Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

a humorous haiku with clever imagery
I love the visual you create in describing the look of this veggie and its surrounding cheese sauce LOL
good alliteration in your closing :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thank you, Brooke, for your great feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra

Comment from Imogen JH

Excellent

Gave this my vote in the contest.

I think you have to read the author notes to fully grasp what you are attempting to convey with this haiku. When you do, you appreciate the imagination that has gone into the verse. Sadly, I don't think all on here will get it, and that's a shame.

Well, you got my vote and it was on merit. Pays to have a nosy around the site occasionally. Now I'm gone again.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Hi Imogen, thanks for your great feedback and also for the vote! I didn't do too shabby in the booth LOL. Kindest regards as always, Debra x

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

Of course the boy would gobble them. What is there to not like in cauliflower drowning in cheese sauce. Sounds delicious. You did a great job.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Hi Judy :) Thank you for your lovely feedback. Kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

In reading your author notes, I would be willing to try "Caulifower cheese";
"cauliflower sheep"--the dish does strongly resemble sheep;
"molten cheesy lava"-=good visual imagery perfectly complements the art;
A well-penned tasty poem.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014

Hi :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it!
Enjoy the cauliflower cheese - I recommend using mature cheddar ;)
Kindest regards...

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, mystery writer, I like cauliflower raw with ranch dressing, but I don't care for it cooked. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014

Thank you sweetwoodjax for your feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both and am curious to try cauliflower your way! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely. This displays inventive imagery equating cauliflower with sheep - solid satori. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014

Thank you, Mystic Angel, for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Very clever way to disguise a vegetable that most kids don't like for some reason.

I'm not sure of the connection with 'sheep', unless you infer the kid THINKS he doesn't like them because his peers don't.

Fun read.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014

Hi Ray :) Thank you for your thoughtful feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Sometimes the cauliflower are sheep, sometimes they are clouds. Sometimes the broccoli are trees and sometimes the peas are missiles - all depends on what 'works' for the kids on any given day! I'll try anything to get them to eat what's good for them LOL
Kindest regards...:)

reply by Domino 2 on 19-Oct-2014

Thanks for your fun and gracious reply.

Ray xx

Comment from gypsymoth

Excellent

This sounds like something a little boy would say.
It never ocurred to me but cauliflower does resemble sheep.
Good luck in the contest.

Gypsymoth

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014

Hi gypsymoth :) Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...

Comment from kimdebfred

Excellent

This story was short but I enjoyed it. I write books myself and never was really interested in poetry but this one really hit me. I pray that your work goes far for you. Good luck.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014

Hi kimdebfred :) Thank you so much for your great feedback and kind wishes. I really appreciate both! I wish you all the best with your writing :) Warmest regards...

reply by kimdebfred on 19-Oct-2014

your welcome. excellent writing comes from an excellent person. have a good sunday.

reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014

you too :)

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Yum! What a wonderful way to eat your greens. Nice alliteration in the last line. Also like the wording of: "molten cheesy lava" Well crafted. Good luck w/ contest. Les

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014

Hi Les :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)