Dearest Friend
Spenserian Sonnet contest entry23 total reviews
Comment from Lylise
As I know you well, this sonnet gets a C+. The best one you ever wrote was the one we did about the traitor prince and the queen who authorizes her son's decapitation with a wave of her hand. ... She softly offered refuge I found true...is your best line.
I propose we rock this ridiculous poetry site with a conglomeration of stellar words as only the two of us can do. These are treasured memories for me. And as I inspect them...they are the only ones that are vivid, coveted and bring a smile to my face.
Killer presentation on this. Well done. Blah Blah
Kiss Kiss
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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As I know you well, this sonnet gets a C+. The best one you ever wrote was the one we did about the traitor prince and the queen who authorizes her son's decapitation with a wave of her hand. ... She softly offered refuge I found true...is your best line.
I propose we rock this ridiculous poetry site with a conglomeration of stellar words as only the two of us can do. These are treasured memories for me. And as I inspect them...they are the only ones that are vivid, coveted and bring a smile to my face.
Killer presentation on this. Well done. Blah Blah
Kiss Kiss
Comment Written 15-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Yeah, those were the days. Thank you for the great review, Lynda. Just to fill you in, Thursday our company closed and now I'm out of a job. Weeeeee. Ain't that fantastic? I'll gab with you some time. Have a good one, L.
Me
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This is why you aren't answering my texts. Call me. My phone is screwed up. Not getting notifications of texts or calls. Schedule a time and I will call you. This sucks. What are you going to do? Worried about you. Worried about me. Need us. Kiss Kiss
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Very behind in my reading. Congratulations on winning this contest. I love your Sonnet--you're a good writer. Very poignant and sweet. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Very behind in my reading. Congratulations on winning this contest. I love your Sonnet--you're a good writer. Very poignant and sweet. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Hey, GLG, hi. Thank you for the kind review. As always, I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
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Ron
Comment from RYME4U
This was absolutely beautiful. A tribute to a favorite old piano. How great is that! The Spenserian rhyme and rhythm are done perfectly. All of these wer well done but yours was most enjoyable.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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This was absolutely beautiful. A tribute to a favorite old piano. How great is that! The Spenserian rhyme and rhythm are done perfectly. All of these wer well done but yours was most enjoyable.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the kind review, Ryme. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. This was really written more from my mom's point of view. I can play a little but she's real artistic with it. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from Domino 2
Congratulations on your win with this excellent Spenserian sonnet, Ron.
Faultless rhymes and meter and very moving theme.
My one nit-pick would be the 'unsightly' abbreviation of 'ivories', to meet the meter, as IMHO, abbreviations should always be avoided if possible. Anyway, what the f*ck do I know?
Anyway, that's very minor, and this was a truly excellent read, my very talented friend.
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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Congratulations on your win with this excellent Spenserian sonnet, Ron.
Faultless rhymes and meter and very moving theme.
My one nit-pick would be the 'unsightly' abbreviation of 'ivories', to meet the meter, as IMHO, abbreviations should always be avoided if possible. Anyway, what the f*ck do I know?
Anyway, that's very minor, and this was a truly excellent read, my very talented friend.
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 04-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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Thank you, Ray. Yeah, I don't really like it when people do that either but I needed to get ivory in the piece some how but there's just no way to use it being 3 syllables. I pronounce it as 2 but sure enough some knit picker would dock me star if I dared try to pass it off as 2 while being spelled correctly. I'm glad you liked the piece, friend. Have a good one, Ray.
Ron
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Dragonskulls,
This is beautiful. Love the artwork.
My work has messed up font as well. I DO NOT like these changes. Not user friendly or complementary to one's hard work at all.
Well done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*,*)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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Hi, Dragonskulls,
This is beautiful. Love the artwork.
My work has messed up font as well. I DO NOT like these changes. Not user friendly or complementary to one's hard work at all.
Well done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*,*)
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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Yes, the changes, in my opinion, have taken away from it's appeal. I say if it works don't fix it, lol. Thank you for the great review, Jax. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from patcelaw
But soon the grace of Heaven will restore
and there we'll sing aloud forever more.
When we get to heaven i think we will be overwhelmed by how good God is and how He would allow us trial on this earth to make us strong.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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But soon the grace of Heaven will restore
and there we'll sing aloud forever more.
When we get to heaven i think we will be overwhelmed by how good God is and how He would allow us trial on this earth to make us strong.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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Amen, patcelaw. Thank you for the great review and gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Joan E.
Good luck to all of us in coping with the changes to the site--hopefully, some of them will offer improvement--I just haven't found those yet. Thank you for your notes on the Specerian sonnet--yours is a splendid example, and I am pleased to see it was deemed to be the winner of the contest. You selected the perfect picture to accompany your heartwarming words about your piano friend. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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Good luck to all of us in coping with the changes to the site--hopefully, some of them will offer improvement--I just haven't found those yet. Thank you for your notes on the Specerian sonnet--yours is a splendid example, and I am pleased to see it was deemed to be the winner of the contest. You selected the perfect picture to accompany your heartwarming words about your piano friend. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review, Joan. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. Yes, I don't care for these changes one bit. I say, if it works don't fix it, lol. Maybe it'll get better hopefully. I'm glad you liked the piece, Joan. Thank you again. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It might be time to retire her and get a newer friend who will be able to do everything your old friend could do and more. Great job friend and this is a wonderful tribute :)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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It might be time to retire her and get a newer friend who will be able to do everything your old friend could do and more. Great job friend and this is a wonderful tribute :)
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the great review, EL. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from butterfly4265
This is excellent. I love the flow from knowing the joy of a dear childhood friend, the pulling away through age and frailty, back to the joy of knowing your friendship will be reunited and reconnected in Heaven. The whole presentation is wonderful, from the well chosen artwork, to the good rhyming and pace. Very well done indeed, and the best of luck in the contest! A very strong contender in my opinion.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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This is excellent. I love the flow from knowing the joy of a dear childhood friend, the pulling away through age and frailty, back to the joy of knowing your friendship will be reunited and reconnected in Heaven. The whole presentation is wonderful, from the well chosen artwork, to the good rhyming and pace. Very well done indeed, and the best of luck in the contest! A very strong contender in my opinion.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, butterfly. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Eric1
This is a really well penned poem for this competition there is an excellent rhyming scheme with a wonderful rhythm and a lovely smooth flow, This is a difficult contest and I wish you the best of luck my friend.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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This is a really well penned poem for this competition there is an excellent rhyming scheme with a wonderful rhythm and a lovely smooth flow, This is a difficult contest and I wish you the best of luck my friend.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review, Eric. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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Yes I really did DS