Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Red on Black"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
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Comment from rrabinow
I like the line the widow's infamous hour glass. Great use of descriptive words in your poem. Great job with the syllable count. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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I like the line the widow's infamous hour glass. Great use of descriptive words in your poem. Great job with the syllable count. Best of luck.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you rrabinow!!
Comment from kiwijenny
Black widows give me the shudders......dies.....her mate....? Does he have any clue ? Is she that alluring? I guess so we still have black widows running around...a time for male rights activists to step,in
God bless
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Black widows give me the shudders......dies.....her mate....? Does he have any clue ? Is she that alluring? I guess so we still have black widows running around...a time for male rights activists to step,in
God bless
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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I guess the sex must be worth it. You know men.. LOL
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Ha ha ha
Comment from adewpearl
stunning presentation of your 17 syllable haiku
widow's hour glass - add the apostrophe for possessive
a strong visual, and you create an ominous tone well
Brooke :-)
sorry, the 4 was a mistake - I never deduct a star for one tiny error :-)
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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stunning presentation of your 17 syllable haiku
widow's hour glass - add the apostrophe for possessive
a strong visual, and you create an ominous tone well
Brooke :-)
sorry, the 4 was a mistake - I never deduct a star for one tiny error :-)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Have corrected error. requesting a re-review:)
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I upped the rating - it never should have been a 4 in the first place :-)
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Thank you adewpearl!!