The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 60 "Part 2 -More on Early Times"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
20 total reviews
Comment from Sis Cat
Thank you for sharing your story. I liked the part about the suicide door the best because the action held my attention. The rest did not have anything that grabbed my attention other than your great attention to detail of your childhood. Other than chronology, the story, while remaining true, needs an narrative arc and conflict to hold readers' attention. Have you ever thought of expanding upon just the car scene alone? That is the best part of your chapter.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thank you for sharing your story. I liked the part about the suicide door the best because the action held my attention. The rest did not have anything that grabbed my attention other than your great attention to detail of your childhood. Other than chronology, the story, while remaining true, needs an narrative arc and conflict to hold readers' attention. Have you ever thought of expanding upon just the car scene alone? That is the best part of your chapter.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thanks for the idea. Will look at that sorry no rewards atm I do plan on going through and adding combination photos seeing Tom does not allow more than one photo per chapter. That may explain more. Others have said similar to what you are saying and I am only sory I did not split the chapters more right at the beginning of writing. This split you see happened quite some time later.
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Sankey, I had began to regret that I gave you that review, but now you confide in me that other people have been telling you the same thing. I do not feel so bad, but I would like to add that the most important thing is to tell your story your way. It may not be the Great Autobiography, but at least it will be your story. If you do want it to be the Great Autobiography, you are going to have to shape your narrative to make it compelling to readers.
My mother never published her autobiography before she died. She was unable to bind her chapters together in a compelling narrative. I want you to succeed where my mother failed. This is why your chapter touched me--I had seen these problems in her own writing and I wish I had the skills then to help her. The best I could do now is to speak up and offer advice to someone like you who is experiencing these same challenges.
Sankey, I wish you the best of success with your autobiography. Seek mentors and examples. Cheers.
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Thanks new friend as someone said ages ago, edit eddit eddit not looking for it to be any kind of fiction though and I am still a newby even after 20months with Fs.
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Sankey, I had began to regret that I gave you that review, but now you confide in me that other people have been telling you the same thing. I do not feel so bad, but I would like to add that the most important thing is to tell your story your way. It may not be the Great Autobiography, but at least it will be your story. If you do want it to be the Great Autobiography, you are going to have to shape your narrative to make it compelling to readers.
My mother never published her autobiography before she died. She was unable to bind her chapters together in a compelling narrative. I want you to succeed where my mother failed. This is why your chapter touched me--I had seen these problems in her own writing and I wish I had the skills then to help her. The best I could do now is to speak up and offer advice to someone like you who is experiencing these same challenges.
Sankey, I wish you the best of success with your autobiography. Seek mentors and examples. Cheers.
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Sankey, I had began to regret that I gave you that review, but now you confide in me that other people have been telling you the same thing. I do not feel so bad, but I would like to add that the most important thing is to tell your story your way. It may not be the Great Autobiography, but at least it will be your story. If you do want it to be the Great Autobiography, you are going to have to shape your narrative to make it compelling to readers.
My mother never published her autobiography before she died. She was unable to bind her chapters together in a compelling narrative. I want you to succeed where my mother failed. This is why your chapter touched me--I had seen these problems in her own writing and I wish I had the skills then to help her. The best I could do now is to speak up and offer advice to someone like you who is experiencing these same challenges.
Sankey, I wish you the best of success with your autobiography. Seek mentors and examples. Cheers.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
Despite living on opposite sides of the world I'm amazed at the similarities in our upbringings. My sister married at 16 and I became an aunt at 10.
They were indeed trusted days back then we used to play out from dawn till dusk without fear.
You don't say why you were placed on such a strict diet. Judging by you picture you wasn't an overweight child. It made me smile to think of the duster or fly swat. My mum had a stick she kept in the corner, I don't remember ever getting it, but the threat was a good deterrent. These days our parents would be done for abuse at the mere mention of it lol.
Another great nostalgic read x
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2014
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Despite living on opposite sides of the world I'm amazed at the similarities in our upbringings. My sister married at 16 and I became an aunt at 10.
They were indeed trusted days back then we used to play out from dawn till dusk without fear.
You don't say why you were placed on such a strict diet. Judging by you picture you wasn't an overweight child. It made me smile to think of the duster or fly swat. My mum had a stick she kept in the corner, I don't remember ever getting it, but the threat was a good deterrent. These days our parents would be done for abuse at the mere mention of it lol.
Another great nostalgic read x
Comment Written 31-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2014
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I wasn't overweight as a little fella I think as I approached Puberty the pounds were coming on. When I wrote this originally I had a Medical chapter and a Music chapter etc etc then I re did it all for better sequence of when things happened and I split all my medical stuff throughout the book as above more sequentially to the time they happened. Thanks again much appreciate a new friend coming through and taking the time to read my Autobiography. I did mention it in my profile but just to clarify the full name of my book is "The Little Dog That Wouldn't let Go" Sub titled 'GOD NEVER LETS GO!"
Comment from mikemagine
Very interesting biog. nonfictn, Geoff. Sorry that you had that horrid accident! Aside from that, it sounds like - so far - that your childhood was a good one. Your mother was strict, but as you say, it was for your own good.
I often wish both my parents had been on the proverbial same page reg. raising the family. They weren't, and our family just barely stayed together...
I will look for the video on Youtube.
Peace,
Mike
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2014
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Very interesting biog. nonfictn, Geoff. Sorry that you had that horrid accident! Aside from that, it sounds like - so far - that your childhood was a good one. Your mother was strict, but as you say, it was for your own good.
I often wish both my parents had been on the proverbial same page reg. raising the family. They weren't, and our family just barely stayed together...
I will look for the video on Youtube.
Peace,
Mike
Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2014
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Thanks for coming back to the early times mate. I guess you aRE USED TO THE FACT OF NO REWARDS ON THESE EARLY CHAPTERS HA. Sorry for Caps mad caps lonck on this puter.
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The first chapter gave me some idea of your story. Had I more time on my hands, I'd read every chapter!
Mike
Comment from Caressa_08
I enjoyed reading about your earlier years & a nice photograph of your immediate family, & you, such a little tyke..Wow,, your sis did get married at such an early age....I became an Aunt when I was 9 & thought that to be young....I was born in 1951 also, & in the month of March also..My sister was 4 years older than myself, named Susan. & Boy, did I ever taunt her at times, as felt then, my parents liked her better than myself, & other reasons, then, that I think just came naturally..Though realize from your author notes, that the girl next door, your friend, wasn't really named Susan.... Though it rang a bell for me, on how you interacted with her & how I treated my sister at times ...Learning a lot about Aussies, lifestyles & their native dialect here on Facebook...so glad this place is an international site..After, all, writing is a global thing.
Caressa
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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I enjoyed reading about your earlier years & a nice photograph of your immediate family, & you, such a little tyke..Wow,, your sis did get married at such an early age....I became an Aunt when I was 9 & thought that to be young....I was born in 1951 also, & in the month of March also..My sister was 4 years older than myself, named Susan. & Boy, did I ever taunt her at times, as felt then, my parents liked her better than myself, & other reasons, then, that I think just came naturally..Though realize from your author notes, that the girl next door, your friend, wasn't really named Susan.... Though it rang a bell for me, on how you interacted with her & how I treated my sister at times ...Learning a lot about Aussies, lifestyles & their native dialect here on Facebook...so glad this place is an international site..After, all, writing is a global thing.
Caressa
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thanks very much for coming by 'rewardless' I appreciate your review. let me know who you are mon Face book look for Geoffrey Moore that attended Ryde High School in Australia, after Ithin k we all found FS on Face book anyway ha.
Comment from GracieAnn
Sankey, this seems to be a universal write for those of us who spanned the baby boom generation. Large families with bright hopes and dreams. This is a great snapshot of the times. Good penmanship front to back. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Sankey, this seems to be a universal write for those of us who spanned the baby boom generation. Large families with bright hopes and dreams. This is a great snapshot of the times. Good penmanship front to back. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Thanks again sis this is review number 24 for this round so appreciate your time. God Bless.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
You certainly do have good memory recall and seemed to have led a fairly normal childhood for those times .
It also seems as though you were not afraid to find trouble and experience the consequences.
A couple of letter omissions in para 3-happend add "e"
Newagent- add "S"
Well written.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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You certainly do have good memory recall and seemed to have led a fairly normal childhood for those times .
It also seems as though you were not afraid to find trouble and experience the consequences.
A couple of letter omissions in para 3-happend add "e"
Newagent- add "S"
Well written.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for picking up these spags this is review number 34 for this round and I do appreciate everyone's time and all the great comments and spag pickups. God Bless.
Comment from CR Delport
I took a week off last week, and now I am way behind in reviewing. At least I have lots to read :) This is interesting and well written.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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I took a week off last week, and now I am way behind in reviewing. At least I have lots to read :) This is interesting and well written.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Thanks friend you may have read some of these before. We are splitting up chapters to make them easier to read and probably adding stuff as we go. Already had a complement for the changes. Looking forward to getting back to your story as well.
Comment from Ben Colder
I like this , Bro. Sounds like you had an exciting childhood. I know the score about older sisters. American raising was not too much difference. Understand the suicide doors. Blessings to you, Bro.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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I like this , Bro. Sounds like you had an exciting childhood. I know the score about older sisters. American raising was not too much difference. Understand the suicide doors. Blessings to you, Bro.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Hi mate thanks for this big six! Wow! First time I heard about the "suicide doors" ha! I dunno what speed Dad was doing at the time. :(
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this post. Your early days aren't very different from mine, but I never fell out of a car door.
I do , to this day, still remember grabbing the handle to re-close the door. (spacing issue with first comma)
I know from my MUm I was concussed and not aware of what actually happened to me. (Mum???)
I know I liked her a lot. they say you always hurt the ones you love. (either use a comma after lot or put a capital on 't' on they)
As I grew older, Mum would give me a list of things to get down at the local General store, which also included the green grocer. Mr C. the Italian owner of the store, was always so helpful. (I would leave the period after grocer. Start a new sentence: Mr. C, the Italian owner,)
For many, many years I was deprived of potatoes in my (omit of)
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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I enjoyed reading this post. Your early days aren't very different from mine, but I never fell out of a car door.
I do , to this day, still remember grabbing the handle to re-close the door. (spacing issue with first comma)
I know from my MUm I was concussed and not aware of what actually happened to me. (Mum???)
I know I liked her a lot. they say you always hurt the ones you love. (either use a comma after lot or put a capital on 't' on they)
As I grew older, Mum would give me a list of things to get down at the local General store, which also included the green grocer. Mr C. the Italian owner of the store, was always so helpful. (I would leave the period after grocer. Start a new sentence: Mr. C, the Italian owner,)
For many, many years I was deprived of potatoes in my (omit of)
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Thanks for these will look it over and see what I can do. Appreciate the help.
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Corrections and additions have been made here hope you enjoy what I have done.
Comment from Gladness
Great memories. Life was differan back then. Better in many ways. It is pleasant reading going through your memories. Thanks for sharing,
Anita
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Great memories. Life was differan back then. Better in many ways. It is pleasant reading going through your memories. Thanks for sharing,
Anita
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Thanks Sis I know there is some stuff of yours over due for reading get to it soon! These are split ups of larger chapters. They come up as new so I only get to break up a couple of the big chapters each day. Thanks for comig by also notice they don't always come up oin correct order in the split up.
