Storm Signals
When you live in a typhoon path, be prepared for the worst32 total reviews
Comment from GWinterwin
Love your poem, and the picture is just beautiful. Good message in this poem about living in typhoon country. A good job of telling what happens in a small amount of words. Great job.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
Love your poem, and the picture is just beautiful. Good message in this poem about living in typhoon country. A good job of telling what happens in a small amount of words. Great job.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2015
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Thanks a lot my friend for considering this a great job, thanks for the five stars too. Happy New Year.
Comment from amahra
I love MoonWillow's art. And this one is really great. Loved the short poem. It's about nature, so I think it might follow a pattern after all. But, don't go by me. I'm not one of the haiku experts on here. Smile.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
I love MoonWillow's art. And this one is really great. Loved the short poem. It's about nature, so I think it might follow a pattern after all. But, don't go by me. I'm not one of the haiku experts on here. Smile.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014
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Thanks amahra for the wonderful review. I appreciate it a lot. God blessa.
Comment from mfowler
I think you could safely call this haiku.
It's about a natural phenomenon, the storm.
The opening lines give a sense of the event through clear imagery.
The satori in your last line, offers another view through 'drum rolls' imagery, of the storm's impact.
Good use of alliteration to aid flow:drop from drenched clouds
drums
Good complementary art work
A very nice snippet of poetic vision
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
I think you could safely call this haiku.
It's about a natural phenomenon, the storm.
The opening lines give a sense of the event through clear imagery.
The satori in your last line, offers another view through 'drum rolls' imagery, of the storm's impact.
Good use of alliteration to aid flow:drop from drenched clouds
drums
Good complementary art work
A very nice snippet of poetic vision
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Thanks a lot mfowler for the generous and very intelligent review of this little poem. Thanks a bunch.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Storm Signals' is an extremely well-written piece. Short, succinct and very much to the point. It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
'Storm Signals' is an extremely well-written piece. Short, succinct and very much to the point. It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Thanks for considering this an extremely well-written piece. thanks for the generous stars too.
nassus1957, you're more than welcome.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I feel you have a beautiful, classic haiku nevertheless. In any case, your short poem has a very effective cutting line and is typical of storms, the droplets often feeling like pellets from a peashooter! Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
I feel you have a beautiful, classic haiku nevertheless. In any case, your short poem has a very effective cutting line and is typical of storms, the droplets often feeling like pellets from a peashooter! Well done.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Thanks a lot Giddy for considering this well done and thanks for the intelligent review of this poem.
Comment from emrpoems
Short and sweet with a useful warning that once you are at
the area of expected disaster you should be prepared
Well paired picture and poem
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
Short and sweet with a useful warning that once you are at
the area of expected disaster you should be prepared
Well paired picture and poem
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Tanks a lot emrpoems for the generous stars and for appreciating this little poem.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Again, while trying not to write a haiku, you have really done so. A beautiful verse and lovely presentation in this thought-provoking poetc verse. Take care, my friend~DEbbie
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
Again, while trying not to write a haiku, you have really done so. A beautiful verse and lovely presentation in this thought-provoking poetc verse. Take care, my friend~DEbbie
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Thanks a lot my friend, Debbie for the generous review and for considering this, a thought-provoking poetic verse. God bless.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful write, nassus, the beauty of your words is also a warning for people to prepare for disasters that might come their way. I enjoyed reading this one and I love the picture choice for the poem as well..
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
this is a beautiful write, nassus, the beauty of your words is also a warning for people to prepare for disasters that might come their way. I enjoyed reading this one and I love the picture choice for the poem as well..
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Thanks a lot my friend for considering this a beautiful write. I am deeply honored. God bless.
Comment from Delahay
This brings to mind the sound of thunder being like a drum roll in the distance as a storm us moving in while drops if water begin to fall from black clouds billow in the sky.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
This brings to mind the sound of thunder being like a drum roll in the distance as a storm us moving in while drops if water begin to fall from black clouds billow in the sky.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Thanks a lot for resonating with the message of the poem and thanks for the five stars too. God bless.
Comment from Joseph W. Sestrich
Just me again. I see a pitter patter(n) here. It works....even if it has fifteen lines. Precise statements in very few words can say a lot. Especially if the words stimulate the readers internal dialog with understanding or additional thought. Boy oh boy could I ever hear the loud bets of rain drumming.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
Just me again. I see a pitter patter(n) here. It works....even if it has fifteen lines. Precise statements in very few words can say a lot. Especially if the words stimulate the readers internal dialog with understanding or additional thought. Boy oh boy could I ever hear the loud bets of rain drumming.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2014
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Thanks a lot Joseph, you inspired me with your very generous and positive review. Thanks a bunch from the bottom of my heart.