolls". LOL

Thanks for sharing this little story. I enjoyed it.
Blessings,
Marsha

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the review. Here is what one of my daughters said about this story.

    Mom,I am so glad you were a band parent! You helped keep everyone honest! I know kids respected you for it!
Comment from livelylinda
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Patricia: what a find! Leave it up to testosterone fueled teenage boys to come up with that idea! LOL. The female student and you handled the situation quite well, though. Your story is original, entertaining and totally believable.

I noticed to areas that need a little fixing.

Line 3: "preform" I think should be "perform"

Line 15: Instead of "So as . . ." I believe it would sound better if you said, "While . . . "

Lines 17 and 18: Better: I folded the picture, put it in my purse and took it home where I burned it.

Lines 19 and 20: ". . . picture was not longer in the drum, nor if . . ." would be better: " . . . picture was NO longer in the drum or if . . ."

These are just my suggestions. If you like them, use them, if not throw them away.

Moral of the story: when dealing with teenagers, you never know what you gonna' get! Linda

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thank you Linda for the review and the suggestions.
Comment from kiwijenny
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Ha ha ha ha ha ...kids...
Porn in the drum....catchy title...I thought Not Patricia and laughed when I read it
I teach Highschool boys yikes
God bless

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the review, I am sure when you saw the title it was a shock to see the words porn and Patricia together.
Comment from Walu Feral
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Hahahahaha! G'day Patricia. Teenage boys are full of testosteone I think. That was a great little story written in fine style by one of my favorite writers in the world. Thanks for sharing. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks Fez. Were you a little shocked when you saw the title?
reply by Walu Feral on 20-Jan-2015
    I must admit that I was a bit shocked, especially with patcelaw next to it. LOL
Comment from gypsycaravan
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What a clever girl Joan was to be able to take the drum apart and put it back together. I think you handled the situation perfectly by just getting rid of the picture and leaving the boys to wonder where it went rather than reporting them to the principal.
a few suggestions:
"drills to preform "---should be 'perform'
"looking into the drum and then they laugh, can we get the picture"--would read better with a period after 'laugh' and start a new sentence with 'can'
"Taking it home I and burned it."--comma after 'home' and delete 'and'
"was not longer in the drum"--'not' should be 'no'
Very nice story. I always enjoy reading the true ones.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the review, I still don't have my word processor and don't catch some of the things I would if I had the grammar check
    I am doing my writing for not on the email and sending them to myself.