Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Jealousy"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
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Comment from Misrael
I think that with jealousy as with a lot of things there are two sides to every coin. Because it can also be very dangerous. Your poem makes me think. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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I think that with jealousy as with a lot of things there are two sides to every coin. Because it can also be very dangerous. Your poem makes me think. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Yes, definitely can be dangerous. This was mostly a rebuttal to ... I can't remember who wrote it. She wrote a piece about jealousy. If I find it, I'll link it! :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I can see your point as it applies to some. However, I am finding it difficult to apply the word "jealous" in many other instances. However, you are indeed entitled to phrase this poem as you wish. This is just me. I do agree that this is a misunderstood word. Good job. No changes. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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I can see your point as it applies to some. However, I am finding it difficult to apply the word "jealous" in many other instances. However, you are indeed entitled to phrase this poem as you wish. This is just me. I do agree that this is a misunderstood word. Good job. No changes. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thank you, jannypan.
Comment from stroncoso1
I like the twist you take on jealousy. Your poem is meaningful and surprisingly positive. Your word choices and verses have turned an otherwise negative emotion into a path that can give positive direction in someone's life. How interesting and refreshing. I like several of your verses, "it helps you perceive what you want to be!" I like all your verses and your examples are good, (eg. "You envy a pilot's Skyward flight? Go to flight school!..." and "You covet another's Beautful wife? Woo another beauty!..." Your poem in its entirety is good and your ABAB rhyming scheme is effecive. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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I like the twist you take on jealousy. Your poem is meaningful and surprisingly positive. Your word choices and verses have turned an otherwise negative emotion into a path that can give positive direction in someone's life. How interesting and refreshing. I like several of your verses, "it helps you perceive what you want to be!" I like all your verses and your examples are good, (eg. "You envy a pilot's Skyward flight? Go to flight school!..." and "You covet another's Beautful wife? Woo another beauty!..." Your poem in its entirety is good and your ABAB rhyming scheme is effecive. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thank you, stroncoso1.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Good idea and never thought of this in this way but you make a lot of sense. I loved the imagery. Little comfusing about wooing another beauty but that's me. Great job
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Good idea and never thought of this in this way but you make a lot of sense. I loved the imagery. Little comfusing about wooing another beauty but that's me. Great job
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Barb! :) Yeah, I struggled with that line. I hope I can think of something better sometime.