The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "A Wonderful Change in Me!"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
29 total reviews
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'A Wonderful Change in Me' is a GREAT READ!
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Free of grammatical errors!
Outstanding artwork: The image is a perfect fit for this writing.
The author's notes are greatly appreciated.- Thank you!
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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'A Wonderful Change in Me' is a GREAT READ!
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Free of grammatical errors!
Outstanding artwork: The image is a perfect fit for this writing.
The author's notes are greatly appreciated.- Thank you!
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Nikki so glad we met. Still getting some good suggestions from some old FS friends for improvement so you might still see some changes ahead.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Geoff. This is a wonderful chapter. You are improving with each one as far as I am concerned. I still think you should be recapping in general at the top instead of telling the reader what to look forward to. The reader wants to be surprised...not given a list of what to expect. But a recap brings new readers or even old ones up to date before they plunge into the new chapter. Just a few sentences of recapping will do wonders for your audience.
This chapter is very clear and concise, my friend. The only thing I am not sure of is this line: "These days that has been replaced by a 10 to 12 weekly injection."
Are you saying 12 minjections a week here? Or are you speaking of the injection's strength?
Bless you, Geoff. Good job. Bob
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Hi, Geoff. This is a wonderful chapter. You are improving with each one as far as I am concerned. I still think you should be recapping in general at the top instead of telling the reader what to look forward to. The reader wants to be surprised...not given a list of what to expect. But a recap brings new readers or even old ones up to date before they plunge into the new chapter. Just a few sentences of recapping will do wonders for your audience.
This chapter is very clear and concise, my friend. The only thing I am not sure of is this line: "These days that has been replaced by a 10 to 12 weekly injection."
Are you saying 12 minjections a week here? Or are you speaking of the injection's strength?
Bless you, Geoff. Good job. Bob
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thanks mate I had not finished the History in this one thanks for the pickup. Darn Tom said I could not have a Revive Certificate on this one as he reckoned I used it before. I will straighten it out the injections were initially 12 week then we felt 10 week was better now seeing I am older the new Endocrinologist has recommended 11 weeks as there is a rick of Heart Attack if too frequent. All to do with getting older. I forget where you are but I turned 66 in March. Thanks heaps for the help. Trying to get rid of a MP3 file off one of the later chapters Grrrr I want to move it to another chapter. Dean Kuch trying to help me. Thal has been a great help in cleaning up my goofs as are you, mate.
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Thanks Bob Changes and more done if you want to just quickly look over this again as it suits. I did change the Book summary before but I have done it again.
Comment from Thal1959
This one slipped by me, Geoff. Overall, your writing is improving with just a few of the usual slight errors...
"around the hospital.It was during" (Space after period.)
"an expert on Endocrinology*, but merely a Physician." (I am glad you followed-up the asterisk with a note below describing the field. But this line quoted here is the second time you used the asterisk after the word. Once you have marked the first appearance of the noted word, it is not necessary to mark it on a following line.)
"and had me at one time into blaming my parents for everything." (This might be an Aussie/American grammar thing, but it doesn't sound right. The word "into" could be removed, or a word like "induced" could replace "had.")
"Thankfully, I never got into drugs or over-use of alcohol, as an addition to my problem or a 'solution' to same..." (Geoff, I was saying to myself as I was reading that here's another good thing - he's using double-quotes. Naturally - Bingo - another use of single quotes. Please remember that single-quotes should only be used within a character's dialogue when they directly quote another character's words. i.e. "She told me to 'get lost,' so I did." Of course, that line could be rendered as, "She told me to get lost, so I did." without any quote marks. It depends on whether the writer wants an exact quote made to establish a certainty in the dialogue.)
Professor C. put me on to some outstanding treatment.He commenced with a monthly (Missed the space after the period again.)
But again, these are small things. Everything else is fine.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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This one slipped by me, Geoff. Overall, your writing is improving with just a few of the usual slight errors...
"around the hospital.It was during" (Space after period.)
"an expert on Endocrinology*, but merely a Physician." (I am glad you followed-up the asterisk with a note below describing the field. But this line quoted here is the second time you used the asterisk after the word. Once you have marked the first appearance of the noted word, it is not necessary to mark it on a following line.)
"and had me at one time into blaming my parents for everything." (This might be an Aussie/American grammar thing, but it doesn't sound right. The word "into" could be removed, or a word like "induced" could replace "had.")
"Thankfully, I never got into drugs or over-use of alcohol, as an addition to my problem or a 'solution' to same..." (Geoff, I was saying to myself as I was reading that here's another good thing - he's using double-quotes. Naturally - Bingo - another use of single quotes. Please remember that single-quotes should only be used within a character's dialogue when they directly quote another character's words. i.e. "She told me to 'get lost,' so I did." Of course, that line could be rendered as, "She told me to get lost, so I did." without any quote marks. It depends on whether the writer wants an exact quote made to establish a certainty in the dialogue.)
Professor C. put me on to some outstanding treatment.He commenced with a monthly (Missed the space after the period again.)
But again, these are small things. Everything else is fine.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thanks mate. I am glad you are noting SOME and I say...SOME improvement. You are a good teacher, mate. the single expression marks were probably an accident. I learn well...most of the time. Much appreciated. I had hoped this would go up as a Revive certificate. However, Tom reckoned I had used that already on this chapter. Can't argue with Tom even though a lot of the time he is WRONG TOO! HEHE! Much appreciated, you have restored my faith in the number of GOOD reviewers in here. We have lost a few lately. Wil let you know when fixed.
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You're always welcome, Geoff. Stick with it - you are always getting better.
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Thanks mate I am a bit ticked off that people did not get notified which would have happened on the Revive Certificate.
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I don't know how the review cert works, Geoff. FanStory has its uses, but it is limited. Don't let it irritate you when something doesn't go smoothly.
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Perfecto, Geoff! By the way, I can sympathize with the review cert problem. I had won a banner ad and used it on a poem, but I never saw a banner ad for it anywhere. I'm glad I never had to pay for it.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Geoff,
You have had quite a rollercoaster life, haven't you? I'm glad to see that things are beginning to change for the better.
Hope you had a beautiful Easter. Christ is risen indeed!
Sonali
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Hello Geoff,
You have had quite a rollercoaster life, haven't you? I'm glad to see that things are beginning to change for the better.
Hope you had a beautiful Easter. Christ is risen indeed!
Sonali
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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AMEn Sis He is for sure. Thanks for coming by. IU put up one of the old chapters (this one I think) and thought I had a Revive Certificate but seems Tom thinks I must have put it up before since posting two years or more before.
Comment from Teri7
I am sorry it has taken me so long to get here and review, but here I am now my friend. This was a very good and interesting story about your life. I am glad they could help you! Good wording and imagery through your words. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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I am sorry it has taken me so long to get here and review, but here I am now my friend. This was a very good and interesting story about your life. I am glad they could help you! Good wording and imagery through your words. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thanks Sis for the lovely review. In the previous Chapter there is a song. I need to fix the link on the chapter but here is a link if you are interested in hearing the song that is shown on that chapter. Click on Number 5 in this Link.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Being a surgical nurse I totally understood and as a firm believer in fate, this opened you life to new thought and feeling and took you to more places in your life.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Being a surgical nurse I totally understood and as a firm believer in fate, this opened you life to new thought and feeling and took you to more places in your life.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Sure Did barb sure Did. All so amazing how I got this job and it opened up so much more. Thanks for the lovely review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. You seem to be one of the few that were able to get the right treatment for a problem you was probably born with, and at least corrected the problem as far and good as possible.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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A very well-written chapter. You seem to be one of the few that were able to get the right treatment for a problem you was probably born with, and at least corrected the problem as far and good as possible.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Hi Sis yeah well it did not give us children, but without the treatment we would not have had over thirty years of joyful loving fulfilling marriage. Thanks very much for your lovely review. But I must not jump the gun there is more coming ok!
Comment from MelB
Hi Geoff, this is another interesting chapter, friend. The pituitary gland does control the ole hormones. Good thing they were able to figure it all out.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Hi Geoff, this is another interesting chapter, friend. The pituitary gland does control the ole hormones. Good thing they were able to figure it all out.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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yep. More recently I even asked the prof if they had thought of doing Pituitary transplants but he said no. I think because of its location at the base of the brain. If you saw the small Youtube of our wedding you can even see him and his wife at the back of the crowd of onlookers when we were coming out of the service. I think that is coming in a chapter or two. Thanks for the lovely review.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again I found your post interesting. Thank you for sharing.
My Mum was made aware of this and found a Dr. JB G. (lower case 'm' needed on mum because of the My)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Once again I found your post interesting. Thank you for sharing.
My Mum was made aware of this and found a Dr. JB G. (lower case 'm' needed on mum because of the My)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thanks barbara. Been looking for you. I guess you were busy with your family. Only just found out how to use the Lucky leprechaun have tons of those to give out. Tom does not ge=ive us a lot of info. Will fix the spag. Cheers.
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Thanks barbara fixed the "mum"
Comment from Sasha
Medicine has come a long way since those days. I can relate to this. It is wonderful you were finally able to get a positive solution to your problem. Nice work with this one. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Medicine has come a long way since those days. I can relate to this. It is wonderful you were finally able to get a positive solution to your problem. Nice work with this one. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Sasha. Still learning about all the Certificate rewards. Only just today I got sorted on the Lucky leprechaun. I have tons of those to reward. Also found out I was Closing the Share option! Sigh!
