Winter
A Septolet9 total reviews
Comment from Dawny53
Hello Zanya.. just wanted you to know that I got downright cold just reading your poem and looking at your accompanying artwork! Your work is well written, thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Hello Zanya.. just wanted you to know that I got downright cold just reading your poem and looking at your accompanying artwork! Your work is well written, thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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And thank you for taking time to read and critique zanya
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your use of the septolet form and your abundant alliteration of "w's". Even though I live in sunny, Southern California, I could feel the chill of winter. Your artwork selection was the perfect reinforcement too. Cheers- Joan
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I enjoyed your use of the septolet form and your abundant alliteration of "w's". Even though I live in sunny, Southern California, I could feel the chill of winter. Your artwork selection was the perfect reinforcement too. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you indeed -I envy those who live in California LOL ZANYA
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But we do miss the seasons! lol Happy Halloween- Joan
Comment from Nosha17
I am not looking forward to winter! You have captured the essence of winter well with your chosen words. Good complimentary picture and an enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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I am not looking forward to winter! You have captured the essence of winter well with your chosen words. Good complimentary picture and an enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you for reading and for the critique zanya
Comment from jim lawler
Thanks for sharing. The first verse is good but to me, the second verse seems rather vague; I didn't quite understand it. Maybe it's just me, I don't know. You might think about reading it over. Good luck. Jim
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thanks for sharing. The first verse is good but to me, the second verse seems rather vague; I didn't quite understand it. Maybe it's just me, I don't know. You might think about reading it over. Good luck. Jim
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you for reading and for the critique zanya
Comment from TAB_that's me
I like your lovely little winter septolet poem filled with imagery but please don't bring winter on too early:)
~teresa~
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I like your lovely little winter septolet poem filled with imagery but please don't bring winter on too early:)
~teresa~
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Yes - the idea of winter's return gives me the shivers ..b-r-r-rthanks for reading zanya
Comment from Smoothiecool
have to give you a four as you have posted this as a Septolet
which has seven lines and fourteen words
you have the fourteen words but you put it in six lines, easy to fix
good visual to portray message of Winter chills
good alliteration in
wintry, winds
winter's, wiles
cheers Smoothiecool
have changed star rating as now your poem has the seven lines
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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have to give you a four as you have posted this as a Septolet
which has seven lines and fourteen words
you have the fourteen words but you put it in six lines, easy to fix
good visual to portray message of Winter chills
good alliteration in
wintry, winds
winter's, wiles
cheers Smoothiecool
have changed star rating as now your poem has the seven lines
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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I really appreciate the suggestions - thanks for reading zanya
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most welcome..SC >>Faye
Comment from Capricorn30
Well-penned poem to complement the wintry vision--nice artwork;
"well-nigh hibernate"--simple to consider indoor leisure/rest when winter weather takes hold.
Nice alliteration incorporated also.
Excellent!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Well-penned poem to complement the wintry vision--nice artwork;
"well-nigh hibernate"--simple to consider indoor leisure/rest when winter weather takes hold.
Nice alliteration incorporated also.
Excellent!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Delighted with this critique - thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Veeb
Very good description of winter. Lovely flow with interesting imagery: "winter's wiles" - beautifully said. Consistent rhythm. A very enjoyable poem, and the picture compliments well. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Very good description of winter. Lovely flow with interesting imagery: "winter's wiles" - beautifully said. Consistent rhythm. A very enjoyable poem, and the picture compliments well. Nicely done.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thanks for a most encouraging review zanya
Comment from A_Rabe
This poem captures well my feelings on a dreary winter day. I like the alliteration at the beginning of each stanza, and the assonance between lines (e.g. wintry winds; grey leaden; skies, wiles, beguile, nigh, hibernate), and the break at the end in "hibernate".
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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This poem captures well my feelings on a dreary winter day. I like the alliteration at the beginning of each stanza, and the assonance between lines (e.g. wintry winds; grey leaden; skies, wiles, beguile, nigh, hibernate), and the break at the end in "hibernate".
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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THanks for a fulsome critique zanya