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Viewing comments for Chapter 119 "Haiku (fruits of paradise)"
'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway

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Comment from lakeport
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Fruits of paradise,indeed that's a beautiful place to be,that's a wonderful Haiku poem, Good luck at the contest.God bless you.Hugs!lakeport.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
    Thanks for this review. I'm glad you liked the haiku. ( I didn't win, but that's ok, I enjoyed writing it ) :-) Carolyn
reply by lakeport on 18-Sep-2014
    your welcome.Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from adewpearl
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typo in your title in spelling fruits
haiku don't typically use capital letters unless a proper noun
good consonance in succulent cascade
lovely visual
lovely imagery :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
    Thanks Brooke, fixed it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Curly Girly
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This is a lovely haiku, with a splendid image. I have one suggestion to make:
change the 'W' in Water to a small letter. It should not be a capital letter.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
    Thanks Nicole, good to see you. Hope your life is going well, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Smoothiecool
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good luck in contest

you follow the contest prompts

your syllable count spot on

your few words portray the succulent fruit will soon fall like the water falls

cheers smoothiecool

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
    Thanks to you for this wonderful review. :-)
reply by Smoothiecool on 14-Sep-2014
    most welcome..SC
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This meets the contest requirements nicely with a spot on syllable count and excellent imagery. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
    Thank you so much :-)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I like everything about your haiku. I like the picture. It is perfect with your words. Your syllable count is correct. There are no changes needed. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
    Thanks for this nice review. :-)
Comment from NurseBarb
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Beautifully written waterfall haiku with a lovely image as well. I like the last line as a subtle play on words with Water falls. I also like your author notes. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
    And thank you for such a wonderfully encouraging review. :-)
Comment from GracieAnn
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This Haiku-Waterfalls writing prompt entry has perfect line and syllable count and proper title. It is appropriately about nature and has a nice final line to tie it together. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
    Thanks GracieAnn