Reap What You Sow
A legend is born.54 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow, this was quite a terrific terror tale, told brilliantly through the usage of just one syllable words. I'll wager it is far more difficult than one might think.
The story was suspenseful, had lots of tension and emotion, and I did not detect one single grammatical error, which is always a good thing.
Excellent work!
All the best to you in the contests outcome. :)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Wow, this was quite a terrific terror tale, told brilliantly through the usage of just one syllable words. I'll wager it is far more difficult than one might think.
The story was suspenseful, had lots of tension and emotion, and I did not detect one single grammatical error, which is always a good thing.
Excellent work!
All the best to you in the contests outcome. :)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thanks Dean. I appreciate the excellent review and the compliments. Have a great day.
Comment from ravenblack
Ware the ire of vamp- boy, you sure dodged a bullet on that one lol. The beast being hunted- you sure put this reader in his head. I think the dialogue is a little stiff, too obviously making the statement that we need our monsters. Tons of power in this write before the dialogue.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Ware the ire of vamp- boy, you sure dodged a bullet on that one lol. The beast being hunted- you sure put this reader in his head. I think the dialogue is a little stiff, too obviously making the statement that we need our monsters. Tons of power in this write before the dialogue.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Lol. Thanks for the excellent review. The dialogue is stiff because vamp is extremely old.
Comment from crowdog110
Good job! I like this piece. It left me wondering, despite the "Vamp" reference, if we were seeing a vampire or werewolf. It seems to have references to both. However, the beast reference leans my imagination to the latter. That being said, I truly enjoyed the work and this would be a good foundation upon which to launch a book or series of short stories. Good luck!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Good job! I like this piece. It left me wondering, despite the "Vamp" reference, if we were seeing a vampire or werewolf. It seems to have references to both. However, the beast reference leans my imagination to the latter. That being said, I truly enjoyed the work and this would be a good foundation upon which to launch a book or series of short stories. Good luck!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Ire of the vamp. Yeah it's a vampire. Thanks for the awesome review.
Comment from livelylinda
Author: you have managed to tell a story with only single syllable words. You did it without having a story that sounds like something you wrote in third grade, too. I didn't care at all for the subject matter, but you stayed within the parameters of the contest rules. Good job. livelylinda
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Author: you have managed to tell a story with only single syllable words. You did it without having a story that sounds like something you wrote in third grade, too. I didn't care at all for the subject matter, but you stayed within the parameters of the contest rules. Good job. livelylinda
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Wow I really appreciate that. I tried to keep it add powerful as any story. Thanks for the excellent review.
Comment from lindalcreel
I suspected he was a vampire, but I had no idea he was so young. Maybe it;s because I heard that the council which governs the vampires are opposed to creating younger versions of themselves. Still, every so often, I'm sure one of them finds their way into this world. Good Luck,this was very entertaining.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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I suspected he was a vampire, but I had no idea he was so young. Maybe it;s because I heard that the council which governs the vampires are opposed to creating younger versions of themselves. Still, every so often, I'm sure one of them finds their way into this world. Good Luck,this was very entertaining.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thanks Linda for the excellent review. It is much appreciated.
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My pleasure:)
Comment from royowen
A clever finish to this contest entry " ware the ire of vamp" I had to have a giggle, what if they ask you for a dictionary definition? Perhaps they won't, poor little feller, the vampire, he was just sitting around in a cesspool minding his own business and they picked on him! Well written, good plot, interesting all through, well structured and readable, well,done! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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A clever finish to this contest entry " ware the ire of vamp" I had to have a giggle, what if they ask you for a dictionary definition? Perhaps they won't, poor little feller, the vampire, he was just sitting around in a cesspool minding his own business and they picked on him! Well written, good plot, interesting all through, well structured and readable, well,done! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful review. I'm glad that you liked the line.
Comment from Zue65
Wow, this is really something new to me, not the usual gory blood killing animal but a young vampire who was initiated into feeding on humans by the hatred of the humans themselves. This is a twist that made your story worth reading. An excellent write, God bless.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Wow, this is really something new to me, not the usual gory blood killing animal but a young vampire who was initiated into feeding on humans by the hatred of the humans themselves. This is a twist that made your story worth reading. An excellent write, God bless.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your time and for the excellent review.
Comment from Jay Squires
I am impressed. I would not have considered such a challenge. I have only admiration for you.
I have only one question: why would you use a contraction with "I've fed on their flesh for the first time," when you could have easily used two one syllable words for it. Just a question. I'd hate to see you disqualified by the way they view contractions.]
I find the whole process intriguing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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I am impressed. I would not have considered such a challenge. I have only admiration for you.
I have only one question: why would you use a contraction with "I've fed on their flesh for the first time," when you could have easily used two one syllable words for it. Just a question. I'd hate to see you disqualified by the way they view contractions.]
I find the whole process intriguing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Jay, thanks for the excellent review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from Craigitar
This is a great entry for this contest--I found no more that one syllable through out. Very well written, good imagery and great empathy with "Vamp"--you made him real. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This is a great entry for this contest--I found no more that one syllable through out. Very well written, good imagery and great empathy with "Vamp"--you made him real. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the excellent review. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.
Comment from kiwijenny
You did well with the single syllable prompt...it is difficult to write with these constraints,,,,best line..." Ware the ire of the vamp....." I guess that's one vamp-ire
God bless...
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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You did well with the single syllable prompt...it is difficult to write with these constraints,,,,best line..." Ware the ire of the vamp....." I guess that's one vamp-ire
God bless...
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review. I'm fond of the last line also.
