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The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go

Viewing comments for Chapter 3 " Our 'Weekender' & My Music Tuition"
Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!

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Comment from royowen
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I enjoyed your biographical adventures from when you were a little boy, I found this fascinating Geoff, those days seem a lot more simple than today! I guess we all have tales of land sold "for a song", my wife and I have already done it! Well,written Geoff, very interesting, very readable, I look forward to the future episodes! Well done. Roy.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
    Thanks mate had you looked at the re-done First chapter? If so disregard there are carrots on there too hehe.
reply by royowen on 16-Sep-2014
    I'm not sure, I it'll be on your site,Geoff, Roy.
Comment from GracieAnn
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Sankey, I really enjoyed this walk down memory lane. It is full of interesting events and you have made the read quite delightful. Well done. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
    Thanks nearly got caught with a strange publisher today not sure I mentioned it to you but glad I stopped in time.
Comment from GWinterwin
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Another good chapter my friend. Sounds like you had a lot of exciting things happen in your years growing up. Some no doubt good, and some not so good.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
    Thanks Bro I guess you have some jasper chapter and the other onw forget their name on the Farm. We are as we speak doing a major re organize of my Autobiography trying to get everything sequentially in order as to the time the4y happened. Will be offering plenty of "carrots" as in encouragement for reviewers to come over soon! Lord Bless.
Comment from judiverse
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This is delightful. Not only are you a great storyteller, but it's obvious you enjoy telling the stories. You really deal with two subjects, as you say in your title. I think you might want to keep them separate. You could even use headings. You first talk about your music lessons, and then break away to the weekender. Kids have a way of doing what they want, regardless of what their parents want. I enjoyed your references to some of the popular songs. I remember both "The Yellow Rose of Texas" and "Rock around the Clock." Interesting details about your weekender, and the information about water usage was also great. judi

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    thanks friend wuill do as you suggest with the Headings good suggestion by the way. You probably saw all this beforebut we have added to and changed them a bit. Going right through the book with chamges wiol offer "carrots" real soon when I get done with all the reorganizing.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Further edits now done, as suggested by a couple of you thanks so much even found some more spags myself ho hum and added a line or two as well.!
reply by judiverse on 20-Aug-2014
    You're welcome. Your narrative style is just excellent--just like you were talking. That's a wonderful talent. judi
reply by judiverse on 20-Aug-2014
    You're welcome. It's a good idea to get all your ideas down first. The changes can come later. judi
Comment from seaglass
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This is all very well written. The story of the weekender reminded me of my earliest home, made of logs.I was born at 5:00 AM with only kerosene light.

I remember as a small child disliking the smell of it.

I was confused as to why you were punished. Had you failed to practice that piece of music?

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    I think Mum was ticked off I had not done as I was supposed to from the teacher's instruction. I think she had so enjoyed what I had "made up" then to find it was not regulation ha! Are you familiar with "Sparky's Magic PIano?" About a young boy that dreams he is a famous pianist with a talking piano that does whatever he wants.They were given that on a set of old 78rpm records for me to listen to when I was quite young to encourage me I guess. I now have that on CD!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Further edits now done, as suggested by a couple of you thanks so much even found some more spags myself ho hum and added a line or two as well.!
reply by seaglass on 20-Aug-2014
    whenever I start adding, I make more spags
Comment from Selina Stambi
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I really enjoyed reading this chapter, Geoff. The easy, conversational tone makes it very interesting.

The Weekender sounds quite wonderful! I'm sad that your lovely childhood came to such an abrupt halt.

BTW I have the dates for Sydney. Will PM you.

Still trying to find more time for FS! Good to catch up on you.

Sonali :)


the kids and in the mid fifties (overtook) "Rock Around The Clock"

(its - no apostrophe needed) base shaved down, to sit over
the

perhaps a (shortening) of my middle

A time(,) over several days(,) of singing(,) stories(no comma needed) and craft(s).

It was not until the mid to late 60's (that) a new bridge

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    you guys are so hard to please hehe! That its thing again! The base belonged to the tree so the tree did possess the base ok therefore it was it's (possessive) base ha! Hey sis look forward to those dates forget if you are in Canada or US either way been there too long ha! Canada's grammar has probably been corrupted either by the French Connection or its hehe there it is again..proxomity to Uncle Sam! Appreciate you coming by again all these are rolling out in their new places as we have time with changes as well and additions.
reply by Selina Stambi on 19-Aug-2014
    It's is the diminutive for 'it is'

    Its - possessive.

    You've got it the other way around, Geoff! HA!

reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Well I guess we are Down Under ans you are up over hey! Water going down the plug hole the other way too and YOU drive on the WRONG side of the road etc etc. I Presume in Sri Lanka being formerly British Protectorate they drove on same side as us right? Where are those dates? I gues you are the English professor huh! How do you cope with US/Canada messing up English hehe!
reply by Selina Stambi on 19-Aug-2014
    :)):)::)

    You are a scream, sir! I'll get to the dates ASAP, I promise. Have to find the info. Way behind, as always.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Quit the sir Ma'am hehe ok! Geoff here ok!
reply by Selina Stambi on 19-Aug-2014
    k!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Further edits now done, as suggested by a couple of you thanks so much even found some more spags myself ho hum and added a line or two as well.!
Comment from CR Delport
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Reading this interesting story about your childhood sure brings back the memories. Even at each three, every one knew I had no musical inclination :) My mother banned me from her piano. This is very well done.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Thanks mate. Still moving stuff around ok! Appreciate the review.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Thanks mate. Still moving stuff around ok! Appreciate the review.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Further edits now done, as suggested by a couple of you thanks so much even found some more spags myself ho hum and added a line or two as well.!
Comment from c_lucas
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As a youngster I remember many a hiding. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting read.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Hi mate this was a re do of some old stuff we are getting it all together more in time sequence now thanks again! You are in for more suprises stuff you read way back now coming around re organized and more additions in some places too.
reply by c_lucas on 19-Aug-2014
    You're welcome, Geoff. Charlie
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Further edits now done, as suggested by a couple of you thanks so much even found some more spags myself ho hum and added a line or two as well.!
reply by c_lucas on 19-Aug-2014
    You're welcome, Geoff. Charlie
Comment from Jay Squires
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Very easy flow, quite conversational, which is really a boon for a writer (for don't we tend to the verbose?).

Mainly because he was building it;..on weekends. [if you want to use a three dot ellipsis, do not use it with other punctuation (I think you intended a period, but hit a semicolon). Leave a space before the first dot and after the last one.

I enjoyed this chapter, Goeff. I had thought you to be much younger than you are.

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 Comment Written 19-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    He thanks mate we are reorganizing the book have moved a few chapters today already. The advantage you have is coming into it without having been here for all the previous arrangement of the book. Bear with us still changing stuff and I always appreciate reviewers input for improvement. We do take a lot of it to heart, thanks.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
    Jay need to go back and look at your suggested edit....Further edits now done, as suggested by a couple of you thanks so much even found some more spags myself ho hum and added a line or two as well.!