Comment from Pearl Edwards

Exceptional

jlsavell these are beautiful whispering words to Maureen and a very fitting close to your verses
Our Celtic Warrior's Victory
Nicely done, I had tears brimming as I read.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

Comment from Poetic Friend

Exceptional

Jimi,

It is so wonderful to return to Fanstory after more than a year sabbatical. To read your image-filled, emotional-filled and motivational-filled is exactly what I needed. I am deeply sorry to hear about Maureen. Your poem is exactly what her spirit needs. The poem uplifted me.

Excellent work as usual!

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Gorgeous verse...so beautiful a tribute
You've infused each new day with purest gold
Weaved a silver lining in the darkest clouds of woe
Turned thunder's threat into a treasured song
and commanded a dying star to burn aglow
Gorgeous imagery for our darling Celtic warrior and friend
Well done
God bless, SIX

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2014

Comment from Benjohnsonjr

Excellent

Thank you for this poem. I have lost several friends to this dreaded disease. Some were taken quickly others suffered many years yet all were brave to the end.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

Comment from James Dooney

Excellent

This is a cool piece of work here indeed, and you capture the heart of the warrior very well here. Great job and do keep it up !

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

Comment from Honeysuckle1876

Excellent

This is such a beautiful tribute to Maureen. Such lovely heartwarming words of battle pain and victory. I believe she is at piece. Your words flowed like a melody and your abcb rhyme was great.
Thank you for writing something as beautiful as it's subject..

God bless
Angie

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2014

Comment from onebrit

Excellent

Absolutely gorgeous artwork. I keep reading all these tribute poems about someone whom everyone seems to love and be supportive of. What a wonderful group of friends y'all are to her. She would be honored Im sure. Very poignant.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2014

Comment from XMIRABEL

Good

Your picture explains the story well! Good job! I think its a very dear poem with a good moral. Explains that total- exuberance. I'm only kidding, It was great! I'd love to see you write more!

XMIRABEL

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 Comment Written 07-Oct-2014

Comment from punster

Excellent

Pathos...
Palpable, alive...
Bestirs my soul...
Wrings from my deepest being a heart-felt sigh
Wrests from my eyes tears - neither grief nor pain
But join with yours in granting choice thus end your day
To proudly exit...not in shame
Permission granted...now choose yourself the way...

I watched my father die, helplessly adrift in that same "Cancer's Sound"...
Saw the same pain, debilitating and relentless
'Til, one last breath we heard...and he was gone
The passion and pathos of that moment lies encapsulated in my soul yet...and your prose released its fragrant memory again.
Beautifully and feelingly expressed...words of the soul ne'er of your head.
Loved it!

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014

punster, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read my tribute to such a beautiful poetess. I am sorry to hear of your Father, but it is good to know your memories of him are dear and fragrant.. again thank you.. jlsavell

Comment from Ronni

Excellent

Dear Jimi,
It has taken me 2 days, several reads to even attempt a
review of any consequence, my failing, not yours in any way,
Unmistakably, in this heart-sinking poem on Maureen's Victory, you have unmoored a monumental number of aching
simultaneous 'whispers' most of us have wished for too.
Some more than others, such as myself included. Thus the
difficulty in relaying them.
This is a truly brilliant, benevolent, compassionate
and incomparably penned and presented dedication and
honoring of Maureen. Flows wish such grace and graciousness
as if surrounded by caressing angels enfolding your
precious message and empathetic mission, with misty
mirages of it being enroute to Maureen by cooing doves
in unison flight with the angels. Totally Magnificent!!!
Thank you for sharing, and I am sure her Zooters will
gratefully and lovingly relay it to her.
Love and blessings, Ronni

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014

Dearest Ronni, To express my deepest gratitude is inept. This was an extremely excruciating write for me and was not so sure how it would be received. The human psyche is quite remarkable as is our bodies, but to all of us death has no exclusivity. We all are subject to its curse. Maureen has battled her enemy for almost 7 weeks. Her will is remarkable and each day that passes begs many questions. Though modern controlled pharmaceuticals have kept her in a modicum of comfort and suspended state the physical load and thus consequences on the body are 3 fold. Should she fight her way back to consciousness, her physical rehabilitation will be daunting, exponentially exasperated by her ms and her cancer. Do not misunderstand me, I believe in the inherent gift of self healing whether physically or emotionally. Again we are wondrously created. However, if on the physical biological level, we cannot and have not utilized the natural tools to fortify our immune system and raise it to an optimum level of operation, our massive army employed to fight will wither from ultimate starvation and hostile environmental conditions. Much like our battlefields during the Civil War. The body's determination to survive is quite evident in that we all have a back up generator. Just as a generator is designed to do, once our power grid has been shortcircuited, it takes over. Truly remarkable. But just as all generators are designed to do, it has limited capacity. Such as in a hospital it has enough power to generate energy for just the basic necessities, thus not operating at a hospitals much needed higher capacity level. This generator, with its heavy load will soon burn out. Such is the law of physics and the law of biology and physiology. It's design is to only give us time to rest and heal and keep the utmost necessary functions going. It is not inexhaustible. Once it blows in our bodies, we cannot run down to Home Depot and buy another one. We have to replenish it with our renewable supply of energy if and when we shut it down successfully and not before it blows. I fear for her and I understand the inevitable. I believe she must have permission to leave, but I am afraid soon she will have no choice. I am not a pessimist but a realist. I know we all love her and want her back, but at what cost to her? Such is human nature when we love and admire such an extraordinary human being, it is hard to accept and let go. We are, in effect, being selfish.

Hope I made sense. Again sweet friend, thank you ever so much.

Jimi

reply by Ronni on 07-Oct-2014

Dear Jimi,
I understand fully where you are coming from..believe me all too well! My own
brother died a horribly senseless torture
due to the heddy ego of his Iconologist
at a Military Clinic, experimenting on
him on how many kinds of 'chemo cocktails'
he could pump into him till as you well
note, the body human can only be kept
alive only so long with medical devices
and machines. I tried in vain for years
to get my sisterinlaw to get him on some
immune protective supplements and nutrition
regimen; but she coldly refursed. Insited
on following the military MD's protocol.
When it came down to a critical stage
my brother needed a bone marrow transplant
as last hope, I did not hesitate to be a
donor. I got all the med tests done on
me to do it, cleared by my MD, tests showed
I was good donor match, and I was all set
to go and making plane reservations; when
my brother's wife phoned me and decided it
best I not come, 'they' had changed their
mind...I know good and well my brother did
not change his mind....the 'they' she refereed to was herself and military doctors
Ultimately, I told his wife, she and the
Military MD's were officiating at a
'assisted homicide', and while she and
they may get away with it, they cannot
escape the laws of Karma nor Divine Retribution in due accord. That did
not help my brother right then sadly enough.
Nor did I want my brother chained to
medical machines keeping him alive...there
was time enough to intervene with immune
build up support and nutrition BEFORE he
deteriorated to the last resort stage.
SHE DENIED HIM THAT CHANCE AND SURVIVING
HIS LYMPHOMA, AS MANY OTHERS HAVE. I don't
know how she lives with herself...except it
might be easy for one without conscience
or human decency.
My view has long been that Western Medicine
does not have all the answers or exclusively beneficial protocols, meds and treatments.
Too much reliance on rugs and devices. There
are Alternative choices and options with far
better results and track records.
Thus all your points are valid and true,
and I get it completely. As to the 'permission' aspect of her leaving,
that I still feel should and only rightly
belongs to Divine Power, not any mortal.
As attuned as Maureen was to that Divine
Connection and Power, in all her sufferings
and recooperation, she if anyone, and above
all, I feel would know or feel it; and what
is or isn't to be, will be.
Thanks so much for your thoughtfulness
and added input shared.
Love and blessings, Ronni