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He is referring to my boyfriend.4 total reviews
Comment from Saucey
I love "He is a river of silk" Perfect syllable count, precious write, great presentation, welcome to Fanstory. Well written, thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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I love "He is a river of silk" Perfect syllable count, precious write, great presentation, welcome to Fanstory. Well written, thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Thank you as well!
Comment from poetbear
There is a song called "take my breath away"
You you take my great away
You're every song I sing
The music that I play
And you take my great away.
The rest is online.
Check it out.
nice work
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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There is a song called "take my breath away"
You you take my great away
You're every song I sing
The music that I play
And you take my great away.
The rest is online.
Check it out.
nice work
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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I'll look at it.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a sweet write, mianalaide, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the special feelings you hold for your boyfriend. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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this is a sweet write, mianalaide, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the special feelings you hold for your boyfriend. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the support!
Comment from Keith Argyle
These three lines say so much in a simple message. The lines are so well chosen and are very visual, even though there's no picture that comes with these words, you can make your own in your mind. A metaphor of passion and love. Great Haiku... Keith.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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These three lines say so much in a simple message. The lines are so well chosen and are very visual, even though there's no picture that comes with these words, you can make your own in your mind. A metaphor of passion and love. Great Haiku... Keith.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thank you! Someone once told me, "A great writer doesn't need to provide visual aid as long as the words make their reader think about the words used. If your reader can visualize the moment, then you are doing something right."
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Yep, you're right, Mia. You certainly did this with your piece in this instance. keep them coming. Check out my baby series poem...
'I - Before - Now - Hearafter' it might appeal to you. Keith.
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I will definitely do so.
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Great stuff, keep up the good work. Keith.
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Become a friend :)
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Sorry, I meant become a fan :) oops. :)
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I am now officially a fan.
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Great to have you on board, you can now follow my baby story and see how John goes on each day. Keep up your own writing too. Keith.
