Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Awkward"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
12 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
this is a fine piece of poetic art! it describes vividly the awkward element of any person. very well-penned dear friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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this is a fine piece of poetic art! it describes vividly the awkward element of any person. very well-penned dear friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much rebekka x, for your kind words and encouraging review!!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi playin',
An interesting free verse acrostic. You've nailed the feelings down to a T .... until the demise of dignity!
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Hi playin',
An interesting free verse acrostic. You've nailed the feelings down to a T .... until the demise of dignity!
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much Reachingforthestars!!
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
This fits the Acrostic pattern AWKWARD but I 'm not sure how abetting is used in this meaning in the sentence; it usually means assisting an illegal action or an immoral action.
I don't see where dignity is either one of those unless you are implying a feigned dignity which could be exciting to the perpetrator because it would be the vice of pride.
I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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This fits the Acrostic pattern AWKWARD but I 'm not sure how abetting is used in this meaning in the sentence; it usually means assisting an illegal action or an immoral action.
I don't see where dignity is either one of those unless you are implying a feigned dignity which could be exciting to the perpetrator because it would be the vice of pride.
I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you giovannimariatommaso!
Comment from Linda England Bonam
You created a very good acrostic. A clumsy encounter, where words fail, was a nice way to start it! Good luck with this contest!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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You created a very good acrostic. A clumsy encounter, where words fail, was a nice way to start it! Good luck with this contest!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you Linda!!
Comment from robina1978
Excellent artwork to complement your Acrostic, that is faultless and original. Does not sound like a nice encounter. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Excellent artwork to complement your Acrostic, that is faultless and original. Does not sound like a nice encounter. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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Thank you robina1978, for your kind and encouraging review!
Comment from Titan Black
This poem, almost makes the reader want
to feel good about being or making a
clumsy move. Your poetic alliteration
was good. And you said a thousand word,
put into a nutshell. Nice job. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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This poem, almost makes the reader want
to feel good about being or making a
clumsy move. Your poetic alliteration
was good. And you said a thousand word,
put into a nutshell. Nice job. Keep writing.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you Titan Black, for your kind and encouraging review!
Comment from zanya
yes awkward - a tricky concept to quantify sometimes but here it has been evoked in appropriate terms with a suitable picture to accompany
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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yes awkward - a tricky concept to quantify sometimes but here it has been evoked in appropriate terms with a suitable picture to accompany
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you zanya!!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
This is so spot on! Great Acrostic describing 'Awkward.' You can't go wrong with Bertodi artwork to compliment.
Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Hi,
This is so spot on! Great Acrostic describing 'Awkward.' You can't go wrong with Bertodi artwork to compliment.
Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you Jax, for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from Charlene0513
It is very hard on that person as they are considered oafish,
ungraceful or even inept of doing even the simplest job.
Creating low self-esteem and confidence.
Charlene
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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It is very hard on that person as they are considered oafish,
ungraceful or even inept of doing even the simplest job.
Creating low self-esteem and confidence.
Charlene
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you Charlene!
Comment from Fridayauthor
A nicely constructed piece in the tight framework of the chore offered. I especially like the final line, a demise of dignity.
It says a lot...
Thank you for the posting.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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A nicely constructed piece in the tight framework of the chore offered. I especially like the final line, a demise of dignity.
It says a lot...
Thank you for the posting.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thank you Fridayauthor, for your kind and encouraging review!