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Comment from Misrael
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I think that with jealousy as with a lot of things there are two sides to every coin. Because it can also be very dangerous. Your poem makes me think. Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    Yes, definitely can be dangerous. This was mostly a rebuttal to ... I can't remember who wrote it. She wrote a piece about jealousy. If I find it, I'll link it! :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I can see your point as it applies to some. However, I am finding it difficult to apply the word "jealous" in many other instances. However, you are indeed entitled to phrase this poem as you wish. This is just me. I do agree that this is a misunderstood word. Good job. No changes. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    Thank you, jannypan.
Comment from stroncoso1
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I like the twist you take on jealousy. Your poem is meaningful and surprisingly positive. Your word choices and verses have turned an otherwise negative emotion into a path that can give positive direction in someone's life. How interesting and refreshing. I like several of your verses, "it helps you perceive what you want to be!" I like all your verses and your examples are good, (eg. "You envy a pilot's Skyward flight? Go to flight school!..." and "You covet another's Beautful wife? Woo another beauty!..." Your poem in its entirety is good and your ABAB rhyming scheme is effecive. Well done!

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    Thank you, stroncoso1.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Good idea and never thought of this in this way but you make a lot of sense. I loved the imagery. Little comfusing about wooing another beauty but that's me. Great job

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    Thanks, Barb! :) Yeah, I struggled with that line. I hope I can think of something better sometime.