The Virus
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Chaos"Changing the world's attitudes
5 total reviews
Comment from lludlow
You're not telling a story. This is a dry narrative. Still love the idea, but maybe try one couple per chapter?
Let's hear the actual whining of the passengers.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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You're not telling a story. This is a dry narrative. Still love the idea, but maybe try one couple per chapter?
Let's hear the actual whining of the passengers.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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You help...John
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Brilliantly started, and I could easily see how this would and could happen and how people would react. Pretty scary to suddenly lose you eyesight. Worse, everyone around you has. Another great read. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Brilliantly started, and I could easily see how this would and could happen and how people would react. Pretty scary to suddenly lose you eyesight. Worse, everyone around you has. Another great read. xsx sandra
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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When disaster strikes, people become one family. That is the theme...John
Comment from NicciFaye
....what I love about this chapter is how the individuals that are already blind noticed about the chaos because it was silence. This would be scary as I noticed in the prologue with the Helen Keller quote about the next worst thing about being blind is having sight and no vision...Great creativity.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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....what I love about this chapter is how the individuals that are already blind noticed about the chaos because it was silence. This would be scary as I noticed in the prologue with the Helen Keller quote about the next worst thing about being blind is having sight and no vision...Great creativity.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Ditto
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Excellent continuation of this fascinating plot element. What a challenge to give to your characters. Already, people are approaching it differently, some actually trying to DO something about it.... but what can be done? How can anyone even study the disease without sight?
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Excellent continuation of this fascinating plot element. What a challenge to give to your characters. Already, people are approaching it differently, some actually trying to DO something about it.... but what can be done? How can anyone even study the disease without sight?
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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This will continue to build for a while....Thanks, John
Comment from GracieAnn
Cogitator, honestly, there are some aspects of this sci-fi write that are not too far from what could happen depending on who you talk to. There are a lot of survivalists who are out there, but not completely. I think the story line is interesting. I enjoyed it. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Cogitator, honestly, there are some aspects of this sci-fi write that are not too far from what could happen depending on who you talk to. There are a lot of survivalists who are out there, but not completely. I think the story line is interesting. I enjoyed it. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your encouragement, Gracie. I hope the second half will please you....John