The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 61 "Part 2 - Our Weekender."Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from Jay Squires
Geoff, back to the chapter I just finished reading. When you fell off the tram (I believe it was) what an opportunity you have to dramatize that incident. You really need to. Do you remember going through the door? Your impact with the street? Were you in the hospital. What dialogue did you have with them. Don't waste those important moments! Sorry.
This is also an interesting chapter that could be dramatized in a few spots:
Humorously, when you would pull up the fish that you found out later they had put on your line.
In a more serious vein, when your father was injured by the cable.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Geoff, back to the chapter I just finished reading. When you fell off the tram (I believe it was) what an opportunity you have to dramatize that incident. You really need to. Do you remember going through the door? Your impact with the street? Were you in the hospital. What dialogue did you have with them. Don't waste those important moments! Sorry.
This is also an interesting chapter that could be dramatized in a few spots:
Humorously, when you would pull up the fish that you found out later they had put on your line.
In a more serious vein, when your father was injured by the cable.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Hi mate doing some cut and pastig of responses here thanks for coming back you do realise these are the old big chapters split up ok thanks agaiun now we are getting sorted out will look into your suggestions again fell out of a car not a tram ok. Or automobile as you like to call em.
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No, I call 'em cars.
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I forget where you are sorry? Thanks for the review. More opportunities coming tomorrow when I post some more split ups. In the mean tie working on all the errors you folks have found for me.
Comment from dennis0530
This episode carries more childhood memories. I guess all of us who have had an enjoyable childhood would always cherish reminiscing those times. It is as much like opening our own treasure chest, picking up the pieces and delightfully tickle our imagination with things connected with them.
Very informative and helpful with tips about valuable real estate and the importance of wills.
Just a small glitch for correction:
"The Rosella company came out wirth" - you mean 'with'
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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This episode carries more childhood memories. I guess all of us who have had an enjoyable childhood would always cherish reminiscing those times. It is as much like opening our own treasure chest, picking up the pieces and delightfully tickle our imagination with things connected with them.
Very informative and helpful with tips about valuable real estate and the importance of wills.
Just a small glitch for correction:
"The Rosella company came out wirth" - you mean 'with'
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Hi Dennis aprpeciate you comng by. So glad my split of some larger chapters has now got me some more reviewers and new ones to boot. Funny how no= matter how many reviews we get we all still miss something. Thanks a lot much aprpeciated still doing more split ups but only 2 allowed per day thanks again.
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Fixed the spag and added some more have a look when you are ready and thanks again.
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Sorry, but I noticed another one. In the 10th paragraph, "somethig" is missing the "n"
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Wow! They never end do they! Thanks again appreciate you finding these!
Comment from Fridayauthor
This piece continues to read well, maintaining reader interest. Family places like this never had much by way of modern conveniences, but that didn't deter from many fond memories.
wirth
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Nice posting.
loved, was doing my music theory exercises on the sand.
(I didn't understand this. Perhaps other reader also might not.)
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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This piece continues to read well, maintaining reader interest. Family places like this never had much by way of modern conveniences, but that didn't deter from many fond memories.
wirth
with
Nice posting.
loved, was doing my music theory exercises on the sand.
(I didn't understand this. Perhaps other reader also might not.)
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Hi appreciate your thoughts. If you look at Part 1 of this now split up chapter it will be clearer what you are reading is a split up of a larger chapter the photo of me on the beach is with chapter 1. maybe I should move it ha thanks again much apprecite all you new folks getting on board. Someone also pointed out that spag will get on it soon thanks.
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Hi there fixed the spag you found and added some more info. Did you check the other chapter about the music for the picture?
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No, I'll do so.
Comment from royowen
Loved your second offering for the morning Geoff, I thought you'd left to hear your old pastor? Your experiences still remind me of my own, there were lots of weekend shacks, by the coast, or by the Murray river which is not far from where we are! Although we didn't own one! I'm loving your tales of "growing up" which are stirring my own happy memories! Well done, well written, absorbing stuff! Blessings, Roy.
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Loved your second offering for the morning Geoff, I thought you'd left to hear your old pastor? Your experiences still remind me of my own, there were lots of weekend shacks, by the coast, or by the Murray river which is not far from where we are! Although we didn't own one! I'm loving your tales of "growing up" which are stirring my own happy memories! Well done, well written, absorbing stuff! Blessings, Roy.
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Yeah we went out just after I posted this. Hope you are enjoying the splitting up of old LARGER chapters. Just can't get them to come up in order sadly. Read part 1 if you have not already can only do 2 new ones a day sadly Gonna do this right through the bvook to make them easier to read.
