Keep smiling
1-6-1 rhyme14 total reviews
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words in three lines portray to keep smiling through ones mishaps
good visual
good rhyme not forced
cheers smoothiecool
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words in three lines portray to keep smiling through ones mishaps
good visual
good rhyme not forced
cheers smoothiecool
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very well done, Mystery Poet, with a clear uplifting message. Hard to do sometimes, but not impossible by any means. The presentation was fantastic as well.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Very well done, Mystery Poet, with a clear uplifting message. Hard to do sometimes, but not impossible by any means. The presentation was fantastic as well.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much for reading and for your beautiful comments., sanku.
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You are very welcome, Sanku.
Comment from daeneam
I'll be voting for this one... I like the simplicity of the message. We all need to smile to brighten up the day despite of every misfortune we have.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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I'll be voting for this one... I like the simplicity of the message. We all need to smile to brighten up the day despite of every misfortune we have.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much for your lovely review. thanks especially for voting.
Comment from rrabinow
Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this prompt. I like the rhyme that you have in your poem. The syllable count is correct. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this prompt. I like the rhyme that you have in your poem. The syllable count is correct. Best of luck.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Acquired Taste
If only, as adults, we could remember how to smile and allow the cloud to disappear when at the brink of difficulties. A smile will not make it go away, it will simply temper your reaction and save your heart.
Good luck. AT=/
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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If only, as adults, we could remember how to smile and allow the cloud to disappear when at the brink of difficulties. A smile will not make it go away, it will simply temper your reaction and save your heart.
Good luck. AT=/
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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I know .As we grow older I think the weight of life that we led so far hangs on so much that our facial muscles are reluctant to twitch.Thank you for your beautiful review.-Sanku.
Comment from victor 66
I do like the concept of "saying a great deal in a very few words". I definitely think you have followed the format of the prompt. "Children will become their parents". If we teach by example, a child will more than likely, will follow a similar philosophy in life. A nice 1-6-1. Good luck.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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I do like the concept of "saying a great deal in a very few words". I definitely think you have followed the format of the prompt. "Children will become their parents". If we teach by example, a child will more than likely, will follow a similar philosophy in life. A nice 1-6-1. Good luck.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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So true.Smiling more will lighten our own load too.Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from dennis0530
Yes, one can pretend to be happy even if they're feeling blue.
Such is the outlook of the writer. And a look of optimism and hope. That photo in the accompanying illustration sends the full message across.
Just as well, it also needs patience. Without the smile, a picture of impatience appears. Maybe not by chance that the writer has chosen the turnstile. And this is very significant and symbolic. A turnstile usually allows only one person in at a time. Will the smile last until the turnstile open?
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Yes, one can pretend to be happy even if they're feeling blue.
Such is the outlook of the writer. And a look of optimism and hope. That photo in the accompanying illustration sends the full message across.
Just as well, it also needs patience. Without the smile, a picture of impatience appears. Maybe not by chance that the writer has chosen the turnstile. And this is very significant and symbolic. A turnstile usually allows only one person in at a time. Will the smile last until the turnstile open?
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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you are spot on .Turnstile came after many rejections.To smile through our dark days is our choice of course and we have to do it all by oursleves-well most of the time.frankly ,I am not sure if the smile would last. thank you very much for this thought provoking response to my poem.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This meets all the criteria of the prompt. The short message is positive and helpful, and it is attractively presented. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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This meets all the criteria of the prompt. The short message is positive and helpful, and it is attractively presented. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from JM
You have touched on some very good advice and it really is the easiest thing to do: SMILE. I like your "long i" rhyme and your syllable count is right on the money. Very pretty little girl.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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You have touched on some very good advice and it really is the easiest thing to do: SMILE. I like your "long i" rhyme and your syllable count is right on the money. Very pretty little girl.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from rama devi
Brilliant entry for the contest--conveys a potent theme and message with clever, creative rhyming, unimpeded by the limitations of the form. A strong contender for my vote. I am not a fan of the 1-91 form but this one makes a great aphorism. Bravo. The irony makes it even more potent. Good picture too. :)
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Brilliant entry for the contest--conveys a potent theme and message with clever, creative rhyming, unimpeded by the limitations of the form. A strong contender for my vote. I am not a fan of the 1-91 form but this one makes a great aphorism. Bravo. The irony makes it even more potent. Good picture too. :)
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much,Rama devi for these lovely words.from a respected reviewer like you it is a great honour(.Valare nandi!)
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Valare nanni for your kind reply, Sanky. Namaste, rd