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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is disgusting!!! LOL! I'm going to end up in bed laughing the night away and getting prodded in the ribs for keeping my hubby awake! LOL. I don't know about horror, you can certainly write comedy! Well done again!:)) Sandra
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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That is disgusting!!! LOL! I'm going to end up in bed laughing the night away and getting prodded in the ribs for keeping my hubby awake! LOL. I don't know about horror, you can certainly write comedy! Well done again!:)) Sandra
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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I find it difficult to write horror without being campy.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, bill, you did an excellent job writing this story about the man who ate himself when there wasn't any food around. this is definitely horror...
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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this is very well written, bill, you did an excellent job writing this story about the man who ate himself when there wasn't any food around. this is definitely horror...
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2014
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Thank you, sweet, for the generous review.
Comment from lakeport
Last meal, indeed that's a very imaginary horror story, good luck at the conetst. I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. lakeport.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Last meal, indeed that's a very imaginary horror story, good luck at the conetst. I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. lakeport.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Lakeport, for the excellent review.
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your welcome.lakeport.
Comment from acerisestory
Oh, my God, this IS a horror story! I had to read it to the end but did so with a very uncomfortable feeling in my stomach.
Your story is well written and very descriptive. The accompanying artwork is a perfect enhancemen. Good luck in the contest. Alana
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Oh, my God, this IS a horror story! I had to read it to the end but did so with a very uncomfortable feeling in my stomach.
Your story is well written and very descriptive. The accompanying artwork is a perfect enhancemen. Good luck in the contest. Alana
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Alana, for the excellent review.
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You are welcome! Alana
Comment from barbara.wilkey
YUCK!!!! I do have to say this is creative. I am sure it will do well in the horror story contest. You did write an entire story in a few words. Good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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YUCK!!!! I do have to say this is creative. I am sure it will do well in the horror story contest. You did write an entire story in a few words. Good luck.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Barbara, for the excellent review.
Comment from seaglass
This story had to incubate in a very unusual imagination. d One has to wonder if he had not choked on a finger how much more self-cannibalism would have occurred.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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This story had to incubate in a very unusual imagination. d One has to wonder if he had not choked on a finger how much more self-cannibalism would have occurred.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, seaglass, for the excellent review.
Comment from Judy Couch
It's well written and it's clearly horror. It's rather disgusting. I do have a question. Did he die when he chocked on his own finger?
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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It's well written and it's clearly horror. It's rather disgusting. I do have a question. Did he die when he chocked on his own finger?
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Judy, for the excellent review. Yes, I wanted to include the narcolepsy again at the end, so falling asleep and choking seemed right.
Comment from ozzyart
I do like your story, it's almost believable and I can see why my artwork may have been selected. Thank you for using it and good luck in the contest with your story,
Cheers, Irene (Ozzyart)
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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I do like your story, it's almost believable and I can see why my artwork may have been selected. Thank you for using it and good luck in the contest with your story,
Cheers, Irene (Ozzyart)
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Irene, for the excellent review and use of the cool art.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Okay then, more like one of the Tales from the Dark Side. Interesting premise and pretty horrific. Think the dough boy baked and crispy is a great touch - and standing on a tub of butter....love it. Good luck in the contest. AT=/
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Okay then, more like one of the Tales from the Dark Side. Interesting premise and pretty horrific. Think the dough boy baked and crispy is a great touch - and standing on a tub of butter....love it. Good luck in the contest. AT=/
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, AT, for the excellent review.
Comment from AAud
You sure captured the essence of horror in this short-short story! Great job!
The set-up moved quickly and smoothly, explaining Gibson's condition. The pay-off: the image of a 500-pound man who choked on his own finger will probably haunt me for days. Nicely done! Good thing I wasn't eating breakfast when I read it. LOL
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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You sure captured the essence of horror in this short-short story! Great job!
The set-up moved quickly and smoothly, explaining Gibson's condition. The pay-off: the image of a 500-pound man who choked on his own finger will probably haunt me for days. Nicely done! Good thing I wasn't eating breakfast when I read it. LOL
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you, AA, for the excellent review.