Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Great poem good story and I love the picture. Just one suggestion if I may....The creature waits in hide (hiding?)of her unsuspecting prey,

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014

Thank you Sankey for the great review!! I was thinking about the "hide" part...read it over and over trying to get it right, good suggestion...that may just work better...have a great day and I do appreciate the feedback :)

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

My husband loves spiders and will not let me kill one. Your words capture a vivid image of the life of a spider and her determination to protect her young and survive.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014

Thank you...certain is the season for them...I hate them in the shower!! Lol

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

love the artwork
effective opening simile and visual
cross it's path - drop the apostrophe
good internal rhyme in last the vast
good prey/day rhyme
a fascinating look at the spider and her means of survival for herself and her family
Brooke

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2014

Thank you for you great review and input, always helps me with the feedback :) have a great weekend!