The Paths We Travel
Life, paths, and change...23 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A good faith poem. Yes, we can plan our future but cannot be sure it will turn out the way we expect. As you say, life's plans are sometimes rearranged. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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A good faith poem. Yes, we can plan our future but cannot be sure it will turn out the way we expect. As you say, life's plans are sometimes rearranged. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Thank you! Much appreciated!! :)
Comment from mfowler
This reminds me a little of Frost's poem 'The Road Not Taken'. You use a similar imagery of the road to sum up life's fate. In vs 1, you define life as a fragile road between life and death. vs 2 Here you say that all befalls us will be unpredictable. vs 3 You sum up by reminding that the journey is marked by unknowns, plans will be made but inevitably rearranged. It is a simple philosophy about life, but rings true and most useful wisdom is stunningly simple. Nice poem.
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This reminds me a little of Frost's poem 'The Road Not Taken'. You use a similar imagery of the road to sum up life's fate. In vs 1, you define life as a fragile road between life and death. vs 2 Here you say that all befalls us will be unpredictable. vs 3 You sum up by reminding that the journey is marked by unknowns, plans will be made but inevitably rearranged. It is a simple philosophy about life, but rings true and most useful wisdom is stunningly simple. Nice poem.
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Thank you!!!
Comment from Zue65
I believe you, our life is just like the roads we frequently travel to, there are forks in many directions that we have to take but in the end, it is up to us, to choose the road we have to walk on. I enjoyed your poem. God bless.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
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I believe you, our life is just like the roads we frequently travel to, there are forks in many directions that we have to take but in the end, it is up to us, to choose the road we have to walk on. I enjoyed your poem. God bless.
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Thank you!!
Comment from liz10240
This is a real nice little poem, simple, but has a complex message. Life indeed is a series of twists and and turns. Your poem is easy to read, concise, well ryhmed and flows gently. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2015
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This is a real nice little poem, simple, but has a complex message. Life indeed is a series of twists and and turns. Your poem is easy to read, concise, well ryhmed and flows gently. Best of luck!
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Thank you!!
Comment from mermaids
Some futures will fade, life's path rearranged are two lines that are true to life. Our paths often change. Excellent rhyming of words and a smooth flow of lines. Your theme is enhanced by your poetic form.
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Some futures will fade, life's path rearranged are two lines that are true to life. Our paths often change. Excellent rhyming of words and a smooth flow of lines. Your theme is enhanced by your poetic form.
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Thank you!!
Comment from MelB
Good flow, rhythm and rhyme. Things sure do change. It is hard to predict which way life will go and we do have to rely on what we cannot see.
Best wishes in the contest.
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Good flow, rhythm and rhyme. Things sure do change. It is hard to predict which way life will go and we do have to rely on what we cannot see.
Best wishes in the contest.
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Thank you!!
Comment from RYME4U
Nicely done. The rhymes and "near rhymes" are good. Your message is clearly described and the "path" theme is consistent throughout. Good job!
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Nicely done. The rhymes and "near rhymes" are good. Your message is clearly described and the "path" theme is consistent throughout. Good job!
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Thank you!!
Comment from Judy Couch
I like this one. It rhymes nicely and follows the prompt well. I like the idea it suggests -- that change comes in the lives of each of us.
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I like this one. It rhymes nicely and follows the prompt well. I like the idea it suggests -- that change comes in the lives of each of us.
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Thank you!!
Comment from seaglass
This is a pondering kind of poem. The path, a common metaphor for life, always makes me relate. I see trails, side paths, when I look back on my life. Some I wish I hadn't wandered down, some I'm thankful I did. They all have brought me to where I am.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2015
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This is a pondering kind of poem. The path, a common metaphor for life, always makes me relate. I see trails, side paths, when I look back on my life. Some I wish I hadn't wandered down, some I'm thankful I did. They all have brought me to where I am.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2015
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Agree & same here!! Thanks for the review!!!
Comment from BeasPeas
To me your poem (especially last stanza) expresses that life's choices are an ever-evolving thing. One choice cantilevers on another, and hopefully they are good ones, to pave the way forward.
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To me your poem (especially last stanza) expresses that life's choices are an ever-evolving thing. One choice cantilevers on another, and hopefully they are good ones, to pave the way forward.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2015
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Thank you!!
